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Professor Adrian Shapiro, Manager

Greenfield Community College

5051 Westheimer Road,

Houston, TX 77056

Dear Professor Shapiro,

It is a pleasure having you as our client. Easy to Be Green (EBG) is grateful for the confidence you have given us with your services. Greenfield Community College is one of our valued clients with a huge campus with numerous renovating projects. As our valued client EBG is glad to assist you with any of your needs. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: Although your opening projects the right tone, it is repetitious. Telling the client one time that he is valued is sufficient.

EBG would like to inform you, that we are currently working with the community to be more environmentally friendly. Any violation of the city ordinance laws would be penalized. Although, your request for a change in the campus’s overall plan would add two more weeks after the date specified in the contract before the beginning of the installation. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: Redundant; an ordinance is a city law. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: This statement assumes facts that you haven’t presented. Don’t wait to specify which request you are referring to.

It is our best interest as well as yours that EBG arrive at a decision that will maintain the terms as laid out in the contract signed with Greenfield Community College, and therefore, the change of the venting location cannot be materialized. Our company is also, keen on ensuring that we deliver our services at a timely manner. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: Wordy; state your position concisely. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: At this point, your position is confusing. Are you against the change because it violates a city ordinance or because it delays the completion date? (Be careful if you are using the completion date as a reason to refuse. Your client is likely to give you permission to delay the completion.)

EBG knows that things may change on a day to day basis, but we would like for you to consider the financial loss that change would affect this project. As you advisor on this project we want you to be comfortable with the decisions that would keep this project not only running on time but under budget. Be aware that we have to be in compliance with city, state and federal regulations and cannot go against this city code to continue this project. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: Here again, you are sending a mixed message: the date and the city regulation.

Unfortunately, we are unable to grant your request for a change in the location of venting apparatus to accommodate a change in the campus’s overall design plan. We hope you will understand our position and continue to provide better business relation. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: Can you think of a “silver lining” or compromise to offer? Remember also that you don’t want to refer to the bad news in your closing. Review the models I gave you. Comment by Adrian Shapiro: This phrase is awkward. Revise for clarity.

Thanks

Sincerely,