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ANNE ROIPHE
Why Marriages Fail
A native of New York City, Anne Roiphe was born in 1935 and earned a BA degree from Sarah Lawrence College in 1957. In a writing career spanning more than three decades, she has produced nearly a dozen works of fiction and nonfiction centering on such matters as alienation, divorce, religious tradition, children's emotional health, and the conflicts arising from the demands of family and the desire for independence. Her many periodical articles reflect these as well as similar concerns. In this essay Roiphe examines the forces leading to marital breakup.
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These days so many marriages end in divorce that our most sacred vows no longer ring with truth. "Happily ever after" and "Till death do us part" are expressions that seem on the way to becoming obsolete. Why has it become so hard for couples to stay together? What goes wrong? What has happened to us that close to one-half of all marriages are destined for the divorce courts? How could we have created a society in which 42 percent of our children will grow up in single-parent homes? If statistics could only measure loneliness, regret, pain, loss of self-confidence and fear of the future, the numbers would be beyond quantifying.
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Even though each broken marriage is unique, we can still find the common perils, the common causes for marital despair. Each marriage has crisis points and each marriage tests endurance, the capacity for both intimacy and change. Outside pressures such as job loss, illness, infertility, trouble with a child, care of aging parents and all the other plagues of life hit marriage the way hurricanes blast our shores. Some marriages survive these storms and others don't. Marriages fail, however, not simply because of the outside weather but because the inner climate becomes too hot or too cold, too turbulent or too stupefying.
3 When we look at how we choose our partners and what expectations exist at the tender beginnings of romance, some of the reasons for disaster become quite clear. We all select with unconscious accuracy a mate who will recreate with us the emotional patterns of our first homes. Dr. Carl A. Whitaker, a marital ther- apist and emeritus professor of psychiatry at the University of Wisconsin, explains, "From early childhood on, each of us carried models for marriage, femininity, masculinity, motherhood, fatherhood and all the other family roles." Each of us falls in love with a mate who has qualities of our parents, who will help us rediscover both the psychological happiness and miseries of our past lives. We may think we have found a man unlike Dad, but then he turns to drink or drugs, or loses his job over and over again or sits silently in front of the TV just the way Dad did. A man may choose a woman who doesn't like kids just like his mother or who gambles away the family savings just like his mother. Or he may choose a
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slender wife who seems unlike his obese mother but then turns out to have other addictions that destroy their mutual happiness.
4 A man and a woman bring to their marriage bed a blended concoction of conscious and unconscious memories of their parents' lives together. The human way is to compulsively repeat and recreate the patterns of the past. Sigmund Freud so well described the unhappy design that many of us get trapped in: the unmet needs of childhood, the angry feelings left over from frus- trations of long ago, the limits of trust and the recurrence of old fears. Once an individual senses this entrapment, there may follow a yearning to escape, and the result could be a broken, splintered marriage. 5 Of course people can overcome the habits and attitudes that developed in childhood. We all have hidden strengths and amazing capacities for growth and creative change. Change, however, requires work—observing your part in a rot- ten pattern, bringing difficulties out into the open—and work runs counter to the basic myth of marriage: "When I wed this person all my problems will be over. I will have achieved success and I will become the center of life for this other person and this person will be my center, and we will mean everything to each other forever." This myth, which every marriage relies on, is soon exposed. The coming of children, the pulls and tugs of their demands on affection and time, place a considerable strain on that basic myth of meaning everything to each other, of merging together and solving all of life's problems.
6 Concern and tension about money take each partner away from the other. Obligations to demanding parents or still-depended-upon parents create further strain. Couples today must also deal with all the cultural changes brought on in recent years by the women's movement and the sexual revolution. The altering of roles and the shifting of responsibilities have been extremely trying for many marriages.
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These and other realities of life erode the visions of marital bliss the way sandstorms eat at rock and the ocean nibbles away at the dunes. Those euphoric, grand feelings that accompany romantic love are really self-delusions, self- hypnotic dreams that enable us to forge a relationship. Real life, failure at work,
• disappointments, exhaustion, bad smells, bad colds and hard times all puncture the dream and leave us stranded with our mate, with our childhood patterns
• pushing us this way and that, with our unfulfilled expectations.
8 The struggle to survive in marriage requires adaptability, flexibility, genuine love and kindness and an imagination strong enough to feel what the other is feeling. Many marriages fall apart because either partner cannot imagine what
• the other wants or cannot communicate what he or she needs or feels. Anger builds until it erupts into a volcanic burst that buries the marriage in ash.
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It is not hard to see, therefore, how essential communication is for a good marriage. A man and a woman must be able to tell each other how they feel and
• why they feel the way they do; otherwise they will impose on each other roles and actions that lead to further unhappiness. In some cases, the communication patterns of childhood—of not talking, of talking too much, of not listening, of distrust and anger, of withdrawal—spill into the marriage and prevent a healthy
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11 If we sense from our mate a need for too much intimacy, we tend to push him or her away, fearing that we may lose our identities in the merging of mar- riage. One partner may suffocate the other partner in a childlike dependency.
12 A good marriage means growing as a couple but also growing as individuals. This isn't easy. Richard gives up his interest in carpentry because his wife, Helen, is jealous of the time he spends away from her. Karen quits her choir group because her husband dislikes the friends she makes there. Each pair clings to each other and are angry with each other as life closes in on them. This kind of marital balance is easily thrown as one or the other pulls away and divorce fol- lows.
13 Sometimes people pretend that a new partner will solve the old problems. Most often extramarital sex destroys a marriage because it allows an artificial split between the good and the bad—the good is projected on the new partner and the bad is dumped on the head of the old. Dishonesty, hiding and cheating create walls between men and women. Infidelity is just a symptom of trouble. It is a symbolic complaint, a weapon of revenge, as well as an unraveler of closeness. Infidelity is often that proverbial last straw that sinks the camel to the ground.
14 All right—marriage has always been difficult. Why then are we seeing so many divorces at this time? Yes, our modern social fabric is thin, and yes the per- missiveness of society has created unrealistic expectations and thrown the family into chaos. But divorce is so common because people today are unwilling to exercise the self-discipline that marriage requires. They expect easy joy, like the entertainment on TV, the thrill of a good party.
15 Marriage takes some kind of sacrifice, not dreadful self-sacrifice of the soul, but some level of compromise. Some of one's fantasies, some of one's legitimate desires have to be given up for the value of the marriage itself "While all marital partners feel shackled at times it is they who really choose to make the marital ties into confining chains or supporting bonds," says Dr. Whitaker. Marriage requires sexual, financial and emotional discipline. A man and a woman cannot follow every impulse, cannot allow themselves to stop growing or changing.
16 Divorce is not an evil act. Sometimes it provides salvation for people who have grown hopelessly apart or were frozen in patterns of pain or mutual unhap- piness. Divorce can be, despite its initial devastation, like the first cut of the sur- geon's knife, a step toward new health and a good life. On the other hand, if the partners can stay past the breaking up of the romantic myths into the develop- ment of real love and intimacy, they have achieved a work as amazing as the greatest cathedrals of the world. Marriages that do not fail but improve, that per- sist despite imperfections, are not only rare these days but offer a wondrous shel- ter in which the face of our mutual humanity can safely show itself.
Discussion Questions
1. State in your own words what Roiphe means when she remarks at the end of paragraph 1, "If statistics could only measure loneliness, regret, pain, loss of self- confidence and fear of the future, the numbers would be beyond quantifying."
2. In which paragraphs does Roiphe cite expert opinion? Why do you think she includes it?
3. What is accomplished by using the short sentence "This isn't easy" in para- graph 12?
4. What additional reasons can you cite for marriage failure?
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4111 Which of the causes of marital breakdown do you consider most important? Why? What are the most essential things that couples can do to help lower the divorce rate?
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• BELINDA LUSCOMBE AND KATE STINCHFIELD
• Why We Flirt • Often writers work together to create an article, especially in journalism but also in
1111 academic settings. Belinda Luscombe has been a Senior Editor for Time magazine since April 1999. She started in journalism at The Daily Telegraph in Sidney, Australia. She
• joined Time in 1995. Her work also appears in Sports Illustrated, Fortune, Mademoiselle, Vogue, the New York Times and many other publications.
• Kate Stinchfield is a productive freelance writer who often writes for Time. Other arti-
cles by her include "Early Bird or Night Owl? Brain Scans Show the Difference." and "The
• Science of Risk Taking."
This article was published in Time in January 2008.
• 1 That smile! That glance! That rapt attention! We flirt even when we don't
• need to. And that can be good. 2 Contrary to widespread belief, only two very specific types of people flirt:
• those who are single and those who are married. Single people flirt because, well, they're single and therefore nobody is really contractually obliged to talk to
ID them, sleep with them or scratch that difficult-to-reach part of the back. But mar- ried people, they're a tougher puzzle. They've found themselves a suitable—
maybe III even superior—mate, had a bit of productive fun with the old gametes and ensured that at least some of their genes are carried into the next genera-
• tion. They've done their duty, evolutionarily speaking. Their genome will sur- vive. Yay them. So for Pete's sake, why do they persist with the game?
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And before you claim, whether single or married, that you never flirt, bear in mind that it's not just talk we're dealing with here. It's gestures, stance, eye
• movement. Notice how you lean forward to the person you're talking to and tip up your heels? Notice the quick little eyebrow raise you make, the sidelong
411) glance coupled with the weak smile you give, the slightly sustained gaze you offer? If you're a woman, do you feel your head tilting to the side a bit, exposing
• either your soft, sensuous neck or, looking at it another way, your jugular? If you're a guy, are you keeping your body in an open, come-on-attack-me position,
• 4 arms positioned to draw the eye to your impressive lower abdomen?
Scientists call all these little acts "contact-readiness" cues, because they indi- • cate, nonverbally, that you're prepared for physical engagement. (More general
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are poets.) These cues are a crucial part of what's known in human-ethology cir- cles as the "heterosexual relationship initiation process" and elsewhere, often on the selfsame college campuses, as "coming on to someone." In primal terms, they're physical signals that you don't intend to dominate, nor do you intend to flee—both useful messages potential mates need to send before they can pro- ceed to that awkward talking phase. They're the opening line, so to speak, for the opening line.
5 One of the reasons we flirt in this way is that we can't help it. We're pro- grammed to do it, whether by biology or culture. The biology part has been investigated by any number of researchers. Ethologist Irenaus Eibl Eibesfeldt, then of the Max Planck Institute in Germany, filmed African tribes in the 1960s and found that the women there did the exact same prolonged stare followed by a head tilt away with a little smile that he saw in America. (The technical name for the head movement is a "cant." Except in this case it's more like "can.")
6 Evolutionary biologists would suggest that those individuals who executed flirting maneuvers most adeptly were more successful in swiftly finding a mate and reproducing and that the behavior therefore became widespread in all humans. "A lot of people feel flirting is part of the universal language of how we communicate, especially nonverbally," says Jeffry Simpson, director of the social psychology program at the University of Minnesota.
7 Simpson is currently studying the roles that attraction and flirting play dur- ing different times of a woman's ovulation cycle. His research suggests that women who are ovulating are more attracted to flirty men. "The guys they find appealing tend to have characteristics that are attractive in the short term, which include some flirtatious behaviors," he says. He's not sure why women behave this way, but it follows that men who bed ovulating women have a greater chance of procreating and passing on those flirty genes, which means those babies will have more babies, and so on. Of course, none of this is a conscious choice, just as flirting is not always intentional. "With a lot of it, especially the nonverbal stuff, people may not be fully aware that they're doing it," says Simpson. "You don't see what you look like. People may emit flirtatious cues and not be fully aware of how powerful they are."
Flirting with Intent 8 Well, some people anyway. But then there are the rest of you. You know who
you are. You're the gentleman who delivered my groceries the other day and said we had a problem because I had to be 21 to receive alcohol. You're me when I told that same man that I liked a guy who knew his way around a dolly. (Lame, I know. I was caught off guard.) You're the fifty something guy behind me on the plane before Christmas telling his fortysomething seatmate how sensual her eyes were—actually, I hope you're not, because if so, you're really skeevy. My point is, once you move into the verbal phase of flirtation, it's pretty much all intentional.
9 And there are some schools of thought that teach there's nothing wrong with that. Flirtation is a game we play, a dance for which everyone knows the moves. "People can flirt outrageously without intending anything," says inde- pendent sex researcher Timothy Perper, who has been researching flirting for 30 years. "Flirting captures the interest of the other person and says 'Would you like to play?'" And one of the most exhilarating things about the game is that the normal rules of social interaction are rubberized. Clarity is not the point. "Flirting opens a window of potential. Not yes, not no," says Perper. "So we engage ourselves in this complex game of maybe." The game is not new. The first
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• published guide for how to flirt was written about 2,000 years ago, Perper points out, by a bloke named Ovid. As dating books go, The Art of Love leaves more
• recent publications like The Layguide: How to Seduce Women More Beautiful Than You Ever Dreamed Possible No Matter What You Look Like or How Much You Make in its
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Once we've learned the game of maybe, it becomes second nature to us.
• Long after we need to play it, we're still in there swinging (so to speak) because we're better at it than at other games. Flirting sometimes becomes a social fall-
• back position. "We all learn rules for how to behave in certain situations, and this makes it easier for people to know how to act, even when nervous," says Antonia
• Abbey, a psychology professor at Wayne State University. Just as we learn a kind of script for how to behave in a restaurant or at a business meeting, she suggests,
• we learn a script for talking to the opposite sex. "We often enact these scripts without even thinking," she says. "For some women and men, the script may be so well learned that flirting is a comfortable strategy for interacting with others."
• In other words, when in doubt, we flirt. 11 The thing that propels many already committed people to ply the art of
• woo, however, is often not doubt. It's curiosity. Flirting "is a way of testing one's mate-value and the possibility of alternatives—actually trying to see if someone
• might be available as an alternative," says Arthur Aron, professor of psychology at the State University of New York at Stony Brook. To evolutionary biologists,
• the advantages of this are clear: mates die, offspring die. Flirting is a little like taking out mating insurance.
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If worst comes to worst and you don't still have it (and yes, I'm sure you do), the very act of flirting with someone else may bring about renewed attention
• from your mate, which has advantages all its own. So it's a win-win.
13 Flirting is also emotional capital to be expended in return for something
III else. Not usually for money, but for the intangibles—a better table, a juicier cut of meat, the ability to return an unwanted purchase without too many questions.
• It's a handy social lubricant, reducing the friction of everyday transactions, and closer to a strategically timed tip than a romantic overture. Have you ever met a
• male hairdresser who wasn't a flirt? Women go to him to look better. So the bet- ter they feel when they walk out of his salon, the happier they'll be to go back for
• a frequent blowout. Flirting's almost mandatory. And if the hairdresser is gay, so much the better, since the attention is much less likely to be taken as an unto-
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11, It's Dangerous Out There
14 But outside the hairdresser's chair, things are not so simple. Flirt the
IIIII wrong way with the wrong person, and you run the risk of everything from a slap to a sexual-harassment lawsuit. And of course, the American virtue of
• plainspokenness is not an asset in an activity that is ambiguous by design. Wayne State's Abbey, whose research has focused on the dark side of flirting-
. when it transmogrifies into harassment, stalking or acquaintance rape—warns that flirting can be treacherous. "Most of the time flirtation desists when one
III partner doesn't respond positively," she says. "But some people just don't get the message that is being sent, and some ignore it because it isn't what they
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One of the most fascinating flirting laboratories is the digital world. Here's
• a venue that is all words and no body language; whether online or in text mes- sages, nuance is almost impossible. And since text and e-mail flirting can be • •
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done without having to look people in the eye, and is often done with speed, it is • bolder, racier and unimpeded by moments of reflection on whether the message
could be misconstrued or is wise to send at all. "Flirt texting is a topic everyone • finds fascinating, although not much research is out there yet," says Abbey. But
one thing is clear: "People are often more willing to disclose intimate details via 4111 the Internet, so the process may escalate more quickly." 16 That's certainly the case on sites like Yahoo!'s Married and Flirting e-mail
group, as well as on Marriedbutplaying.com and Married-but-flirting.com . • "Flirting" in this sense appears to be a euphemism for talking dirty. A
University of Florida study of 86 participants in a chat room published in 41111 Psychology Today in 2003 found that while nearly all those surveyed felt they
were initially simply flirting with a computer, not a real person, almost a third III of them eventually had a face-to-face meeting with someone they chatted with.
And all but two of the couples who met went on to have an affair. Whether the • people who eventually cheated went to the site with the intention of doing so
or got drawn in by the fantasy of it all is unclear. Whichever, the sites sure seem III like a profitable place for people like the guy behind me on the pre-Christmas flight to hang out. 11111
17 Most people who flirt—off-line at least—are not looking for an affair. But
one of the things that sets married flirting apart from single flirting is that it has • a much greater degree of danger and fantasy to it. The stakes are higher and the risk is greater, even if the likelihood of anything happening is slim. But the cock- tail
41111 is in some cases much headier. It is most commonly the case with affairs, ther-
apists say, that people who cheat are not so much dissatisfied with their spouse as • with themselves and the way their lives have turned out. There is little that feels
more affirming and revitalizing than having someone fall in love with you. (It fol- • lows, then, that there's little that feels less affirming than being cheated on.)
flirting is a decal affair, a way of feeling more alive, more vital, more desirable 11111 without actually endangering the happiness of anyone you love—or the balance of your bank account. So go ahead and flirt, if you can do it responsibly. You • might even try it with your spouse.
• A Field Guide to Flirting
Humans observed in a natural mating habitat—here, the Cock and Bull Pub in Los • Angeles and Helm's Bakery in neighboring Culver City—exhibit nearly all the major flirting behaviors, whether or not they're flirting at all. •
1. Open Body Position This come-and-get-me stance suggests the man is neither about to flee nor fight. •
2. Raised Eyebrows Upon first seeing a potential mate, both men and women often • briefly raise their eyebrows.
3. Head Cant Women frequently tilt their head to one side, exposing their neck, • and sometimes flick their hair at the same time.
4. Sustained Eye Contact Men and women both hold the gaze of someone they're 1111) interested in for longer than feels quite comfortable. 5. Leaning Forward Both genders tend to lean in toward people they're attracted to. 1111 Sometimes they'll unconsciously point to them too, even if they're across the room.
6. Leading Questions A man will often ask a woman questions that allow her to • show off her most attractive features.
7. Sideways Glances Often followed by a glance away or down and a shy smile, these • coy looks are a classic flirting behavior for both sexes.
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graph 19. Then suggest examples that illustrate this idea. 5. Why do you think Tomkins calls attention to groups that are unstressed (para-
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• How can people establish these boundaries without sacrificing quality of life?
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• Write an essay discussing the causes and/or effects of some type of stress other than time stress.
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relationships. Develop your paper with appropriate examples.
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• Why We Keep Stuff: If You Want • to Understand People, Take a Look • at What They Hang On To •
Caroline Knapp, a humane and thoughtful writer, died at the age of 42 in 2002. She worked for the Phoenix newspapers as staff writer, editor, and contributing columnist. This
• essay is taken from The Merry Recluse: A Life in Essay —a collection of some of the best of Knapp's writing. • 1 Stuff, stuff, I AM surrounded by stuff. Stuff I don't need, stuff I don't use, but
stuff I feel compelled to keep. Here in my office, as I write this, I am drowning in a sea of stuff.
2 There is the stuff of procrastination—piles of letters I should answer, manu- scripts I should return, memos I should file away.
3 There is the stuff of daily business—interoffice communications in one heap here, this form and that form in that heap there, bills in yet another.
4 But mostly, there is the more generalized stuff, the stuff we all hold on to for inexplicable reasons—the stuff, in other words, of which stuff is made. Old cata- logs of stuff I might want to order someday. Old magazines I might want to read, or reread. Unsolicited freelance articles I might want to publish. And even more useless stuff, stuff with no discernible purpose or future value.
5 On one corner of a shelf hangs a bunch of ribbons, saved over the years from various packages. On another, a pile of old letters from readers that I'll no doubt never open again and never answer. On my desk, a Rolodex crammed
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242 CHAPTER 12 The Essay Examination with numbers I'll never call (the National Association of Theater Operators? The Detroit office of the National Transportation Union? Huh?). In one corner, I even have a pile of envelopes containing transaction slips from the automatic teller machine that date all the way back to February 1988. That's more than three years of bank slips—stuff, pure and simple.
6 Yet in an odd way, a lot of the stuff has meaning. Granted, the significance of a pile of old ribbons may be minimal, but I think the things that people choose to hang on to, and the ways they hang on to them, are quite telling—small testi- monies to the ways people organize their lives on both external and internal lev- els. Want to understand people a little more clearly? Look through their stuff.
7 Several years ago, as I was preparing to move out of an apartment I'd lived in for four years, I undertook my first major purge of stuff, which provided an excellent lesson in the nature of the beast. Historically, I've been a relentless pack rat, the sort of person who keeps vast numbers of relics and mementos in vast numbers of boxes around the house—ticket stubs to concerts and movies; store receipts for goods and clothing I'd long ago stopped thinking about returning; letters from people I'd long ago lost track of; even old shoes. But mov- ing out of that particular apartment was a big step—I was leaving a place where I'd lived alone (with plenty of room for stuff) and into a new apartment—and presumably, a new life—with a man (who had much less room for stuff).
8 Accordingly, the purge was more than a logistical necessity; it also had a cer- tain psychological value. Sure, it made sense to get rid of a lot of it: I didn't really need to hang on to that broken toaster-oven, or that tattered coat I'd stopped wearing years before. I didn't need to save the letter of acceptance from the graduate school I'd long ago decided not to attend. I didn't need the three boxes of back issues of Gourmet magazine. But divesting myself of all that stuff meant much more than whittling down my possessions to a manageable degree.
9 At one point, I remember going through a dresser in which I kept several pairs of jeans that I'd worn during a long and protracted struggle with anorexia. They were tiny jeans in tiny, skeletal sizes, jean with bad associations, jeans with no place in the life of someone who was trying to launch into a healthier way of living. But I'd held on to them for years and, in doing so, had held on to a set of possibilities: that I might one day need those tiny, cigarette-legged jeans again; that I might one day fit into them; and accordingly, that what I felt to be my "recovery" from anorexia might be tenuous at best, false at worst.
10 The message hidden away in that dresser drawer had to do with fear, and, needless to say, throwing out the clothes from that earlier time was an enormously healthy move: it was part of an effort to say good-bye to a person I used to be.
And so it is with most of our stuff: the things we keep stored away in our clos- ets and shelves often mirror the things we hold on to inside: fears, memories, dreams, false perceptions. A good deal of that stuff in my office, for example, speaks to an abiding terror of screwing up, a fear that I might actually need one of those articles from one of those old magazines, or one of those old phone num- bers from the Rolodex, or one of those memos or letters or whatever.
12 Lurking behind the automatic-teller-machine slips? My relentless fear of finance, and the accompanying conviction that as soon as I toss them all out, the bank will call and inform me that some huge deposit I could once verify has disap- peared. Even the pile of ribbons on the shelf reflects some vague anxiety, a (com- paratively minor and obsessive) worry—that one of these days, I'll have a present to wrap and (gasp) there'll be no ribbon at hand to tie it up. My mother keeps a
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• huge basket at home filled with nothing but rubber bands, and I'm sure she holds on to it for the same reasons: it speaks to an absolute certainty on her part that the
II 13 moment she throws them away, she'll find herself in desperate need of an elastic.
We might need it. We might miss it. It might come back in style and we might
• want to wear it again. If getting rid of stuff is hard, it's because it feels like cutting off options. Or sides of ourselves. Or pieces of our history. And, the actual value of
II holding on to stuff notwithstanding, those things can be unsettling to give up. The movie and ticket stubs I'd kept stored away for years in my old apartment, for
• example, reflected good times, happy moments in relationships that I didn't want to forget; the ragged coat was a piece of clothing I'd felt pretty in, a feeling I
• didn't want to lose; the Gourmet magazines held out hopes for my (then sorely lacking) kitchen skills. Even the broken toaster-oven contained a memory—I'd
• bought it almost a decade earlier, with a man I'd been involved with, during a very happy year we'd lived together.
II 14 The trick, I suppose, is to learn to manage stuff, the same way you learn to man- age fears and feelings. To throw a little logic into the heaps of stuff. To think a little
• rationally. Would the world really come crashing down if I tossed out some crucial phone number? Would my personal history really get tossed into the trash along with my mementos? Would I die, or even suffer a mite, without all those ribbons?
• 15 No, probably not. But I think I'll keep holding on to those bank slips . . . just
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• 1. What is the value of a personal reflective essay such as this one for writer and reader?
• 2. What is the real thesis of this essay and where is it located? 3. What role do the several paragraphs detailing the kinds of clutter the author
has failed to discard play in the full essay? Why did she spend so much time describing her stuff?
4. What does the author see as the dominant cause for why people fail to discard things? How does the more general cause relate to many other more specific
• causes?
5. In what ways does this writer sustain a personal and even intimate tone with
• her readers? Is this effective?
6. How do the final two paragraphs fit the essay?
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III This essay provides an excellent example of a personal reflective essay. As a result, the author's discussion of why we keep certain things is not scientific. What
4110 might be the advantages of this kind of essay over a psychological study of why people retain certain items? What are some weaknesses of this kind of writing?
• In the personal reflective essay, writers share with their readers more personal ele-
ments of their thoughts and lives, such as Caroline Knapp's discussion of her past
• struggle with anorexia. How do such intimate revelations affect readers and their relationship with the text?
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Write a personal reflective essay to explain what you think cause some personal behaviors or emotional states, such as procrastination or impulse shopping, for readers who may share those behaviors.
ANNE ROIPHE
Why Marriages Fail A native of New York City, Anne Roiphe was born in 1935 and earned a BA degree from Sarah Lawrence College in 1957. In a writing career spanning more than three decades, she has produced nearly a dozen works of fiction and nonfiction centering on such matters as alienation, divorce, religious tradition, children's emotional health, and the conflicts arising from the demands of family and the desire for independence. Her many periodical articles reflect these as well as similar concerns. In this essay Roiphe examines the forces leading to marital breakup.
1 These days so many marriages end in divorce that our most sacred vows no longer ring with truth. "Happily ever after" and "Till death do us part" are expressions that seem on the way to becoming obsolete. Why has it become so hard for couples to stay together? What goes wrong? What has happened to us that close to one-half of all marriages are destined for the divorce courts? How could we have created a society in which 42 percent of our children will grow up in single-parent homes? If statistics could only measure loneliness, regret, pain, loss of self-confidence and fear of the future, the numbers would be beyond quantifying.
2 Even though each broken marriage is unique, we can still find the common perils, the common causes for marital despair. Each marriage has crisis points and each marriage tests endurance, the capacity for both intimacy and change. Outside pressures such as job loss, illness, infertility, trouble with a child, care of aging parents and all the other plagues of life hit marriage the way hurricanes blast our shores. Some marriages survive these storms and others don't. Marriages fail, however, not simply because of the outside weather but because the inner climate becomes too hot or too cold, too turbulent or too stupefying.
3 When we look at how we choose our partners and what expectations exist at the tender beginnings of romance, some of the reasons for disaster become quite clear. We all select with unconscious accuracy a mate who will recreate with us the emotional patterns of our first homes. Dr. Carl A. Whitaker, a marital ther- apist and emeritus professor of psychiatry at the University of Wisconsin, explains, "From early childhood on, each of us carried models for marriage, femininity, masculinity, motherhood, fatherhood and all the other family roles." Each of us falls in love with a mate who has qualities of our parents, who will help us rediscover both the psychological happiness and miseries of our past lives. We may think we have found a man unlike Dad, but then he turns to drink or drugs, or loses his job over and over again or sits silently in front of the TV just the way Dad did. A man may choose a woman who doesn't like kids just like his mother or who gambles away the family savings just like his mother. Or he may choose a
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• I Cause and effect, like the two sides of a coin, are inseparably linked and together
• make up causation. Cause probes the reasons why actions, events, attitudes, and conditions exist. Effect examines their consequences. Causation is important to 111 us because it can explain historical events, natural happenings, and the actions
• and attitudes of individuals and groups. It can help us anticipate the conse- quences of personal actions, natural phenomena, or government policies. Everyone asks and answers questions of causation. Scott wonders why Sue Wily broke off their relationship, and Jennifer speculates on the consequences
wr of changing her major. People wonder why child abuse and homelessness are on
the lige, and Millions worry about the effects of corporate cost cutting and vio- lence in our schools.
Inevitably, therefore, you will need to write papers and reports that employ causation. Your instructors might ask you to write on topics such as the causes of the American Revolution, the consequences of white-collar crime, the reasons
10 why so many couples are divorcing, or the effects of different fertilizers on plant growth. An employer may want a report on why a certain product malfunctions,
11/ what might happen if a community redesigns its traffic pattern, or how a school
closing might affect business.
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116 Patterns in Causal Analysis IP Several organizational patterns are possible for a causal analysis. Sometimes, a sin- e gle cause produces several effects. For instance, poor language skills prevent col-
lege students from keeping up with required reading, taking adequate notes, and writing competent papers and essay exams. To explore such a single cause—multiple effect relationship, construct outlines similar to the following two:
I. Introduction: identifies cause I. Poor language skills
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C. Can't write competent III. Conclusion papers or exams
III. Conclusion
Alternatively, you might discuss the cause after the effects are presented. On the other hand, several causes may join forces to produce one effect.
Zinc production in the United States, for example, has decreased over the last few years because it can be produced more cheaply abroad than it can here, it is being replaced on cars by plastics and lighter metals, and it cannot be recycled. Here's how you might organize a typical multiple cause—single effect paper:
I. Introduction: identifies effect
II. Body A. Cause number 1 B. Cause number 2 C. Cause number 3
III. Conclusion
I. Decrease in U.S. zinc production II. Body
A. Produced more cheaply abroad B. Replaced on cars by plastics,
lighter metals C. Cannot be recycled
III. Conclusion
Sometimes discussion of the effect follows the presentation of causes. At times a set of events forms a causal chain, with each event the effect of the
preceding one and the cause of the following one. For example, a student sleeps late and so misses breakfast and ends up hungry and distracted, which in turn results in a poor performance on an exam. Interrupting the chain at any point halts the sequence. Such chains can be likened to a row of upright dominoes that fall one after the other when the first one is pushed. Belief in a domino the- ory, which held that if one nation in Southeast Asia fell to the communists all would, one after the other, helped bring about U.S. entry into the Vietnam War. Causal chains can also help explain how devices function and some social changes proceed. The following outlines typify the arrangement of a paper explaining a causal chain:
I. Introduction
I. Introduction II. Body
II. Body A. Cause
A. Sleep late B. Effect
B. Miss breakfast C. Cause
C. Become hungry and distracted D. Effect
D. Perform poorly on exam III. Conclusion
III. Conclusion
Papers of this kind resemble process analyses, but process is concerned with how the events occur, cause and effect with why.
In many situations the sequence of causes and effects is too complex to fit the image of a chain. Suppose you are driving to a movie on a rainy night. You approach an intersection screened by bushes and, because you have the
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411 right-of-way, start across. Suddenly a car with unlit headlights looms directly in your path. You hit the brakes but skid on the slippery pavement and crash into
• the other car, crumpling its left fender and damaging your own bumper. Later, as you think about the episode, you begin to sense its complexities.
• Obviously, the immediate cause of the accident was the other driver's failure to heed the stop sign. But other causes also played roles: the bushes and unlit head-
• lights that kept you from seeing the other car sooner; the starts and stops, speedups and slowdowns that brought the two cars to the intersection at the
II same time; the wet pavement you skidded on; and the movie that brought you
• out in the first place.
You also realize that the effects of the accident go beyond the fender and
• bumper damage. After the accident, a police officer ticketed the other driver. As a result of the delay, you missed the movie. Further, the accident unnerved you
• so badly that you couldn't attend classes the next day and therefore missed an important writing assignment. Because of a bad driving record, the other driver
• lost his license for sixty days. Clearly, the effects of this accident rival the causes in complexity.
III Here's how you might organize a multiple cause–multiple effect essay:
fra Introduction The accident Body Body
1111 I. Causes I. Causes of the accident A. Cause number 1 A. Driver ran stop sign
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II. Effects C. Wet pavement caused skidding
• A. Effect number 1 B. Effect number 2
II. Effects of the accident A. Missed the movie
• C. Effect number 3 B. Unnerved so missed classes Conclusion next day
III C. Other driver lost license Conclusion
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III In some situations, however, you might first present the effects, then turn to the causes.
411 1. Read the following selection and then arrange the events in a
causal chain:
• Although some folk societies still exist today, similar human groups began the slow process of evolving into more complex
• societies many millennia ago, through settlement in villages and
through advances in technology and organizational structure. This gave rise to the second
• level of organization: civilized preindustrial, or "feudal," society. Here there is a surplus of food because of the selective cultivation of grains—and also because of the practice of
III animal husbandry. The food surplus permits both the specialization of labor and the kind of class structure that can, for instance, provide the leadership and command the
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manpower to develop and maintain extensive irrigation systems (which in turn makes
possible further increases in the food supply). . . .
Gideon Sjoberg, "The Origin and Development of Cities"
2. Trace the possible effects of the following occurrences:
a. You pick out a salad at the cafeteria and sit down to eat. Suddenly you notice a large green worm on one of the lettuce leaves.
b. As you leave your composition classroom, you trip and break your arm. c. Your boss has warned you not to be late to work again. You are driving to work with
ten minutes to spare when you get a flat tire.
Reasoning Errors in Causal Analysis Ignoring Multiple Causes An effect rarely stems from a single cause. The person who believes that permis- sive parents have caused the present upsurge of venereal disease or the one who blames television violence for the climbing numbers of emotionally disturbed children oversimplifies the situation. Permissiveness and violence perhaps did contribute to these conditions. Without much doubt, however, numerous other factors also played important parts.
Mistaking Chronology for Causation Don't assume that just because one event followed another that the first necessarily caused the second. This kind of faulty thinking feeds many popular superstitions. Horace walks under a ladder, later stubs his toe, and thinks that his path caused his pain. Sue breaks a mirror just before Al breaks their engagement; then she blames the cracked mirror. Many people once believed that the election of Herbert Hoover as president in 1928 brought on the Great Depression in 1929. Today some people believe that the testing of atomic weapons has altered our weather patterns. Don't misunderstand: One event may cause the next; but before you go on record with your conclusion, make sure that you're not dealing with mere chronology.
Confusing Causes with Effects Young children sometimes declare that the moving trees make the wind blow. Similarly, some adults may think that Pam and Paul married because they fell in love, when in reality economic necessity mandated the vows, and love came later. Scan your evidence carefully in order to avoid such faulty assertions.
1. Which of the following statements point toward papers that will focus on causes? Which point toward papers focusing on effects?
Explain your answers.
a. Most of the problems that plague newly married couples are the direct outgrowth of timidity and pride.
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b. The Marshall Plan was designed to aid the economic recovery of Europe after World War II.
• c. The smoke from burning poison ivy can bring on a skin rash and lung irritation. d. Popularity in high school stems largely from good looks, a pleasing personality,
• participation in school activities, the right friends, and frequent dates.
2. Identify which of the following paragraphs deals with causes, which with effects. List
• the causes and effects.
• a. Color filters offer three advantages in black-and-white photography.
First, a particular color will be lightened by a filter of the same color. For
• example, in a photograph of a red rose in a dark blue vase, both will appear
• almost the same shade of gray if no filter is used. However, when pho-
tographed through a red filter, the rose will appear much lighter than the
• vase; and through a blue filter the vase will appear much lighter than the
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rose. This effect can be useful in emphasizing or muting certain objects in a
photograph. Second, a particular color filter will darken its complementary
40 color in the scene. Consequently, any orange object will appear darker than
• normal if a blue filter is used. Finally, color filters can reduce or increase
atmospheric haze. For example, in a distant aerial shot there will often be so
• much haze that distant detail is obscured. To eliminate haze almost entirely,
• the photographer can use a deep red filter. On the other hand, if more haze is
desired in order to achieve an artistic effect, varying shades of blue filters
• can be used.
Timothy Kelly • b. Overeating, which has become a national pastime for millions of
411 Americans, has several roots. For example, parents who are concerned that
• their children get enough to eat during the growing years overfeed them and
thereby establish a lifetime overeating habit. The child who is constantly
• praised for cleaning up his plate experiences a sort of gratification later on
• as he cleans up all too many plates. The easy availability of so much food
is a constant temptation for many people, especially the types of food served
• at fast-food restaurants and merchandised in the frozen food departments
of supermarkets. Equally tempting are all the snack foods constantly adver-
tised on TV. But many people don't need temptation from the outside; their
• overeating arises from such psychological factors as nervousness, boredom,
41111 loneliness, insecurity, an overall discontent with life, or an aversion to
exercise. Thus, overeating can actually be a symptom of psychological
• surrender to, or withdrawal from, the complexities and competition of
• modern life.
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Ethical Issues
Causation is not immune from abuse, either accidental or deliberate. Imagine the consequences of an article that touts a new herbal remedy but fails to mention sev- eral potentially serious side effects that could harm many users. Think about the pos- sible strain on your relationship with a friend if she unjustly suspected you of starting a vicious rumor about her. Writing cause-and-effect papers creates an ethical respon- sibility. Asking and answering these questions will help you meet that obligation.
■ Have I tried to uncover all of the causes that might result in a particular out- come? A report blaming poor instruction alone for a high student failure rate in a certain town's public schools almost certainly overlooks such fac- tors as oversized classes, inadequate facilities, and poor home environments.
■ Have I carefully weighed the importance of the causes I've uncovered? If a few, but not most, of the classes in the school system with problems are oversized, then the report should not stress their significance.
■ Have I tried to uncover and discuss every important effect, even one that might damage a case I'm trying to make? A report emphasizing the beneficial effects of jogging would be dangerously negligent if it failed to note the potential for injury.
■ What would be the consequences if people act on my analysis?
Careful evaluation of causes and effects not only fulfills your writing obligation but also your ethical one.
Writing a Causal Analysis
Planning and Drafting the Causal Analysis Because you have probably speculated about the causes and effects of several campus, local, state, or national problems, writing this type of paper should pose no great difficulty. If you choose your own topic, perhaps your personal experi- ence will suggest something promising. Topics such as "Why I Dislike (or Like) Foreign Cars" and "How My Father's (or Someone Else's) Death Has Changed My Life" might work well. Nonpersonal topics also offer writing possibilities. For instance, "What's Behind Teenage Suicides?" and "The Impact of Global Markets on American jobs" would allow you to draw on library resources.
The strategies on pages 31-39 can also help you find several topics. Answer these questions about each candidate:
What purpose will guide this writing?
Who is my audience? Will the topic interest them? Why or why not?
Shall I focus on causes, effects, or both?
Brainstorming your topic for supporting details should be easy. If you're dealing with causes, pose these questions about each one:
How significant is this cause?
Could it have brought about the effect by itself?
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• For papers dealing with effects, substitute the following questions for the ones above:
How important is this effect?
What evidence will establish its importance?
Charting your results can help you prepare for writing the paper. To tabulate causes, use an arrangement like this one:
Cause Contribution to Effect
First cause Specific contribution Second cause Specific contribution
For effects, use this chart:
Effect Importance
First effect Why important Second effect Why important
Once your items are tabulated, examine them carefully for completeness. Perhaps you've overlooked a cause or effect or have slighted the significance of one you've already mentioned. Think about the order in which you'd like to discuss your items and prepare a revised chart that reflects your decision.
• Use the opening of your paper to identify your topic and indicate whether
you plan to discuss causes, effects, or both. You can signal your intention in a
• number of ways. To prepare for a focus on causes, you might use the words cause, reason, or stem from, or you might ask why something has occurred. To signal a
• paper on effects, you might use effect, fallout, or impact, or you might ask what has happened since something took place. Read these examples:
Signals causes: Midville's recent decrease in street crime stems primarily from its expanded educational program, growing job oppor- tunities for young people, and falling rate of drug addiction.
Signals effects: Since my marriage to Rita, how has my social life changed?
At times you may choose some dramatic attention-getter. For a paper on the
effects of radon, a toxic radioactive gas present in many homes, you might note that "Although almost everyone now knows about the hazards associated with
smoking, eating high-cholesterol foods, and drinking excessively, few people are aware that just going home could be hazardous to one's health." If you use an arresting statement, be sure the content of your paper warrants it.
How you organize the body of the paper depends on your topic. Close scrutiny may reveal that one cause was indispensable; the rest merely played sup- porting roles. If so, discuss the main cause first. In analyzing your automobile
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mishap, which fits this situation, start with the failure of the other driver to yield the right-of-way; then fan out to any other causes that merit mentioning. Sometimes you'll find that no single cause was essential but that all of them helped matters along. Combinations of this kind lie at the heart of many social and economic concerns: inflation, depression, and urban crime rates, to name just a few. Weigh each cause carefully and rank them in importance. If your topic and purpose will profit from building suspense, work from the least important cause to the most important. Otherwise, reverse the order. For analyzing causal chains, chronological order works effectively.
If space won't permit you to deal adequately with every cause, pick out the two or three you consider most important and limit your discussion to them. To avoid giving your reader an oversimplified impression, note that other causes exist. Even if length poses no problem, don't attempt to trace every cause to some more remote cause and then to a still more remote one. Instead, deter- mine some sensible cutoff point that accords with your purpose, and don't go beyond it.
Treat effects as carefully as you do causes. Keep in mind that effects often travel in packs, and try to arrange them in some logical order. If they occur together, consider order of climax. If one follows the other in a chainlike sequence, present them in that fashion. If space considerations dictate, limit your discussion to the most interesting or significant effects. Whatever order you choose for your paper, don't jump helter-skelter from cause to effect to cause in a way that leaves your reader bewildered.
As you write, don't restrict yourself to a bare-bones discussion of causes and effects. If, for instance, you're exploring the student parking problem on your campus, you might describe the jammed lots or point out that students often miss class because they have to drive around and look for spots. Similarly, don't simply assert that the administration's insensitivity contributes to the problem. Instead, cite examples of the college's refusal to answer letters about the situa- tion or to discuss it. To provide statistical evidence of the problem's seriousness, you might note the small number of lots, the limited spaces in each, and the approximate number of student cars on campus.
It's important to remember, however, that you're not just listing causes and effects; you're showing the reader their connection. Let's see how one student handled this connection. After you've read "Why Students Drop Out of College," the student essay that follows in this chapter, carefully reexamine paragraph 3. Note how the sentence beginning "In many schools" and the two following it show precisely how poor study habits develop. Note further how the sentence beginning "This laxity produces" and the three following it show pre- cisely how such poor habits result in "a flood of low grades and failure." Armed with this information, readers are better able to avoid poor study habits and their consequences.
Causal analyses can end in several ways. A paper discussing the effects of acid rain on America's lakes and streams might specify the grave consequences of fail- ing to deal with the problem or express the hope that something will be done. Frequently, writers use their conclusions to evaluate the relative importance of their causes or effects.
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411 Follow the guidelines in Chapter 4 and answer these questions as you revise your
causal analysis:
411 Have I made the right decision in electing to focus on causes, effects, or
• both?
Have I ferreted out all important causes and effects? Mistakenly labeled
• something as an effect merely because it follows something else?
Confused causes with effects?
• Am I dealing with a causal chain? An immediate cause and several support-
ing causes? Multiple causes and effects?
• Have I presented my causes and effects in an appropriate order?
• Have I supported my discussion with sufficient details?
Have I considered appropriate ethical issues?
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STUDENT ESSAY OF CAUSE AND EFFE
Why Students Drop Out of College Diann Fisher
Each fall a new crop of first-year college students, wavering
between high hopes for the future and intense anxiety about their new
status, scan college maps searching for their classrooms. They have
been told repeatedly that college is the key to a well-paying job, and
they certainly don't want to support themselves by flipping hamburgers
or working at some other dead-end job. So, notebooks at the ready, they
await what college has in store. Unfortunately many of them—indeed,
over 30 percent—will not return after the first year. Why do so many stu-
dents leave? There are several reasons. Some find the academic pro-
gram too hard, some lack the proper study habits or motivation, others
fall victim to the temptations of the college environment, and a large
group leave for personal reasons.
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Not surprisingly, the academic shortcomings of college students
have strong links to high school. In the past, a high school student who
lacked the ability or desire to take a college-preparatory course could
settle for a diploma in general studies and afterward find a job with
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decent pay. Now that possibility scarcely exists, so many poorly pre- •
pared students feel compelled to try college. Getting accepted by some •
schools isn't difficult. Once in, though, the student who has taken noth-
ing beyond general mathematics, English, and science faces serious •
trouble when confronted with college algebra, first-year composition,
and biological or physical science. Most colleges do offer remedial
courses and other assistance that may help some weaker students to •
survive. In spite of everything, however, many others find themselves •
facing ever-worsening grade-point averages and either fail or just
give up. • 3 Like academic shortcomings, poor study habits have their roots in
40 high school, where even average students can often breeze through with
a minimum of effort. In many schools, outside assignments are rare and •
so easy that they require little time or thought to complete. To accommo-
date slower students, teachers frequently repeat material so many times
that slightly better students can grasp it without opening their books. •
And when papers are late, teachers often don't mark them down. This •
laxity produces students who can't or don't want to study, students totally
unprepared for the rigorous demands of college. There, courses may
require several hours of study each week in order to be passed with even
a C. In many programs, outside assignments are commonplace and
demanding. Instructors expect students to grasp material after one •
explanation, and many won't accept late papers at all. Students who •
don't quickly develop disciplined study habits face a flood of low grades
and failure. •
4 Poor student motivation aggravates faulty study habits. Students
who thought high school was boring find even less allure in the more
challenging college offerings. Lacking any commitment to do well, •
they shrug off assigned papers, skip classes, and avoid doing
required reading. Over time, classes gradually shrink as more
and more students stay away. With final exams upon them, some •
return in a last-ditch effort to salvage a passing grade, but by then •
it is too late. Eventually, repetition of this scenario forces the
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5 The wide range of freedoms offered by the college environment can
overwhelm even well-prepared newcomers. While students are in high
school, parents are on hand to make them study, push them off to class,
and send them to bed at a reasonable hour. Once away from home and
parents, however, far too many students become caught up in a constant
round of parties, dates, bull sessions, and other distractions that seem
more fascinating than schoolwork. Again, if such behavior persists, poor
grades and failure result.
6 Personal reasons also take a heavy toll on students who might
otherwise complete their programs successfully. Often money prob-
lems are at fault. For example, a student may lose a scholarship or
grant, fail to obtain needed work, or find that the family can no longer
afford to help out. Some students succumb to homesickness; some
are forced out by an illness, injury, or death in the family; and
yet others become ill or injure themselves and leave to recuperate.
Finally, a considerable number become disillusioned with their
programs or the size, location, or atmosphere of their schools and
decide not to return.
7 What happens to the students who drop out? Some re-enroll in
college later, often in less demanding two- and four-year schools
that offer a better chance of academic success. Of the remainder,
the great bulk find civilian jobs or enlist in the armed forces. Most,
whatever their choice, go on to lead productive, useful lives. In the
meantime, campus newcomers need to know about the dangers that
tripped up so many of their predecessors and make every effort to
avoid them.
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• Use one of the following topics, or another that your instructor approves, to develop a • causal analysis. Determine which causes and/or effects to consider. Scrutinize your analysis for errors in reasoning, settle on an organization, and write the essay. •
1. Reasons that relationships fail •
2. The effect of some friend, acquaintance, public figure, or writer on your life 411
3. Effects of talking on cell phones while driving 4. Effects of divorce on children 411 5. Why you are a major 6. Causes, effects, or both of the popularity of FaceBook 1111 7. Causes of school violence 8. Causes or effects of the popularity of casino gambling
• 9. Causes, effects, or both of widespread cell phone use 10. Reasons that you have a particular habit or participate in a
• particular sport 11. Causes or effects of sleep deprivation
• 12. Reasons that is a popular celebrity 13. Effects of some recent Supreme Court decision or change in
• public policy 14. The effects of environmental concerns on our way of life
• 15. Causes, effects, or both of our hunger for heroes 16. Causes, effects, or both of the high cost of gasoline 17. Causes, effects, or both of drinking on college students 411 18. Causes of procrastination 111 19. Reasons that some students drop out of high school 20. Causes and effects of violence at sporting events
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Although nearly everyone recognizes the role of causation in human affairs, differences of opinion often surface about the causes and effects of important matters. What lies behind the widespread incivility in the United States today? Why are women
more likely than men to leave management jobs? How do video games affect children? What impact does the high divorce rate have on American society? Obviously such questions lack simple answers; and as a result investigators, even when they agree on the causes and effects involved, often debate their relative importance.
Suppose your women's studies instructor has asked you to investigate the departure of women from managerial positions. A library search reveals several articles on this topic as well as a number of reasons for resigning.
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Some women leave because they find it harder to advance than men do, and as a result they seldom attain senior positions. Others leave because
• they receive lower salaries than their male counterparts. Still others leave because of the stifling effects of corporate rigidity, unrealistic expectations,
• the demands of raising a family, or possibly diminished chances of marriage. Although most articles cite these causes, their relative impor-
• tance is debatable. One writer, for example, emphasizes family concerns by
• discussing them last and at greatest length. Another puts the chief blame on obstacles to upward mobility—the existence of a "glass ceiling" that blocks
ill women from upper-level positions along with an "old-boy network" of en- trenched executives that parcels out jobs among its members.
• Once you've finished your research, you're ready to synthesize the views
of your sources as well as your own views. Before you start to write, though, • take some time to consider carefully each cause and effect you've uncov-
ered. Obviously you should ground your paper on well-supported and
• widely acknowledged causes and effects, but you might also include more speculative ones as long as you clearly indicate their secondary nature. To il-
• lustrate, one writer, while mentioning corporate rigidity as a reason that women leave management jobs, clearly labels this explanation as a theory
• and backs it with a single example. As you examine your material, ask your- self these critical questions as well as any others that occur to you: Does any
• writer exhibit obvious bias? Do the studies cited include a sufficient number
• of examples to be meaningful? Do the statistics appear reliable, or are some out of date, irrelevant, or skimpy? Have the writers avoided the reasoning
410 errors discussed on page 152-153 Whenever you find a flaw, note where the problem lies so that you can discuss it in your writing if you choose. Such
• discussions often clear up common misconceptions. There are various pos- sibilities for organizing your paper. If your sources substantially agree on
4111/ the most important cause, you might begin with that one and then take up the others. A second possibility, the order-of-climax arrangement, reverses
• the procedure by starting with secondary causes and ending with the most significant one. You can use the same options for organizing effects. When
• no clear consensus exists about the relative importance of the different causes and effects, there is no best arrangement of the material. 1
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1 Because this type of paper draws upon published information, it is important to understand card catalogs and periodical indexes as well as how to handle quotations and avoid plagiarism. As always, follow your instructor's
guidelines for documenting sources.
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Suggestions for Writing
1. Read three articles on the causes of a major social problem such as domestic violence and incorporate those causes and your own views in a paper.
2. Read two articles that disagree about the effects of a proposed government program such as oil and gas drilling on public land and write a paper that incorporates the writers' views and presents your own conclusions.
3. Write an essay that corrects a common misconception about the causes or effects of a matter about which you feel strongly. Possibilities might include the causes of homelessness or the impact of capital punishment on murder rates in different states.
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Are you • missing causes or effects? • ignoring multiple causes? ■ mistaking correlation for
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Do you have good evidence to claim something a cause or effect?
Decide on focus. Create a table that organizes causes or effects and provides details.
Create a rough outline or plan of pattern of cause and effect.
■ Identify key topic based on assignment or personal interest. ■ Identify audience and purpose. ■ Decide if you are more interested in causes or effects.
Brainstorm and take notes on causes and effects.
■ Read and conduct research. ■ Observe. ■ Talk with others for ideas.
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ppropriate pattern. le cause, of a hain of effects or acts of an event.
Writing a Causal Analysis
Plan.
Write a rough draft.
■ Intro introduces topic, reasons for analysis, focus on cause or effect. ■ Body provides causes or effects with details and reasons, shows connections,
follows pattern. ■ Conclusion may specify consequences, warn readers, evaluate importance
of cause or effect.
Revise.
Gather peer response, test analysis carefully, read more if needed, talk over with others.
■ Does focus on cause or effect fit purpose and facts? ■ Add missing cause or effect, detail, or evidence. ■ Cut parts that don't fit. ■ Evaluate accuracy of account and pattern. ■ Test organization to make it clear to reader. ■ Test for ethics.
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14 Phil was overweight and nervous and worked too hard. If he wasn't at the office, he was worried about it. Phil was a Type A, a heart-attack natural. You could have picked him out in a minute from a lineup.
15 So when he finally worked himself to death, at precisely 3:00 A.M. Sunday morning, no one was really surprised.
16 By 5:00 P.M. the afternoon of the funeral, the company president had begun, discreetly of course, with care and taste, to make inquiries about his replace- ment. One of three men. He asked around: "Who's been working the hardest?"
Discussion Questions
1. Goodman says that Phil was "a perfect Type A" (paragraph 2). After reflecting on her essay, explain the characteristics of this type.
2. Why do you think Goodman doesn't supply Phil's last name or the name of the company he works for?
3. What idea is Goodman trying to present? 4. Unlike the essay by Rubin Erdely, Goodman's uses one longer illustration
rather than several shorter ones. Why? 5. What is the significance of Phil's oldest son going "around the neighborhood
researching his father, asking the neighbors what he was like" (paragraph 9)? Why were they embarrassed?
6. How do you account for Goodman's relatively short paragraphs?
Toward Key Insights
What social values would cause individuals to work themselves to death? In that regard, what is the significance of the company president asking "Who's
been working the hardest?" Are these values basically good, or should we make some changes in our attitudes
toward work and success? If so, what kinds of changes?
Suggestion for Writing
Using one extended example, write an essay that illustrates the lifestyle of a laid-back employee or friend. Your paper need not, of course, feature a death.
CAUSE AND EFFECT immosassam Reading Strategies
1. Identify the main event that is trying to be explained or the event whose effects are being studied.
2. Determine whether the writer is identifying a chain of causes that yield a result or is considering multiple causes for the same event.
3. Be careful. In more sophisticated academic writing, authors often look at several causes that they try to show are not the real explanation. Only after ruling out some key explanations do they offer the explanation that they think is most plausible.
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• Reading Critically 1. Evaluate the evidence the writer gives for the relationship between cause and
• effect. How does he or she prove that the causes) have the effect(s) in question? 2. Try to determine if there could be other causes or effects that the writer hasn't
• mentioned.
3. Writers often confuse "correlation" for causation. Just because something • happens before or around another event doesn't mean that it is the cause of the
event. Just because George W Bush was president when the terrorists attacked •
the World Trade Centers does not mean that his presidency was in any way a cause of the attack. Does the writer confuse correlation and causation?
Reading As a Writer •
1. Note how the writer organizes the causes and effects to keep them clear and distinct. 2. Observe what devices the writer uses to demonstrate the connection between the causes and the effects.
• 3. Examine how the writer pulls his or her ideas together in the conclusion.
110 RICHARD TOMKINS
Richard Tomkins is consumer industries editor of the Financial Times, where he has been
II a member of the editorial staff since 1983. He is currently based at the company's London headquarters, where he leads a team of journalists covering the consumer goods sector and 110 writes about consumer trends. Previously, he was the FT 's marketing correspondent and, from 1993 to 1999, he was a correspondent in the newspaper's New York bureau, where he
II) covered the consumer goods sector. Earlier positions in London included writing about the transport sector and corporate news. Tomkins was born in Walsall, England, in 1952. His 110 formal education ended at the age of seventeen. Before becoming a journalist, he was a casual laborer, a factory worker, a truck driver, a restaurant cashier, a civil servant, and an
10 assistant private secretary to a government minister. He left government service in 1978 to
III hitchhike around the world, and on returning to the U.K. in 1979, joined a local newspa- per as a trainee reporter. He joined the FT as a subeditor four years later. In this selection,
10 Tomkins discusses the time squeeze that many people are experiencing and offers a way to combat the problem.
IP i It's barely 6:30 A.M. and already your stress levels are rising. You're late for a
5 breakfast meeting. Your cell-phone is ringing and your pager is beeping. You have 35 messages in your e-mail, 10 calls on your Voicemail and one question on
1110 2 your mind. Why was it never like this for Dick Van Dyke?
ID 3 Somehow, life seemed much simpler in the 1960s. In The Dick Van Dyke Show, the classic American sitcom of the era, Rob Petrie's job as a television scriptwriter
• Old rather Time Becomes a Terror
Introduction: paragraphs 1-8; compares the leisurely 1960s (paragraphs 1-5) with the time-stressed present.
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• Reading Critically • 1. Evaluate the evidence the writer gives for the relationship between cause and
effect. How does he or she prove that the cause (s) have the effect(s) in question?
2. Try to determine if there could be other causes or effects that the writer hasn't mentioned.
3. 3. Writers often confuse "correlation" for causation. Just because something
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happens before or around another event doesn't mean that it is the cause of the event. Just because George W. Bush was president when the terrorists attacked
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the World Trade Centers does not mean that his presidency was in any way a cause of the attack. Does the writer confuse correlation and causation?
• Reading As a Writer
• 1. Note how the writer organizes the causes and effects to keep them clear and
distinct.
• 2. Observe what devices the writer uses to demonstrate the connection between the
causes and the effects.
410 3. Examine how the writer pulls his or her ideas together in the conclusion.
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• • a member of the editorial staff since 1983. He is currently based at the company's London
Richard Tomkins is consumer industries editor of the Financial Times, where he has been
RICHARD TOMKINS
Old Father Time Becomes a Terror
headquarters, where he leads a team of journalists covering the consumer goods sector and • writes about consumer trends. Previously, he was the FT 's marketing correspondent and,
III from 1993 to 1999, he was a correspondent in the newspaper's New York bureau, where he covered the consumer goods sector. Earlier positions in London included writing about the
II transport sector and corporate news. Tomkins was born in Walsall, England, in 1952. His formal education ended at the age of seventeen. Before becoming a journalist, he was a
1110 casual laborer, a factory worker, a truck driver, a restaurant cashier, a civil servant, and an assistant private secretary to a government minister. He left government service in 1978 to
• hitchhike around the world, and on returning to the U.K. in 1979, joined a local newspa- per as a trainee reporter. He joined the FT as a subeditor four years later. In this selection,
• Tomkins discusses the time squeeze that many people are experiencing and offers a way to combat the problem.
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1 It's barely 6:30 A.M. and already your stress levels are rising. You're late for a
• breakfast meeting. Your cell-phone is ringing and your pager is beeping. You have 35 messages in your e-mail, 10 calls on your Voicemail and one question on
• your mind.
2 Why was it never like this for Dick Van Dyke?
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Somehow, life seemed much simpler in the 1960s. In The Dick Van Dyke Show, the classic American sitcom of the era, Rob Petrie's job as a television scriptwriter •
Introduction: paragraphs 1-8; compares the leisurely 1960s (paragraphs 1-5) with the time-stressed present.
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First cause and specific 11 effects of time stress,
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was strictly nine-to-five. It was light when he left for work and light when he got home. There was no teleconferencing during his journey from the Westchester suburbs to the TV studio in Manhattan.
At work, deadlines loomed, but there was plenty of time for banter around the office typewriter. There was no Internet, no Voicemail, no fax machine, no CNN. The nearest Petrie came to information overload was listening to a stream of wisecracks from his colleague Buddy Sorrell about Mel, the bald producer.
Meanwhile, at home, Rob's wife Laura—Mary Tyler Moore—led a life of leisure. After packing little Richie , off to school, she had little to do but gossip with Millie, the next-door neighbour, and prepare the evening meal. When Rob came home, the family sat down to dinner: then it was television, and off to bed.
Today, this kind of life seems almost unimaginable. The demands on our time seem to grow ever heavier. Technology has made work portable, allowing it to merge with our personal lives. The nine-to-five job is extinct: in the U.S. peo- ple now talk about the 24-7 job, meaning one that requires your commitment 24 hours a day, seven days a week.
Home life has changed, too. Laura and Millie no longer have time for a gos- sip: they are vice-presidents at a bank. Richie's after-school hours are spent at karate classes and Chinese lessons. The only person at home any more is Buddy, who went freelance six months ago after being de-layered by Mel.
New phrases have entered the language to express the sense that we are los- ing control of our lives. "Time famine" describes the mismatch between things to do and hours to do them in, and "multi-tasking" the attempt to reconcile the two. If multi-tasking works, we achieve "time deepening," making better use of the time available: but usually it proves inadequate, resulting in "hurry sickness" and an increasingly desperate search for "life balance" as the sufferer moves closer to break-down.
It was not supposed to be this way. Technology, we thought, would make our lives easier. Machines were expected to do our work for us, leaving us with ever- increasing quantities of time to fritter away on idleness and pleasure.
But instead of liberating us, technology has enslaved us. Innovations are occurring at a bewildering rate: as many now arrive in a year as once arrived in a millennium. And as each invention arrives, it eats further into our time.
The motor car, for example, promised unimaginable levels of personal mobility. But now, traffic in cities moves more slowly than it did in the days of the horse-drawn carriage, and we waste our lives immobilized by congestion.
The aircraft promised new horizons, too. The trouble is, it delivered them. Its very existence created a demand for time-consuming journeys that we would never previously have dreamed of undertaking—the transatlantic shopping expe- dition, for example, or the trip to a convention on the other side of the world.
In most cases, technology has not saved time, but enabled us to do more things. In the home, washing machines promised to free women from the drudg- ery of the laundry. In reality, they encouraged us to change our clothes daily instead of weekly, creating seven times as much washing and ironing. Similarly, the weekly bath has been replaced by the daily shower, multiplying the hours spent on personal grooming.
Meanwhile, technology has not only allowed work to spread into our leisure time—the laptop-on-the-beach syndrome—but added the new burden of deal- ing with faxes, e-mails and Voicemails. It has also provided us with the opportu- nity to spend hours fixing software glitches on our personal computers or filling our heads with useless information from the Internet.
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• 15 Technology apart, the Internet points the way to a second reason why we
feel so time-pressed: the information explosion. Second cause and specific
effects, paragraphs 15 -18:
• 16 A couple of centuries ago, nearly all the world's accumulated learning could the information explosion
be contained in the heads of a few philosophers. Today, those heads could not
• hope to accommodate more than a tiny fraction of the information generated in a single day.
III 17 News, facts and opinions pour in from every corner of the world. The televi- sion set offers 150 channels. There are millions of Internet sites. Magazines,
• books and CD-Roms proliferate.
18 "In the whole world of scholarship, there were only a handful of scientific
• journals in the 18th century, and the publication of a book was an event," says Edward Wilson, honorary curator in entymology at Harvard University's
• museum of comparative zoology. "Now, I find myself subscribing to 60 or 70 jour- nals or magazines just to keep me up with what amounts to a minute proportion
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of the expanding frontiers of scholarship." There is another reason for our increased stress levels, too: rising prosperity. Third cause and specific
• As ever-larger quantities of goods and services are produced, they have to be con- effects: rising prosperity
sumed. Driven on by advertising, we do our best to oblige: we buy more, travel
• more and play more, but we struggle to keep up. So we suffer from what Wilson calls discontent with super abundance—the confusion of endless choice.
• 20 Of course, not everyone is overstressed. "It's a convenient shorthand to say Distribution of time stress,
we're all time-starved, but we have to remember that it only applies to, say, half paragraphs 20-26
• the population," says Michael Willmott, director of the Future Foundation, a London research company.
MI 21 "You've got people retiring early, you've got the unemployed, you've got other people maybe only peripherally involved in the economy who don't have
• this situation at all. If you're unemployed, your problem is that you've got too much time, not too little."
• 22 Paul Edwards, chairman of the London-based Henley Centre forecasting group, points out that the feeling of pressures can also be exaggerated, or self- imposed. "Everyone talks about it so much that about 50 percent of unemployed
4110 or retired people will tell you they never have enough time to get things done," he says. "It's almost got to the point where there's stress envy. If you're not
• stressed, you're not succeeding. Everyone wants to have a little bit of this stress to show they're an important person."
23 There is another aspect to all of this too. Hour-by-hour logs kept by thou- sands of volunteers over the decades have shown that, in the U.K., working hours
• have risen only slightly in the last 10 years, and in the U.S., they have actually fallen—even for those in professional and executive jobs, where the perceptions IIII of stress are highest.
24 In the U.S., John Robinson, professor of sociology at the University of
• Maryland, and Geoffrey Godbey, professor of leisure studies at Penn State University, both time-use experts, found that, since the mid-1960s, the average
411 American had gained five hours a week in free time—that is, time left after work- ing, sleeping, commuting, caring for children and doing the chores.
• 25 The gains, however, were unevenly distributed. The people who benefited
the most were singles and empty-nesters. Those who gained the least—less than
• an hour—were working couples with pre-school children, perhaps reflecting the trend for parents to spend more time nurturing their offspring. le 26 There is, of course, a gender issue here, too. Advances in household appli- ances may have encouraged women to take paying jobs: but as we have already
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maximizing pleasure in minimum time
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Conclusion: paragraphs 32-36; sources of time
stress; author's solution to the problem
Second general effect: buying time
Third general effect: re-evaluating jobs, long
work hours
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noted, technology did not end household chores. As a result, we see appalling inequalities in the distribution of free time between the sexes. According to the Henley Centre, working fathers in the U.K. average 48 hours of free time a week. Working mothers get 14.
Inequalities apart, the perception of the time famine is widespread, and has provoked a variety of reactions. One is an attempt to gain the largest possible amount of satisfaction from the smallest possible investment of time. People today want fast food, sound bytes and instant gratification. And they become upset when time is wasted.
"People talk about quality time. They want perfect moments," says the Henley Centre's Edwards. "If you take your kids to a movie and McDonald's and it's not perfect, you've wasted an afternoon, and it's a sense that you've lost some- thing precious. If you lose some money you can earn some more, but if you waste time you can never get it back."
People are also trying to buy time. Anything that helps streamline our lives is a growth market. One example is what Americans call concierge services— domestic help, child care, gardening and decorating. And on-line retailers are seeing big increases in sales—though not, as yet, profits.
A third reaction to time famine has been the growth of the work-life debate. You hear more about people taking early retirement or giving up high pressure jobs in favour of occupations with shorter working hours. And bodies such as Britain's National Work-Life Forum have sprung up, urging employers to end the long-hours culture among managers—"presenteeism"—and to adopt family- friendly working policies.
The trouble with all these reactions is that liberating time—whether by mak- ing better use of it, buying it from others or reducing the amount spent at work—is futile if the hours gained are immediately diverted to other purposes.
As Godbey points out, the stress we feel arises not from a shortage of time, but from the surfeit of things we try to cram into it. "It's the kid in the candy store," he says. "There's just so many good things to do. The array of choices is stunning. Our free time is increasing, but not as fast as our sense of the necessary."
A more successful remedy may lie in understanding the problem rather than evading it.
Before the industrial revolution, people lived in small communities with limited communications. Within the confines of their village, they could reason- ably expect to know everything that was to be known, see everything that was to be seen, and do everything that was to be done.
Today, being curious by nature, we are still trying to do the same. But the global village is a world of limitless possibilities, and we can never achieve our aim.
It is not more time we need: it is fewer desires. We need to switch off the cell- phone and leave the children to play by themselves. We need to buy less, read less and travel less. We need to set boundaries for ourselves, or be doomed to mounting despair.
Discussion Questions
1. Identify the thesis statement of this essay and suggest why it is located at this spot. 2. The following sentence appears in paragraph 4: "There is no Internet, no
Voicemail, no fax machine, no CNN." What does the structure of this sentence accomplish?
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EH 1010, English Composition I 1
Course Description
Introduction to the basic concepts and requirements of college-level writing. Provides students with the ability to implement effective communication skills via the written word.
Prerequisites
None
Course Textbook
Aaron, J. E. (2010). The Little, Brown compact handbook with exercises (2nd custom ed.). New York, NY: Longman. Lester, J. D., Lester, J. D., Reinking, J. A., & von der Osten, R. (2010/2011). Strategies for writing successful research
papers (2nd custom ed.). New York, NY: Pearson Learning Solutions.
Course Learning Objectives
Upon completion of this course, students should be able to:
1. Define the term “academic writing.” 2. Classify and apply the various elements of the writing situation including the context, subject, audience, purpose,
research, deadline and length, and the document design. 3. Outline good writing practices. 4. Differentiate and distinguish between reading strategies, specifically those related to reading as a critic and as a
writer. 5. Explain methods for developing effective sentences. 6. Duplicate in-text parenthetical citations according to APA style. 7. Demonstrate knowledge of the conventions of the paragraph. 8. Demonstrate the ability to effectively plan and draft a piece of academic writing. 9. Distinguish between and reproduce the skills of revising and editing.
10. Summarize the concept of “disciplinarity” while analyzing and classifying examples of writing in the humanities, social sciences, and the natural and applied sciences.
11. Identify the elements of the essay examination. 12. Examine the conventions of the definition, illustration, cause-and-effect, and argumentative essays. 13. Create a definition, an illustration, a cause-and-effect, and an argumentative essay, incorporating the unique
conventions of each.
Credits
Upon completion of this course, the students will earn three (3) hours of college credit.
Course Structure
1. Unit Learning Objectives: Each unit contains learning objectives that specify the measurable skills and
knowledge students should gain upon completion of the unit. 2. Written Lectures: Each unit contains a Written Lecture, which discusses lesson material.
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3. Reading Assignments: Each unit contains Reading Assignments from one or more chapters from the textbooks. Supplemental Readings are provided in Units I-III, V, and VI to aid students in their course of study.
4. Key Terms: Key Terms are intended to guide students in their course of study. Students should pay particular attention to Key Terms as they represent important concepts within the unit material and reading.
5. Learning Activities (Non-Graded): These non-graded Learning Activities appear in Units I-VI and VIII and are provided to aid students in their course of study. The answer key to the learning activities can be found here.
6. Discussion Boards: Discussion Boards are a part of all CSU term courses. Information and specifications regarding these assignments are provided in the Academic Policies listed in the Course Menu bar.
7. Unit Assessments: This course contains four Unit Assessments, one to be completed at the end of Units I-IV. Question types include multiple-choice, matching, short answer, and essay.
8. Unit Assignments: Students are required to submit for grading Formal Writing Assignments in Units V, VI, and VII. Specific information and instructions regarding these assignments are provided below.
9. Final Exam (Proctored): Students are to complete a Final Exam in Unit VIII. All Final Exams are proctored – see below for additional information. You are permitted four (4) hours to complete this exam, in the presence of your approved proctor. This is an open book exam. Only course textbooks and a calculator, if necessary, are allowed when taking proctored exams.
10. Ask the Professor: This communication forum provides you with an opportunity to ask your professor general or course content related questions.
11. Student Break Room: This communication forum allows for casual conversation with your classmates.
Unit Assignments Unit V Formal Writing Assignment Using the definition essays you read as examples, write a 500-word definition essay about a topic of your choice. You may consider one of the following:
What is a hero?
What is a good parent?
What is an ethical choice? Your essay will be graded on its ability to adhere to the definition essay form. Does your essay attempt to define a problematic concept? Does it add to the discussion of how people might understand the topic? What is at stake in your discussion? In other words, is there a group of people who might be vindicated by your definition? Remember that while you are writing a definition essay, you want to avoid using the dictionary itself. This is meant to be a definition that you create, not one that you copy from a source. In addition, the dictionary is never considered a strong academic source because information that comes from the dictionary and encyclopedias is considered “common knowledge.” Therefore, inserting a dictionary definition into your paper makes it seem as though you are not a strong researcher. You will be graded using the following categories: content, organization, grammar and style conventions, resources, references, and APA formatting. Your essay will also be graded on its development. See the flow chart on page 77 in Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers for guidance. Be sure that you revise, proofread, and format your essay according to APA standards. See the CSU APA Guide. If you use outside sources, you need to use quotation marks for lifted language, as well as in-text and reference list citations. The APA organization/formatting should adhere to specifications for research papers, including the following:
A title page that includes the title of the paper, the name of the student, and the name of the institution (Columbia Southern University);
A proper running head according to APA 6th edition guidelines found in the CSU APA Guide on pp. 9-11;
One (1) academically valid source (see p. 14 of the CSU APA Guide for assistance with finding sources through the CSU Online Library)
A reference page with a centered header of “References” properly reflecting all sources used within the text (see the CSU APA Guide, p. 13 for overall formatting guidelines and pp. 5-7 for formatting guidelines for specific source types).
The most reliable sources for appropriate information on the Internet will come from .gov, .edu, and .org sites or sites specifically devoted to scholarly writing, such as websites of scientific journals. Unacceptable sources are blogs, unreferenced articles, or general information from .com sites. General encyclopedias are prohibited sources and include, but are not limited to, Wikipedia, Encarta, Britannica, and World Book. Please utilize the CSU Online Library for credible and reliable electronic sources. If your essay is less than 500 words, you will not receive full credit, and depending on the word count, your grade may be severely impacted.
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Unit VI Formal Writing Assignment Using the illustration essays you read as examples, write a 500-word illustration essay about a topic of your choice. You may consider one of the following:
The seriousness of global warming
The neglect of the elderly
The condition of secondary education Your essay will be graded on its ability to adhere to illustration essay conventions. Does your essay assert some serious problem or point that needs to be illustrated? Does the essay present an illustration that clarifies the main point or your position on the problem? Does the conclusion connect to the opening? You will be graded using the following categories: content, organization, grammar and style conventions, resources, references, and APA formatting. Your essay will also be graded on its development. See the flow chart on page 77 in Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers for guidance. Be sure that you revise, proofread, and format your essay according to APA standards. See The CSU APA Guide. If you use outside sources, you need to use quotation marks for lifted language, as well as in-text and reference list citations. The APA organization/formatting should adhere to specifications for research papers, including the following:
A title page that includes the title of the paper, the name of the student, and the name of the institution (Columbia Southern University);
A proper running head according to APA 6th edition guidelines found in The CSU APA Guide on pp. 9-11;
One (1) academically valid source (see p. 14 of The CSU APA Guide for assistance with finding sources through the CSU Online Library)
A reference page with a centered header of “References” properly reflecting all sources used within the text (see The CSU APA Guide, p. 13 for overall formatting guidelines and pp. 5-7 for formatting guidelines for specific source types).
The most reliable sources for appropriate information on the Internet will come from .gov, .edu, and .org sites or sites specifically devoted to scholarly writing, such as websites of scientific journals. Unacceptable sources are blogs, unreferenced articles, or general information from .com sites. General encyclopedias are prohibited sources and include, but are not limited to, Wikipedia, Encarta, Britannica, and World Book. Please utilize the CSU Online Library for credible and reliable electronic sources. If your essay is less than 500 words, you will not receive full credit, and depending on the word count, your grade may be severely impacted. Unit VII Formal Writing Assignment Using cause-and-effect example essays that you read as examples, write a 500-word cause-and-effect essay. You may choose to write about a subject of your choice. You may consider the following topics:
A change in the way you deal with other people
A major moment that changed the course of your life forever
A change in the way you understood your country or your citizenship (a war, a policy, a political scandal, a political figure)
Your essay will be graded on its ability to adhere to the cause-and-effect essay conventions. Does your essay follow one of the formats on pages 149-151 of Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers? You will be graded using the following categories: content, organization, grammar and style conventions, resources, references, and APA formatting. Your essay will also be graded on its development. See the flow chart on page 77 in Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers for guidance. Be sure that you revise, proofread, and format your essay according to APA standards. See the CSU APA Guide. If you use outside sources, you need to use quotation marks for lifted language, as well as in-text and reference list citations. The APA organization/formatting should adhere to specifications for research papers, including the following:
A title page that includes the title of the paper, the name of the student, and the name of the institution (Columbia Southern University);
A proper running head according to APA 6th edition guidelines found in the CSU APA Guide on pp. 9-11;
One (1) academically valid source (see p. 14 of the CSU APA Guide for assistance with finding sources through the CSU Online Library)
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EH 1010, English Composition I Course Schedule
By following this schedule, you will be assured that you will complete the course within the time allotted. Please keep this schedule for reference as you progress through your course.
Unit I The Foundations of Academic Writing
Review: Unit Study Guide Learning Activities (Non-Graded): See Study Guide
Read:
The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 1: The Writing Situation, Sections 1a-1d, pp. 3-8 Chapter 10: Academic Writing, Sections 10a-10e, pp. 90-96 Chapter 39: The Comma, Sections 39a-39h, pp. 300-317
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 1: Writing: A First Look, pp. 3-14
The CSU APA Guide (6th edition) Introduction APA General Information: What is APA format and why is it used?, p. 2 Supplemental Reading: See Study Guide
Discuss: Discussion Board Response: Submit your response to the Discussion Board question by
Saturday, Midnight (Central Time)
Submit: Assessment by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Notes/Goals:
Unit II Reading Strategies and Writing Effective Sentences
Review: Unit Study Guide Learning Activities (Non-Graded): See Study Guide
Read:
The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 40: The Semicolon, Sections 40a-40d, pp. 317-321 Chapter 41: The Colon, Sections 41a-41c, pp. 322-324
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 2: Strategies for Successful Reading, pp. 15-29 Chapter 6: Effective Sentences, pp. 100-113 Peter Wing, “Rediscovering Patriotism,” pp. 173-176
The CSU APA Guide (6th edition) Referencing: Citations in Text, pp. 3-4 Supplemental Reading: See Study Guide
Discuss:
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Submit: Assessment by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time) Proctor Approval Form
Notes/Goals:
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Unit III Beginning to Write
Review: Unit Study Guide Learning Activities (Non-Graded): See Study Guide
Read:
Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 35: Sentence Fragments, Sections 35a-35c, pp. 280-285 Chapter 36: Comma Splices and Fused Sentences, Sections 36a-36b, pp. 285-290
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 3: Planning and Drafting Your Paper, pp. 30-53 Chapter 5: Paragraphs, pp. 78-99 Scott Lemanski, “Bottled Troubled Water,” pp. 207-212
The CSU APA Guide (6th edition) Referencing: Reference List, pp. 4-7 Supplemental Reading: See Study Guide
Discuss:
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Submit: Assessment by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Notes/Goals:
Unit IV Revising, Editing, and Considering Disciplinarity
Review: Unit Study Guide Learning Activities (Non-Graded): See Study Guide
Read:
The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 37: Mixed Sentences, Sections 37a-37c, pp. 291-294 Chapter 47: Italics or Underlining, Sections 47a-47f, pp. 359-362 Chapter 55: Goals and Requirements of the Disciplines, Sections 55a-55d, pp. 437-439 Chapter 57: Writing in Other Disciplines, Sections 57a-57c, pp. 448-459
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 4: Revising and Editing Your Paper, pp. 54-77 Chapter 12: The Essay Examination, pp. 216-222 Supplemental Reading: See Study Guide
Discuss:
Discussion Board Response: Submit your response to the Discussion Board question by Saturday, Midnight (Central Time)
Discussion Board Comment: Comment on another student’s Discussion Board response by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Submit: Assessment by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Notes/Goals:
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Unit V The Definition Essay
Review: Unit Study Guide Learning Activities (Non-Graded): See Study Guide
Read:
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 7: Diction, Tone, and Style, pp. 114-135 Chapter 10: Definition: Establishing Boundaries, pp. 165-179 “Reading Strategies,” “Reading Critically,” and “Reading As a Writer,” pp. 251-252 Laurence Shames, “The Sweet Smell of Success Isn’t All That Sweet,” pp. 252-254 Marc Zwelling, “The Blended Economy,” pp. 254-256 Marti Bercaw, “Krumping,” pp. 256-258 Supplemental Reading: See Study Guide
Discuss:
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Discussion Board Comment: Comment on another student’s Discussion Board response by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Submit: Formal Writing Assignment by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Notes/Goals:
Unit VI The Illustration Essay
Review: Unit Study Guide Learning Activities (Non-Graded): See Study Guide
Read:
The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 43: Quotation Marks—Sections 43a-43g, pp. 332-337 Chapter 46: Capital Letters—Sections 46a-46d, pp. 355-359
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 8: Illustration: Making Yourself Clear, pp. 137-147 “Reading Strategies,” “Reading Critically,” and “Reading As a Writer,” p. 223 Sabrina Rubin Erdely, “Binge Drinking, A Campus Killer,” pp. 223-227 Martin Gottfried, “Rambos of the Road,” pp. 227-230 Matea Gold and David Ferrell, “Going for Broke,” pp. 230-234 Ellen Goodman, “The Company Man,” pp. 234-237 Supplemental Reading: See Study Guide
Discuss:
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Discussion Board Comment: Comment on another student’s Discussion Board response by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Submit: Formal Writing Assignment by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
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Unit VII The Cause and Effect Essay
Review: Unit Study Guide
Read:
The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 16: Parallelism—Sections 16a-16d, pp. 154-157 Chapter 49: Numbers—Sections 49a-49c, pp. 365-367
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 9: Cause and Effect: Explaining Why, pp. 149-163 “Reading Strategies,” “Reading Critically,” and “Reading As a Writer,” pp. 236-237 Richard Tomkins, “Old Father Time Becomes a Terror,” pp. 237-240 Caroline Knapp, “Why We Keep Stuff,” pp. 241-243 Anne Roiphe, “Why Marriages Fail,” pp. 244-246 Belinda Luscombe and Kate Stinchfield, “Why We Flirt,” pp. 247-250
Discuss:
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Discussion Board Comment: Comment on another student’s Discussion Board response by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Submit: Formal Writing Assignment by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time) Request to take Final Exam
Notes/Goals:
Unit VIII The Argumentative Essay
Review: Unit Study Guide Learning Activities (Non-Graded): See Study Guide
Read:
The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 33: Adjectives and Adverbs, Sections 33a-33f, pp. 262-273 Chapter 42: The Apostrophe, Sections 42a-42d, pp. 325-331
Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 11: Argument: Convincing Others, pp. 180-215 “Reading Strategies,” “Reading Critically,” and “Reading As a Writer,” pp. 258-259
Discuss:
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Discussion Board Comment: Comment on another student’s Discussion Board response by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Submit: Final Exam by Tuesday, Midnight (Central Time)
Notes/Goals:
the little brown chapter 16 pages 154-157.pdf
16a Using parallelism with and, but, or, nor, yet
The coordinating conjunctions and, or, nor, and yet always sig-
nal a need for parallelism.
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Exercise 15.7 Revising: Coordination and subordination
The following paragraph consists entirely of simple sentences. Use coor-
dination and subordination to combine sentences in the ways you think
most effective to emphasize main ideas.
Sir Walter Raleigh personified the Elizabethan Age. That was the pe-
riod of Elizabeth l's rule of England. The period occurred in the last half
of the sixteenth century. Raleigh was a courtier and poet. He was also an
explorer and entrepreneur. Supposedly, he gained Queen Elizabeth's fa-
vor. He did this by throwing his cloak beneath her feet at the right mo-
ment. She was just about to step over a puddle. There is no evidence for
this story. It does illustrate Raleigh's dramatic and dynamic personality.
His energy drew others to him. He was one of Elizabeth's favorites. She
supported him. She also dispensed favors to him. However, he lost his
queen's goodwill. Without her permission he seduced one of her maids
of honor. He eventually married the maid of honor. Elizabeth died. Then
her successor imprisoned Raleigh in the Tower of London. Her successor
was James I. The king falsely charged Raleigh with treason. Raleigh was
released after thirteen years. He was arrested again two years later on the
old treason charges. At the age of sixty-six he was beheaded.
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Parallelism gives similar grammatical form to sentence elements
that have similar function and importance.
The air is dirtied by factories belching smoke
and cars spewing exhaust.
In this example the two underlined phrases have the same function and importance (both specify sources of air pollution), so they also have the same grammatical construction. Parallelism makes form
follow meaning. Grammar checkers A grammar checker cannot recognize faulty
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not parallel in structure, the sentence is awkward and distracting:
• Nonparallel The reasons steel companies kept losing money were that
their plants were inefficient, high labor costs, and foreign
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competition was increasing.
The reasons steel companies kept losing money were • inefficient plants, high labor costs, and increasing foreign
competition.
Nonparallel Success was difficult even for efficient companies because of the shift away from all manufacturing in the United
• States and the fact that steel production was shifting to- ward emerging nations.
Revised Success was difficult even for efficient companies be- cause of the shift away from all manufacturing in the United States and toward steel production in emerging nations.
All the words required by idiom or grammar must be stated in compound constructions (see also p. 179):
Faulty Given training, workers can acquire the skills and interest in other jobs. [Idiom dictates different prepositions with skills and interest.]
Revised Given training, workers can acquire the skills for and in- terest in other jobs.
16b Using parallelism with both . . . and, not . . . but, or another correlative conjunction
Correlative conjunctions stress equality and balance between elements. Parallelism confirms the equality.
Key terms
coordinating conjunctions Words that connect elements of the same kind
and importance: and, but or, nor, and sometimes for, so, yet. (See 4 p. 196.)
correlative conjunctions Pairs of words that connect elements of the same kind and importance, such as but . . . and, either . . . or, neither . . nor, not . . but, not only . . . but also. (See 4 p. 196.)
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The industrial base was shifting and shrinking. [Parallel words.]
Politicians rarely acknowledged the problem or proposed alternatives. [Par- allel phrases.]
Industrial workers were understandably disturbed that they were losing their jobs and that no one seemed to care. [Parallel clauses.]
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It is not a tax bill but a tax relief bill, providing relief not for the needy
but for the greedy.
—Franklin Delano Roosevelt
With correlative conjunctions, the element after the second connec-
tor must match the element after the first connector:
Nonparallel Huck Finn learns not only that human beings have an
enormous capacity for folly but also enormous dignity.
[The first element includes that human beings have; the
second element does not.]
Revised Huck Finn learns that human beings have not only an
enormous capacity for folly but also enormous dignity.
[Repositioning that human beings have makes the two
elements parallel.]
Using parallelism in comparisons
Parallelism confirms the likeness or difference between two ele-
ments being compared using than or as:
Nonparallel Huck Finn proves less a bad boy than to be an indepen-
dent spirit. In the end he is every bit as determined in re-
jecting help as he is to leave for "the territory."
Revised
Huck Finn proves less a bad boy than an independent
spirit. In the end he is every bit as determined to reject
help as he is to leave for "the territory."
(See also 4 pp. 264-65 on making comparisons logical.)
Using parallelism with lists, headings, and outlines
The items in a list or outline are coordinate and should be par-
allel. Parallelism is essential in a formal topic outline and in the
headings that divide a paper into sections. (See 1 pp. 20-21 and
59-60 for more on outlines and headings.)
Nonparallel
Revised
Changes in Renaissance
Changes in Renaissance
England
England
1. Extension of trade routes 1. Extension of trade routes
2. Merchant class became
2. Increased power of the
3. The death of feudalism more powerful
3. Death of feudalism merchant class
4. Upsurge of the arts 4. Upsurging of the arts 5. Rise of religious quarrels 5. Religious quarrels began
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Exercise 16.1 Revising: Parallelism
Revise the following paragraph as needed to create parallelism for gram- mar and coherence. Add or delete words or rephrase as necessary.
1 The ancient Greeks celebrated four athletic contests: the Olympic Games at Olympia, the Isthmian games were held near Corinth, at Del- phi the Pythian Games, and the Nemean Games were sponsored by the people of Cleone. 2 Each day the games consisted of either athletic events or holding ceremonies and sacrifices to the gods. 3 Competitors participated in running sprints, spectacular chariot and horse races, and running long distances while wearing full armor. 4 The purpose of such events was developing physical strength, demonstrating skill and en- durance, and sharpening the skills needed for war. 5 The athletes com- peted less to achieve great wealth than for gaining honor both for them- selves and their cities. 6 Of course, exceptional athletes received financial support from patrons, poems and statues by admiring artists, and they even got lavish living quarters from their sponsoring cities. 7 With the medal counts and flag ceremonies, today's Olympians sometimes seem to be proving their countries' superiority more than to demonstrate indi- vidual talent. • • •
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Exercise 16.2 Sentence combining: Parallelism
Combine each group of sentences below into one concise sentence in which parallel elements appear in parallel structures. You will have to add, delete, change, and rearrange words. Each item has more than one possible answer.
Example:
The new process works smoothly. It is efficient, too. The new process work smoothly and efficiently.
1 People can develop post-traumatic stress disorder (PTSD). They de- velop it after experiencing a dangerous situation. They will also have felt fear for their survival.
2 The disorder can be triggered by a wide variety of events. Combat is a typical cause. Similarly, natural disasters can result in PTSD. Some people experience PTSD after a hostage situation.
3 PTSD can occur immediately after the stressful incident. Or it may not appear until many years later.
4 Sometimes people with PTSD will act irrationally. Moreover, they often become angry.
5 Other symptoms include dreaming that one is reliving the experi- ence. They include hallucinating that one is back in the terrifying place. In another symptom one imagines that strangers are actu- ally one's former torturers.
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Names of days, months, and holidays
The truce was signed on Tuesday [not Tues.], April [not Apr.] 16.
Names of people
Robert [not Robt.] Frost wrote accessible poems.
Courses of instruction
I'm majoring in political science [not poli. sci.].
Exercise 48.1 Revising: Abbreviations
Revise the following paragraph as needed to correct inappropriate use of abbreviations for nontechnical writing. If a sentence is correct as given, mark the number preceding it.
1 In an issue of Science magazine, Dr. Virgil L. Sharpton discusses a theory that could help explain the extinction of dinosaurs. 2 According to the theory, a comet or asteroid crashed into the earth about 65 mill. yrs. ago. 3 The result was a huge crater about 10 km. (6.2 mi.) deep in the Gulf of Mex. 4 Sharpton's measurements suggest that the crater is 50 pct. larger than scientists had previously believed. 5 Indeed, 20-yr.- old drilling cores reveal that the crater is about 186 mi. wide, roughly the size of Conn. 6 The space object was traveling more than 100,000 miles per hour and hit earth with the impact of 100 to 300 megatons of TNT. 7 On impact, 200,000 cubic km. of rock and soil were vaporized or thrown into the air. 8 That's the equivalent of 2.34 bill. cubic ft. of mat- ter. 9 The impact would have created 400-ft. tidal waves across the Atl. Ocean, temps. higher than 20,000 degs., and powerful earthquakes. 10 Sharpton theorizes that the dust, vapor, and smoke from this impact blocked the sun's rays for mos., cooled the earth, and thus resulted in the death of the dinosaurs.
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147103.::- This chapter addresses the use of numbers (numerals versus
words) in the text of a document. All disciplines use many more nu- merals in source citations.
Grammar checkers A grammar checker will flag numerals be- ginning sentences and can be customized to ignore or to look for numerals. But it can't tell you whether numerals or spelled-out num- bers are appropriate for your writing situation.
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Use numerals according to standard practice in the field you are writing in.
Always use numerals for numbers that require more than two words to spell out:
The leap year has 366 days. The population of Minot, North Dakota, is about 32,800.
In nontechnical academic writing, spell out numbers of one or two words:
Twelve nations signed the treaty. The ball game drew forty-two thousand people. [A hyphenated number may be considered one word.]
In much business writing, use numerals for all numbers over ten: five reasons, 11 participants. In technical academic and business writing, such as in science and engineering, use numerals for all numbers over ten, and use numerals for zero through nine when they refer to exact measurements: 2 liters, 1 hour. (Consult one of the style guides listed in 8 p. 455 and 459 for more details.)
Note Use a combination of numerals and words for round numbers over a million: 26 million, 2.45 billion. And use either all numerals or all words when several numbers appear together in a passage, even if convention would require a mixture.
In standard American English, a comma separates the numerals in long numbers (2600), and a pe-
riod functions as a decimal point (2.06).
49b Use numerals according to convention for dates, addresses, and other information.
Decimals, percentages, and fractions
22.5 3 1/2 48% (or 48 percent)
Scores and statistics
21 to 7 a ratio of 8 to 1 a mean of 26
Pages, chapters, volumes, acts, scenes, lines
Chapter 9, page 123 Hamlet, act 5, scene 3
Exceptions Round dollar or cent amounts of only a few words may be expressed in words: seventeen dollars; sixty cents. When the
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Days and years
June 18, 1985
AD 12 456 BCE
2010
The time of day
9:00 AM 3:45 PM
Addresses
355 Clinton Avenue Washington, DC 20036
Exact amounts of money
$3.5 million $4.50
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word o'clock is used for the time of day, also express the number in words: two o'clock (not 2 o'clock).
Spell out numbers that begin sentences.
For clarity, spell out any number that begins a sentence. If the number requires more than two words, reword the sentence so that the number falls later and can be expressed as a numeral.
Not 3.9 billion people live in Asia.
But The population of Asia is 3.9 billion.
Exercise 49.1 Revising: Numbers
Revise the following paragraphs so that numbers are used appropriately for nontechnical writing. If a sentence is correct as given, mark the num- ber preceding it.
1 The planet Saturn is nine hundred million miles, or nearly one bil- lion five hundred million kilometers, from the sun. 2 Saturn orbits the sun only two and four-tenths times during the average human life span. 3 As a result, a year on Saturn equals almost thirty of our years. 4 The planet travels in its orbit at about twenty-one thousand six hundred miles per hour.
Saturn is huge: more than seventy-two thousand miles in diame- ter, compared to Earth's eight-thousand-mile diameter. 6 Saturn is also very cold, with an average temperature of minus two hundred and eigh- teen degrees Fahrenheit, compared to Earth's fifty-nine degrees Fahren- heit. 7 Saturn is cold because of its great distance from the sun and be- cause its famous rings reflect almost 70 percent of the sunlight that approaches the planet. 8 The ring system is almost forty thousand miles wide, beginning 8800 miles from the planet's visible surface and ending forty-seven thousand miles from that surface.
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UNIT VII STUDY GUIDE The Cause and Effect Essay
Learning Objectives Upon completion of this unit, students should be able to:
1. Compare and contrast the various elements of the cause-and- effect essay.
2. Distinguish between the conventions of the cause-and-effect essay and generate examples.
Written Lecture Part 1: Understand the Cause-and-Effect Essay Chapter 9 of Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers So far you have written a definition essay and an illustration essay. Both of these essays are modes of delivering an argument, each with its own use and effect upon the reader. These modes can be used to make arguments, but it is far more likely that the skills that you have learned from these modes will transfer to a larger work, such as a research paper, which may have many modes within it. Because a research paper contains so many rhetorical devices, such as modes, it is important to understand how each one functions and how the employment of each might have a different effect on the reader. Therefore, before you move on to the final unit, Unit VIII, it is important to add yet another mode to your writer’s toolkit. The cause-and-effect essay is a mode of writing, but because of the way that it is dependent upon causality, it can also be considered a genre. As a genre, the cause-and-effect essay structure can be applied to an entire research paper for successful results. As such, the cause-and-effect essay is a somewhat more complicated form that may draw upon the skills of definition and illustration. The cause-and-effect essay is an argumentative form as well. While it can be construed as purely informational, one must recall that the writer is arguing for a particular causality—indeed, the argument is the connection between the cause and the effect. Play close attention to the patterns of causal analysis (cause-and-effect essays) on pages 149-151 of Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers. Note the variety of ways that the cause-and-effect essay can be structured. Each structure evokes a different response because each one delivers the argument to the reader in a different way and in a different order. Is there one in particular that makes the most sense to you? Sometimes, the subject matter itself will dictate the way that the essay is structured; other times, the writer himself or herself will make that decision based on the desired effect. No matter how you structure your essay, it will have an effect on the reader. To be a good writer means that you are able to control that effect by understanding the writing situation and the most appropriate structure for that writing situation.
Reading Assignment The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Chapter 16: Parallelism—Sections 16a-16d, pp. 154-157 Chapter 49: Numbers—Sections 49a- 49c, pp. 365-367 Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers Chapter 9: Cause and Effect: Explaining Why, pp. 149- 163 “Reading Strategies,” “Reading Critically,” and “Reading as a Writer,” pp. 236-237 Richard Tomkins, “Old Father Time Becomes a Terror,” pp. 237-240 Caroline Knapp, “Why We Keep Stuff,” pp. 241-243 Anne Roiphe, “Why Marriages Fail,” pp. 244- 246 Belinda Luscombe and Kate Stinchfield, “Why We Flirt,” pp. 247-250
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Consider carefully the glossed over notion on page 152 in reference to avoiding the pitfall of mistaking chronology for causation. It is essential that your essay steer away from listing events in direct succession—as though one event following another is causality itself. Just keep in mind that you are looking at the relationship between the cause and the effect, and that relationship is both your focus and your argument; the details of chronology only matter as they affect your explication of that relationship. As always, you should note the flow chart on page 163. Again, you will notice the more complex nature of writing a cause-and-effect essay. Part 2: Reading Examples of the Cause and Effect Essay Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers
• “Reading Strategies,” “Reading Critically,” and “Reading as a Writer,” pp. 236-237
• Richard Tomkins, “Old Father Time Becomes a Terror,” pp. 237-240 • Caroline Knapp, “Why We Keep Stuff,” pp. 241-243 • Anne Roiphe, “Why Marriages Fail,” pp. 244-246 • Belinda Luscombe and Kate Stinchfield, “Why We Flirt,” pp. 247-250
As with the previous two units, you will first peruse the reading guides on pages 236-237 of Strategies for Writing Successful Research Papers. These will give you an idea of how to best engage the essay examples assigned. Below are some previews and questions that you might want to keep in mind as you read. Richard Tomkins’ “Old Father Time Becomes a Terror” makes the case that technology has not given mankind the time that he thought it would. Instead, it has led to an overwhelming “time famine.” Do you think that Tomkins’ conclusions are correct? Are technology, industry, and consumerism really creating less time during our free time? Tomkins wrote this essay in 1999. Do you think that his argument could be even better made today? Note the blue text boxes in the margins of the essay that indicate the structure of the essay. How does the form of the essay compare to the forms suggested in Chapter 9? In her “Why We Keep Stuff,” Caroline Knapp muses on the cathartic feeling that can come from getting rid of one’s “stuff.” She speculates that the benefits of doing so outweigh the struggle to part with this stuff. In many ways, then, Knapp’s essay has much to do with a projection of a potential causality, but the essay is still grounded in the present cause and effect relationship between what will and can happen if someone hoards. How is the structure of this essay different from that of Tomkins’? Is it as effective? How is Knapp’s essay made more complex by its inclusion of two possible causalities? In “Why Marriages Fail,” Ann Roiphe identifies the effect almost immediately in the title of the essay—divorce—and she dedicates the essay itself to developing the causes that lead to that effect. Her concern, then, is not the effect itself, not what divorce is, but how a marriage may end in divorce. How is knowing and understanding the effect up front effective in this essay? How is the structure and premise of the essay engaging, even though there is not much illustration? How does Roiphe’s language itself and the vividness of it act as linguistic illustrations? In their “Why We Flirt,” Belinda Luscombe and Kate Stinchfield identify the biological and intentional sides of flirtation and its purpose in our social interactions. How is this essay a cause-and-effect essay? Why is this essay not just an informational essay? What argument is the essay trying to make? The
Key Terms 1. Causation 2. Coordinating
conjunctions 3. Correlative
conjunctions 4. Parallelism
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voice in this essay is somewhat informal, but much of the information that is presented is scientific in nature. How is this combination both effective and ineffective for the type of essay being written? Read each essay, and consider how each is an example of a different kind of cause-and-effect essay, each with its own structure and rhetorical strategies. How might you model your essay after one of these? Part 3: Unit Grammar Lesson: Parallelism and Number Chapter 16 and 49 of The Little, Brown Compact Handbook with Exercises Parallelism is a grammar skill that most teachers of writing would really like to see their students improve upon because having unparallel sentences not only undermines the content of the students’ work, but also leads to a general confusion about what is being conveyed. In addition, the rules of parallelism are perhaps some of the easiest to learn. Essentially, when you are constructing a sentence with a list of two or more items, then you need to make sure that all items in the list “are parallel,” meaning that they all have the same linguistic structure, are all the same parts of speech, or have the same suffixes. Sometimes parallelism has to do with the use of pairs of words that must occur in the sentence together if one is used. Conjunctively, understanding the conventions of using numbers in your text can enable you to improve the professionalism of your writing by mastering only a few basic rules. In this lesson, you will learn about how numbers should appear in a sentence and when it is appropriate to use the numeral or to write out the word for a number.
References Aaron, J. E. (2010). The Little, Brown compact handbook with exercises
(7th ed.). New York, NY: Longman. Lester, J. D., Lester, J. D., Reinking, J. A., & von der Osten, R. (2010/2011).
Strategies for writing successful research papers (Custom ed.). New York, NY: Pearson Learning Solutions.