Rhetoric in Contemporary Culture

HU1440: Week 6 Forum

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Peer Review

Complete the following tasks:

a. Revise the two paragraphs provided and submit these in the forum.

b. Review at least two of your peers’ submissions and post your comments based on the given

evaluation criteria.

Correct the following paragraphs for plagiarism and alter the topic, supporting and concluding

sentences in order to write a better argumentative paragraph.

1. This paragraph has been plagiarized heavily from the essay “Why We Flirt” by Belinda

Luscombe, in our textbook, found on pp. 541–544. Click here to download the textbook readings.

Flirting is an intentional act and not something that we can’t help because we are programmed to

do it, whether by biology or culture. Some scientists even say that ovulating women are attracted

to men who flirt a lot. It is also claimed that people may not be fully aware of what they are doing.

They say it is not a conscience choice. People may emit flirtatious cues and not be fully aware of

how powerful they are. This is not true. People make a choice in their minds of whether or not to

flirt. When you move into the verbal phase of flirting, it’s pretty much all intentional. If you are

married you should not flirt with other people. According to the author flirting is like “mating

insurance”. You are making sure that you have the best one and you are trying to keep your

mate’s attention on you. This is not something that you should do because you should have

thought of that before you chose your spouse. Also it is claimed that everyone flirts with gestures,

stance, and eye movement. This is not true if you are committed to your spouse you wouldn’t do

it at all. Although it is said that most people who flirt are not looking for an affair, it is dangerous

game. So don’t follow the author’s advice and “go ahead and flirt”. Instead talk to your spouse

about your feelings.

2. This paragraph is heavily plagiarized from “Fatherhood 2.0” by Lisa Takeuchi and Lev Grossman,

found in our textbook on pp. 533–536 in text. Click here to download the textbook readings.

Men who stay at home with their children or spend more time doing things that are considered

“women’s” work should not feel less masculine. They are forging a new idea of manhood.

Unfortunately, society has not made it easy for newly evolved dad’s to feel manly, either. Even

though, according to a study, stay-at-home dads who scored low on measures of traditional

masculinity professed higher degrees of happiness in their roles and in their marriages, with their

children and health. Even still men are looked down upon as if they are “child molesters or losers”

by mothers on the playground. Those who look down on men who play a more active role in their

children’s lives should consider that there is a higher rate of juvenile delinquency, drug abuse,

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and other problems among children raised without a male parent present. So before you judge a

man who stays at home as “wimpy” think about a new definition for what it means to be a man.

Make sure that each paragraph meets the following criteria:

1. A clear, focused argumentative topic sentence

2. A clear stance on the issue presented in the topic sentence

3. Adequate supporting details and evidence

4. Coherence and unity throughout the paragraph

5. Proper APA citation for source information used

6. A concluding sentence

Participation Requirements:

Revise the given two paragraphs and submit them in the forum.

Review at least two peers’ submissions and post your comments based on the given criteria.