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Mohammed AlThonyan
Professor Opotowsky
Is you tube a source of journalism?
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Mohammed:
You identified the 2nd clip correctly as journalism, which has the three key elements of verification, independence and accountability. But the first clip got conflated in yoiur mind with with some other video, so you went off base there altogethger.
The third video was a raw information neighborhood piece, not journalism.
Is this a legitimate example of journalism? Why or why not
Clip 1: Battle on Haifa Street, Baghdad, Iraq
The Battle of Haifa Street was a battle fought for the control of Haifa Street in January 2007. In the late 2007, Logan filed a report about fighting along Haifa Street in Baghdad. The CBS news refused to run the report on the nightly news because the footage was a bit strong. Logan tried to win the support of the public to counter that decision. Logan said that he would be very grateful if anyone had a chance to watch the story and pass the link on to as many people they knew. He wanted the story to be seen by everyone. Logan went on to use some of the Haifa Street material during a sixty minutes report about life in Baghdad under the surge. This is legitimate journalism. According to the power points a journalist is describe as someone who subjects work to verification, makes a conscious effort to maintain independence and is accountable. The primary mission of journalists is to inform the public by collecting and presenting information according to standards that define journalism.THIS CLIP HAD NOTHING TO DO WITH CBS OR LOGAN. IT WAS POSTED, AS IT NOTED IN THE BEGINNING, BY MLF, OR MULTI-LATERAL FORCES, THE ARMY. SO IT WAS POSTED BY A GOVERNMENT AGENCY. AS SUCH, IT WAS PROPAGANDA, AND DID NOT MEET THE “I” OF INDEPENDENCE THAT MARKS NEWS, WITH ITS V I A STANDARD..
Clip 2: Fallujah CBS story
It is a report by CBS on the battle for Fallujah. The report stated that an IED detonation was a lucky strike against US military. I think this is a legitimate example of journalism. The journalists gathered enough information for the media outlet that disseminates the information through a broad medium like the newspaper, magazine, television and motion picture. The participating units were the American forces, the Iraqi forces and the British forces. The journalists asserted that the continuous slaughter in Fallujah greatly contributed to escalating violence on other regions of the country. They also revealed that violence prompted by the U.S. invasion resulted in the assassinations of at least 338 Iraqi’s associated with Iraq’s new government. The reporters gave the public more information about the battle participants, proceedings and the casualties. The journalist practiced verification, transparency, acknowledged when they could not verify and acknowledged the mistakes they made during their coverage. BECAUSE CBS AND THE REPORTER ARE INDEPENDENT OF THE GOVERNMENT’S WAR WHICH IT IS REPORTING ON, THEY WERE INDEPENDENT.. SO THE VIDEO SEGMENT MET ALL THREE CRITERIA OF V I A.
Clip 3: My Iraq Music Video
This video is in the entertainment category. The goal of entertainment is to amuse or engage people during their leisure period in activities which they are passive participants.
I think this is a legitimate example of journalism BUT PREVIOUSLY YOU SAID IT WAS IN THE ENTERTAINMENT NEIGHBORHOOD—WHICH IS IT? because pictures are used to relay the information to the public of what actually happened in Iraq although there is no accountability of the journalist. HE DID GIVE HIS NAME BUT HE WAS A SOLDIER, NOT A JOURNALISTThe information provided is verified by the pictures shown. The journalist does not abide by the code of ethics of the Society of Professional Journalist. That is there is no accountability to the readers, listeners and the viewers. The information given was useful in the end. The video showed the violence that was experienced in Iraq. The video showed how the forces were armed and the equipment used like the tankers and the weapons. The journalist made an effort to maintain independence.BUT HE WAS A SOLDIER This video shows reliable information which is also the truth. THE VIDEO SHOWS ALL OF THAT BUT DOES NOT VERIFY (USUALLY DONE WITH A VOICE-OVER) WHAT YOU ARE SEEING—WHO ARE THE GUNS SHOOTING AT, WHAT HAPPENED, WHERE ARE THE TANKS MOVING TO, ETC. ESSENTIALLY IT PRESENTS UNVERIFIED INFORMATION. IT WAS NOT POSTED BY THE ARMY BUT BY THE SOLDIER SO IT FALLS INTO THE RAW INFORMATION CATEGORY, WITH A BLURRING OF THE LINES WITH ENTERTAINMENT BECAUSE OF THE MUSIC.
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Name: Mohammed Althonyan
Course: News Literacy
Date: 07-07– 2014
Mohammed:
It appears that you were not clear on what the assignment called for. Related to the PowerPoint presentation, it asked you to identify the news drivers, the concepts, that made the stories newsworthy.
Here is the key part of the assignments from Blackboard:
For each story you choose, explain why you chose it and what makes it newsworthy. Name the news driver (or drivers) for each story. Explain the role of those drivers. Who would or should care about this story? Why? There is no need to summarize the stories. Get right to the point: a clear and compelling argument supported by specific examples. If you write succinctly (and you should), 50 words for each story is sufficient.
In addition it is apparent you are having trouble with English and that may account for your lack of following assignment directions. Let me know if you are unclear on any assignments.
Comm331/News Literacy/Understanding the News
NEWS LOG #1 – TEMPLATE
NAME ________________________________SECTION_______DATE ____________
1. Print Outlet: Los Angeles Time
Date: 07-07-2014
Headline: Israel Arrest six accused for killing Palestinian Teen
Byline (author’s name): Batsheva Sobelman
Section and Page number: IsrealWHAT SECTION WAS IT IN? WHAT PAGE?
The NEWS is important as it tells us about the political scenario of the Israel. The administration is making all essential moves to stabilize the condition. The administration authority seems to have arrested six suspects for killing the Palestinian teen cruelly. The minister told to be SAID HE WAS ashamed of the act. There seems to be huge protest against the arrest. The people are throwing bombs and are ready to clash with the police. The president assured that the accused will be treated equally as FAIRLY IN THE CRIMINAL JUSTICE SYSTEM. a criminal.
BUT WHAT ARE THE NEWS DRIVERS—THE THEMES THAT MAKE THIS A STORY? IMPORTANCE, BECAUSE OF THE IMPACT ON THE TROUBLE IN THE MIDDLE EAST. CONFLICT BECAUSE IT INCLUDES CONFLICT BETWEEN THE PALESTINIANS AND ISRAELIS
2. Broadcast Outlet: ABC World News
Date: 7-7-2014
Time: 9 AM
Headline: One person injured in Northeast Georgia Chemical Leak
The NEWS is important as it tells about the environmental pollution that could be harmful for the people but eventually it did no harm.IT DID DO SOME HARM. A chemical leak in industrial area of Georgia injured one person and blocked the road. The person has been admitted TO A HOSPITAL in Augusta, Georgia. The fire department of Dalton said that a reactor of a plant vessel leaked the vaporized form of the chemical. The roads were reopened at 8.40 a.m.
WHAT ARE THE NEWS DRIVERS. YOUR FIRST SENTENCE BRINGS UP IMPORTANCE BECAUSE IT IS AN ENVIRONMENTAL ISSUE, BUT SHOULD ADD THAT INDUSTRIAL ENVIRONMENTAL ISSUES ARE BIG NOW IN THIS COUNTRY.
3. Internet Outlet: Politics
Date accessed: 07/07/2014
URL for story: http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2014/07/07/florida-medicaid-mental-health_n_5563835.html?utm_hp_ref=politics
Headline: The Florida becomes first state to implement new mental health strategy
Byline: Improving health care and low cost medicationTHIS IS NOT A BYLINE.. A BYLINE TELLS US WHAT REPORTER DID THE STORY.
The NEWS is worthy as Florida government has taken great initiative for the people, as they are trying to give 360 degree coverage to its citizen in the field of health care. Florida became first state to implement a Medicaid health care plan for mentally sick people. The plan focuses on improving the health care system and providing low cost services to the citizen. The plan would be beneficial for around 150000 people. It is one of its kind and is in its experimentation stage.
BUT WHAT ARE THE NEWS DRIVERS FOR THIS STORY?
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Name: Mohammed Althonyan
Course: News Literacy
Date: 07– 08 – 2014
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This is a thoughtful and focused essay that used citations to buttress the argument.
I’ve marked some grammatical errors.
The quality of content that gets on the News is really important. Biased facts,AND one-sided opinions can develop wrong opinions or deliver wrong information to the common people who are unaware of the reality. So, there is a limit to which the Editor’s LOWER CASE E philosophy and ideology should have AN impact on the NewsLOWER CASE N . Such a limit is also applicable for TO the content in the News LOWER CASE N under market pressure. Of course, this pressure will be there as media houses need profits to run smoothly.
The editor’s philosophy and ideology should not serve as propaganda. For instance, if a certain editor personally supports the ideology of a particular political party, he should not put up biased News in favor of that party only as he thinks their ITS ideology is right. Added personal opinions will be misinterpreted as facts and one-sided opinion will rise in the readers or viewers. Facts and questions should not be compromised at all for the sake of supporting the ideology of the editor. There should always be multiperspectival NO SUCH WORD – MULTI-PERSPECTIVE PERHAPS News that exploreS the opinions of leaders as well as common people from different fields of work on a particular policy (Herbert,GANS (USE AUTHOR’S LAST NAME, NOT FIRST NAME IN CITATIONS)_ 2004).GOOD CITE
To function smoothly, media houses have to make profits. These profits can be made only by increasing the audience size. But this should not be done by manipulating facts to attract audiences. In fact, media houses should have and they mostly have different editorial and business divisions. Business divisions should only be allowed to make proposals on what is to be put up on News to earn more and more profits. Adding biased facts and personal opinions to the stories as if they are facts to lure audiences should be avoided. News should be presented in a way that people should develop their own opinion after reading the true facts. For presenting opinions of the journalists and the ideology of the editor there should be and there are “OP ED” sections in the print media and separate shows on television. This is done to maintain the credibility of the media (Herbert,GANS 2004).
I believe that to put on PUBLISH OR BROADCAST News that is worthY is only in the hands of the editor but the editor should take this as a big responsibility. If a journalist writes a story that includes his/her own personal opinions or ideology, he should change some lines to make it neutral. Along with that the editor himself should take care of the thing that his personal beliefs and ideology should not reflect in the News stories. Moreover, I believe that whether to publish a News for profit or not is also at the hands of the Editor only. He can get proposals for this from the business division but the final call is of the editor. Hence, I believe, the extent to which an editor’s judgment or market forces should decide what is or is not news are not two different things. Everything is in the hands of editor. So, the editor should allow News that is of importance to the nation, to the world, that are IS not biased, to maintain the credibility of the press.
References
Herbert J. Gans. 2004. DecidingWhat's News. Northwestern University Press, Evanston, Illinois. ISBN 0-8101-2237-5. Retrieved online from http://f3.tiera.ru/1/genesis/655-659/658000/a5277279f476b78ce6e1a1cc90843946
AlThonyan g-7.docx
Katrina aftermath
Running head: Katrina aftermath
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Mohammed:
It appears you address three questions—verification, indirect evidence and opinion, even though the assignment asked you to limit yourself to two. But aside from that, the writing is often unclear in meaning. This is dues to grammar, misuse of words and poor logic.
I know English is not your first language. But for this English concentration course you must be able to write comprehensively.
Katrina aftermath
Professor Opotowsky
Mohammed AlThonyan
07/21/2014
In producing the original story the reporters have used the following stepsWHAT FOLLOWING STEPS, WHERE ARE THEY? , the used very effective question asking so that they can get the correct information. Therefore, those questions helped them so much because they were able to take very accurate notes in producing the original story. After that they were able to gather very important and helpful source documents in compiling the story. They then questioned all the information that they had gathered in order to know whether it will be effective. After that step they then verified the information to see if it is effective and removing the errors available. Finally they checked the content that they had and TO see if it contains the fact in producing the original story.
Yes there was usually transparency practiced in the story that really helped readers to better understand the truthfulness of the story. There was a search that was usually done by the rescue team where dead bodies were usually seen in the convectional centre.HOW IS THAT RELATED TO REPORTER’S TRANSPARENCY? There was a very high media coverageWHAT DOES THAT MEAN? that was actually enabledWHAT DOES THAT MEAN? so that all the situations WHAT SITUATIONS?are usually covered to help the readers available to usually have an effective definition of the story.UNCLEAR WHAT YOU ARE TRYING TO SAY This is what shows the situations where blood and bodies are seen by the rescue mission. After the publication of the story they took the appropriate actions usually very consistent with the law and provided the information to the public. This is seen on the page 1 of the story.WHAT STORY? UNCLEAR WHETHER YOU ARE TALKING ABOUT THE FIRST STORY OR THE MAGAZINE ARTICLE.
The example of the indirect evidence is where Dwyer was talking about murder and rape,RUN-ON SENTENCES there was also the violence thus saying that some reports were seen to be somehow not eligible NO ELIGIBLE FOR WHAT?and should not be reported. These were usually valuable BUT THE PREVIOUS SENTENCE SAYS THEY SHOULD NOT HAVE BEEN USED?? because they were very important in assisting those news consumers in getting the concept of what exactly had occurred. They also cannot be traced and usually no one can be a witness of such issues and also no one was able in discounting original thesisWHAT ORIGINAL THESIS??. They also ARE useful in giving the citizens full satisfaction of the issues.WHAT DOES THAT MEAN? This is usually elaborated by reporter Dwyer in the story where he stated that these issues are not effective when it comes to reporting WHAT ISSUES?
The examples of the opinion that came out in the story were murder, rape and the issue of violence in the examination of the coverage. These opinions were actually very helpful to the news consumers by engaging them to get reasonS of what has happened,RUN-ON SENTENCES this is because they usually showed the truth of what lies in the story and to make the information credible. However, the reason for these opinions was actually to show the originality of the story.HOW DOES THE OPINION SHOW THE ORIGINS OF THE STORY They were also in helping to prevent such issues that may usually arise in future to the residents. They are also very helpful to the news consumers by actually giving them a clear satisfaction of the story.WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY SATISFACTION? It is well illustrated in the story where the reporters explained that there were the issues of murder and rape that took place but in real sense it didn’t happen.
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Mohammed AlThonyan
The Manager,
Google China,
Tsinghua Science Park Bldg 6
No. 1 Zhongguancun East Road
Haidian District
Beijing 100084
January 14, 2010
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Mohammed:
For starters, your using that address for Google was impressive. Your argument is clear with some good specific backing such as the dollar loss (although that and other facts and claims should have a citation from your readings –see citation section on Blackboard).
This would have been stronger if it noted what the Chinese netizens stand to lose by Google leaving , what the Chinese government would stand to lose and why the government censors in the first place. A good argument should take into account the consequences as specifics as they can be, of an action and an inaction.
Dear Professor Opotowsky,
Yesterday I read the news about Google shutting down its offices in China. Being a netizen I got really worried about this. I don’t think this will be the right step forward either in the benefit of the company or the 300 million users.
Google has always been a name to be relied upon throughout the world. After starting its operations in 2006, Google has evolved a lot. It might be the case that the Chinese restrictions to the search results is not in synchronization with the companies motto of “Don’t be evil” but there are other factors that should be kept in mind while taking such a big decision.
If Google steps out of China, the internet users will be left out with no choice but to use Baidu.com as a search engine. The people of chinaCAP C will be devoid of state of the art Google technologies. Users have already suffered with the Chinese government banning Youtube. It is a technology that the world uses but China doesn’t. People are already a step behind because of Chinese restriction on Google services; they will suffer more if it calls a shut down in China.
Moreover the company will also suffer. It has $300 million revenue from the Chinese market. A search engine that totally earns from ads, should remember that advertisement market is bigger in China than in the United States. Shutting down the offices will only remove this $300mn from the company’s worldwide revenue which will be a huge setback. It will leave the 700 Google employees unemployed, most of whom are software engineers who extract hefty packages.WHAT’S THAT MEAN—HEFTY PACKAGES?
In spite INSTEAD of taking this huge step the company should make HOLD talks with the Chinese government to make a settlement that will benefit both the company and then 300 million Chinese internet users. Although the Chinese government will never allow Google to show results on the Tiananmen Square massacre where it killed hundreds of civilians peacefully protesting against the then corrupt government, but they may reach on an agreement to keep up a balanced show and a strong cyber crime law within China to curb cyber attacks on Google’s servers to extract sensitive information.
I hope that Google will keep in mind the sentiments of its millions of users and its own profits IN I mind before taking this huge decision.
Thank You.
Yours sincerely,
A Google admirer.
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Mohammed AlThonyan
ENG-329
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Mohammed:
You apparently were unclear on the assignment which asked for you to compare a NEWS story to an opinion piece on the same topic. The NEWS choice you made was not news, but as a column, clearly labeled, by the columnist Paul Krugman. So your critique of it was off base. The opinion piece you chose actually was a news story from Politico. You describe its attributes well.
But the mixup reflects a fundamental misunderstanding, or confusion.
1. News Outlet: The New York Times Date: July 13, 2014
URL: http://www.nytimes.com/2014/07/14/opinion/paul-krugman-obamacare-fails-to-fail.html
Headline: Obamacare Fails to Fail
Byline: Paul Krugman
1. Opinion Outlet: Politico.com Date: July 10, 2014
URL: http://www.politico.com/story/2014/07/health-coverage-growing-under-obamacare-108785.html
Headline: More signs that health coverage is growing under Obamacare
Byline: Sarah Wheaton
Discussion
The two articles address the issue of the performance of The Affordable Care Act popularly referred to as Obamacare. The two articles are similar in that they approach the topic from a perspective which seeks to evaluate whether The Affordable Care Act has achieved its goal as a legislative mechanism for health reform. They are also similar in that they provide evidence to show that The Affordable Care Act has been successful in reducing the number of uninsured Americans. In fact, the two articles quote similar studies (studies by Gallup, the Urban Institute and the Commonwealth Fund) as evidence of Obamacare’s positive impact. However, there is a fundamental difference between the two articles with regards to the types of coverage. While Wheaton dwells on reporting and presentation of facts from studies, Krugman’s piece is an editorial opinion that is resolute on justifying his opinion.EXAMPLES NEEDED
In the news fraternity
THAT COULD BE SEEN AS A SEXISM REFERENCE, AND INACCURATE SINCE THERE ARE MANY WOMEN JOURNALISTS, objectivity and presentation of material without distortion of facts are values that are held on to very dearly. As such, the news style of coverage is applauded for offering nothing but the truth to the news consumer, who is left with the task of forming his/her own opinion. However, we may find fault in it in the sense that it is too flat and may fail to be instigative and thought provoking. On the other hand, the opinion style of news coverage offers the reader with enough insight, albeit at the expense of objectivity. HOW DOES THIS APPLY TO THE TWO ARTICLES, WHICH WAS THE STATED PURPOSE OF THE ASSIGNMENT
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Running Head: COOPER 1
Cooper Assignment
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Mohammed AlThonyan
July 29, 2014
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Mohammed:
It is apparent that your command of English is not far enough along for you to follow this complicated story. That is moist evident in your missing the key step in the gathering of direct evidence. That step was finding the motorcyclist who was seen picking up the girl and then bringing her to the hospital. It is important because the motorcyclist’s actions led to what turned out to be false assertion that she had been abducted.
Also, you should make a distinction between the actions of a reporter, saying going to a source, and the information the source gives. The reporter’s action is not direct or indirect. But the information the reporter gets may be direct or indirect. That’s what we as news consumers have to judge in deciding whether a story is credible.
Cooper Assignment
The news of abduction was first broken to Cooper by his producer. In the first instance itself Cooper tries to find the authenticity of the report by asking his editor who were the people who have been reporting the news of abduction. His producer responds “It’s being reported all over the place.” This is the first place where he tries to verify the reports of human trafficking in the Tsunami-hit areas. This is an indirect approach of verification wherein he tries checking the legitimacy of the reports from the producer who brought it to Cooper’s knowledge.
However, after getting a lead he tries to scan thorough the media reports wherein the stories are being reported. He soon finds out that the news lack adequate substantiality. As he quotes “…but when we start checking the kidnapping story being reported on other networks and papers, it seems slim on facts.” This is an indirect method of trying to establish the truth of facts rather than actually looking for the facts.
In the third incident he restores ??? WORD CHOIICE??to the account provided by a Sri Lankan newspaper correspondent who was hired by Cooper to help him around during his trip. He shows them a new piece which reports of kidnapping of children by a man on a motorcycle. Here also, cooper’s CAP C approach has been indirect as he depended upon an account from a third person rather than trying to investigate the case by approaching the local police or the parents of the allegedly kidnapped children.
It is in the fourth instance that Cooper tries to establish the truth of the matter in a direct manner. He visits the police station to find out any cases registered regarding abduction of any child. He finds two such cases registered in the police station but neither of them has been confirmed. Here it is a direct case of investigation into the matter and the information collected is direct. KEEP IN MIND IT IS THE EVIDENCE OR INFORMATION THAT IS INDIRECT OR DIRECT AND NOT THE SOURCE ITSELF. IN THE CASE OF POLICE, WHO REPORTED ONLY TWO CLAIMS OF KIDNAPPINGS, THE EVIDENCE THEY PROVIDE IS INDIRECT BECAUSE THEY HAVE JUST HEARD ABOUT IT FROM SOMEONE ELSE—THEY HAVE NOT YET GATHERED ANY FIRST-HAND EVIDENCE THAT THEY HAVE SEEN THEMSELVES. EVEN THOUGH POLICE HAVE INDIRECT EVIDENCE TO GIVE HIM AT THIS POINT, THEY ARE AUTHORITATIVE WHICH LENDS CREDENCE TO WHAT THEY SAY.
In fifth cases THE FIFTH STEP he tries to follow the story and visits the family members of the two children whose abduction cases have been registered in the police station. He visits the aunt of the two missing children to gather inputs regarding the incident which could have led to their alleged abduction.WHAT DOES SHE SAY, AND IS HER EVIDENCE DIRECT OR INDIRECT? After getting required inputs he visits the place of accident to verify the case. After getting hold of the hotel manager at he site where the family along with the two children was washed away by Tsunami, Cooper discovers that both of them are actually dead.KEY STEPS WERE MISUNDERSTOOD. THE HOTEL MANAGER SAID HE THOUGHT THE KIDS WERE DEAD, ESPECIALLY THE BOY, BUT ALSO REPORTED THAT A MAN ON A MOTORCYCLE PICKED UP THE GIRL AND DROVE AWAY. THEN COOPER TRACKED DOWN THE MOTORCYCLIST, WHO HAD BEEN ACCUSED IN THE NEWSPAPER ARTICLE OF ABDUCTING T GIRL, AND SAID HE TRIED TO RESUSITATE HER, AND BROUGHT HER TO THE HOSPITAL BUT SHE DIED.. COOPER THEN WENT TO THE HOSPITAL.
To validate this data he tracks down the hospital administrator who later on confirmed that one of them was brought dead to the hospital.WAS THAT DIRECT OR INDIRECT EVIDENCE? He also tried to follow the case to the hilt and went to the morgue to locate the body. This again is a case of direct collection of information regarding the case. Here Cooper has shown great journalistic perseverance to unearth the truth behind the case and test the hypothesis of whether there has been abduction of children in reality. He went on to discover, that contrary to the media reports there have been no substantial circumstantial evidence to prove that children were actually abducted or trafficked from the face of a unfortunate natural disaster.
Though Cooper has followed the case to the hilt, factually the girl’s death cannot be established, as the body was not identified by him. Though hospital authorities and the hotel administrator provided certain valuable facts regarding the girl’s death, the body was not found. But if one has to believe the witnesses in this anecdote then it can be established that the girl was dead. However, the caveat here is that, even the newspapers were grossly wrong in reporting a man abducting a child in a motorcycle. In such a scenario any evidence should be taken with a pinch of salt.
The alternate aspects which could be reported are that of the administrative weakness that the country suffers in the face of a natural calamity that the dead are not given proper burial.GOOD POINT There is no mechanism to track down someone amidst such large scale devastation of human life and property. Surprisingly, while Cooper’s arrival at the airport; he noticed no major urgency on the part of government authorities to mobilize enough support for rescue of lives. Moreover, a story can be developed on the life the supposedly dead girl and how she became untraceable in the heaps of dead bodies. Furthermore, the role of local media in this panic situation could be highlighted. The case of abduction was clearly a case of irresponsible journalism without any substantial research and was aimed at sensationalizing an issue without trying to find out the truth.
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Eng329 Walter Reed Assignment
Deconstructing The Washington Post’s Walter Reed Army hospital Story
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Mohammad:
Good job overall. Go over all the comments (and on other assignments as well) to make sure you understand the comments in preparation for the final exam.
1. Upon reading the said paragraph, it is evident that the reporters are using the News Literacy concept termed as “Says who” so as to tell the readers the manner in which they got to source the information featured within the article. It is for that reason that within the paragraphs it is clearly stated the information featured in the article was compiled by a duo of Washington Post reports after they visited the Walter Reed hospital and interviewed several soldiers, veteran aid groups, family members, as well as, current along with former staff members. Given that some of those interviewed have been name while others have not, it is evident that the author’s facts are based on both named, as well as, unnamed sources. One of the named sources is Marine Sgt. Ryan Groves. This affects my conclusion concerning the reliability of the story in that I have been able to establish the type of persons who provided the information and on the basis that the reporters have used direct sources it will be outright to consider the whole story as reliable.
THE CONCEPT IS CALLED TRANSPARENCY. “SAYS WHO” WAS THE TITLE ON THE POWERPOINT SECTION ABOUT EVALUATING SOURCES.
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2. The reporters attempts to provide context by the views of various parties concerning the situation at Walter Reed. In that regard, the reporter has quoted the clinical social worker, Joe Wilson who says that “It creates resentment and disenfranchisement, "These soldiers will withdraw and stay in their rooms. They will actively avoid the very treatment and services that are meant to be helpful." The reporters have also given the views of other individuals who have first hand information concerning the matter such as the national service officer, Danny Soto, who says that “soldiers get awesome medical care and their lives are being saved," but, "Then they get into the administrative part of it and they are like,' You saved me for what?'The soldiers feel like they are not getting proper respect. This leads to anger." The reporters go on to feature President Bush’s views concerning the facility. In addition, the reporters have given the soldiers’ views as compiled Walter Reed. To expound the matter further, the report narrates the story of Vera Heron who had to taken care of her who was admitted within the facility. In this part, the issue of conflict of interests has really affected the aforementioned parties’ perception about the operations within the facility. CONTEXT IS BACKGROUND, HISTORY, STATISTICS, LARGER PICTURE INFORMATION THAT PUT THE IMMEDIATE FOCUS OF THE STORY (IN THIS CASE POOR ADMINISTRATION OF THE INJURED VETS) IN PERSPECTIVE. SO YOU ARE RIGHT IN CITING WILSON AND PRESIDENT BUSH. BUT HERON IS DIRECT EVIDENCE OF THE IMMEDIATE PROBLEM, NOT CONTEXT.
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3. The reporters created fairness, as well as, balance within the story by presenting to the readers the explanation of the Walter Reed’s commander, Maj. Gen. George GET CORRECT LAST NAMEon why soldiers were not been discharged as quickly as it could be done. George seems to allege the most problems have been brought about by the fact that it was the first time the country had got into a war WITH ALL VOLUNTEERS after a long period since the Revolution . This is in accordance to his quote that, "because this is the first time this country has fought a war for so long with an all-volunteer force since the Revolution." In addition, the reports have ensured fairness by outlining the bureaucratic battles that have been taking place within Walter Reed. In fact they are fair enough to mention that the facility had been opened up as early as 1909 and despite the fact that it had projected that it was to be closed by 2011, it continued to receive more and more casualties as at 2005.GOOD
4. Two direct evidence sources are such as that of Shannon who had to provide his Purple Heart to the supply clerk so as to ascertain that he was actually in Iraq once he tried to replace his bloody uniform. The other example is the unnamed source who was a combat medic in Iraq but had to forward letters along with photos of herself while in Iraq as a prove that she had been there because there were no records showing her service.GOOD
5. The reporters get the information by visiting Walter Reed where they get to see for themselves what soldiers such as Sgt. Archie Benware go through. Besides, from their visit, they get to learn that the injured soldiers have to attend formations. In addition, they have also obtained their information by interviewing the staff such as Wilson, who is a clinical social worker. THE INTERVIEW WAS NOT “OPENING THE FREEZER” WHICH MEANS WHEN REPORTERS GET TO SEE EVIDENCE THEMSELVES (SUCH AS BEING AT THE FORMATION).On the other hand, the reporters can be said to have opened the freezer by publishing such an article. NO. OPENING THE FREEZER REFERS SPECIFICALLY TO THE TECHNIQUE IN REPORTING WHERE REPORTERS SEE THINGS FOR THEMSELVES, NOT JUST HEAR ABOUT THEM OR REPORT WHAT OTHERS HAVE SAID ABOUT IT. This is due to the fact that they have revealed the ‘rot’ which is within the Walter Reed for the readers to scrutinize. Besides, they have gone on to point out a scenario whereby funds which were provided to make some improvements on the facility mysteriously became unavailable. Moreover, they publicize the manner in which the soldiers live in poor conditions as the place is vested by rodents in addition to the non-functioning elevators and garage doors.
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6. A. Maj.Gen.GeorgeW.Weightman is a reliable source because he is Singular in that he is the only one saying it, Verifies the information he is giving by giving figures, well Informed about what is taking place in Walter Reed, and he is quoted by Name. HE IS SELF-INTERESTED AS THE COMMANDER AND IS AUTHORITATIVE.
B. Staff Sgt. John Daniel Shannon is a reliable source because he is a Multiple source in that he is part of others who have narrated their sad incidents within Walter Reed, Verifies the information he is giving by giving details of what he went through, well Informed about what is taking place in Walter Reed, and he is quoted by Name. HE IS SELF-INTERESTED.
C. Wilson, the clinical social worker, is a reliable source because he is Singular in that he is the only one saying it, Verifies the information he is giving by giving figures, well Informed about what is taking place in Walter Reed, and he is quoted by Name.HE IS SELF INTERESTED.
D. One unnamed amputee is not a reliable source because he is Singular in that he is the only one saying it, Verifies the information he is giving by explaining his incident, well Informed about what is taking place in Walter Reed, but he is Unnamed.HE IS SELF-INTERESTED
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THOSE TELLING THEIR SIDE OF THE STORY ARE SELF-INTERESTED. THIS DOES NOT MEAN THEIR INFORMATION IS INACCURATE BUT IT IS A FACTOR TO WEIGH WHEN DECIDING THEIR CREDIBILITY.
7. The report under review can be considered as reliable. This is due to the fact that the reports have obtained a greater percentage of their information from sources which are reliable. Moreover, most of the evidence obtained from the sources can be verified because they have provided sufficient evidence. Besides, some of the sources who can be considered to have personal interests such as Maj.Gen.GeorgeW.Weightman have acknowledged the fact that there are problems been experienced within the facility. In that regard, I make the conclusion that the situation within Walter Reed is wanting and in need of quick action from the relevant authorities.
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BLACKOUTASSIGNMENT.docx
MOHAMEED ALTHORYAN
(YOUR NAME GOES HERE ON ALL PAPERS)
C
Mohameed:
It is obvious you out a lot of yourself into this assignment, and I think you got a lot out of it. It was a little sketchy in that you did not make it clear what were your usual news sources, and what stories you missed (outside of your cousin’s health).
It is apparent English is not your native tongue. I have made several corrections trying to indicate what the error was. I know American English has a lot of idioms, among other difficulties. One thing you can concentrate on is sticking to the same tense—either present or past) in using verbs; don’t switch back and forth.
If anything I have marked is unclear, please don’t hesitate asking me for clarification.
BLACKOUT ASSIGNMENT
The 48 hours blackout assignment was a really helpful in learning about me. For these 2 days I was so angry and worried that I wasn’t even able to enjoy listening to my favorite collection, which is the best MY FAVORITE hobby of mine. This was because I wasn’t able to get access to any of the news regarding anything which made me feel like as if I am WAS (STICK TO PAST TENSE IN SAME SENTENCE)paralyzed for my life. I don’t DID NOT (STICK TO LAST TENSE—DON’T CHANGE BACK AND FORTH WITH PRESENT TENSE)use my cell phone, Facebook and Twitter much during my normal days, but during these 2 days I really wanted to talk to my friends and text them about what they did the whole day and since they had the PLANNED
plan for an outing, I missed that much more.
In order to divert my mind, I kept playing with my dog, studying for my exams, went to church, kept taking a more number of naps and listened to my favorite music. News and information is such an important thing in one’s life that without it you will feel like being isolated from the entire world including your family. You will feel confused about what is happening outside. The world around you will be so normal and will be full of information, but you will be so helpless to gain any information or know about any news and because of this, I will never want to repeat this assignment, because it was one of the toughest assignment to be done though I have learnt about my information habits and the surrounding world.
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Deconstruction workbook assignment
Mohammed Althonyan
Chapman Univeristy
English 329
08/04/2014
Mohammed:
This is ungraded because you did the wrong problem. The first one was OK but the 2nd one was supposed to be Example 8, not 2.
Do Example 8 and send it to me.
Example 1
Answer:
The headline of the story featured above can be said not to have been adequately supported within the body of the story. This is due to the fact that, from the first paragraph, it is only two female students who have made their cases public. In that regard, two cases are too insignificant to make the assault incidents be termed as a plague. Besides, the Stony Brook’s Assistant Chief of police, Douglas Little, is quoted within the third paragraph saying that “There is no threat to the campus community”, in reference to the reported incidents. In the event that the assault cases had reached to a level where they could be considered as a plague, Little would have not made such a comment.GOOD
Example 2:
Foreclosure freeze could put security clearances at risk
By Dina ElBoghdady and Dana Hedgpeth Washington Post Staff Writers Wednesday, October 20, 2010; 2:31 PM
The sudden moratorium on many foreclosures across the country is unexpectedly putting some federal workers and contractors at jeopardy of losing their security clearance because of the heightened uncertainty clouding their finances, according to lawyers who handle these cases.
Employees with security clearances are monitored by the government to see whether they have financial problems that that would make them vulnerable to bribery or blackmail. And with many financial companies adopting some form of foreclosure freeze in recent weeks, it's taking longer for some delinquent borrowers to resolve their mortgage cases and put their troubles behind them, lawyers said.
This problem is especially acute in the Washington region, home to nearly a third of the the nation's 854,000 employees with top-secret clearances.
"Getting to the bottom of resolving debt is more complicated when the lenders are in paralysis," said Dennis Sysko, a national security lawyer in Glen Burnie. "The longer it is unresolved, the longer the cloud remains."
Lawyers in the Washington area said they are starting to field inquiries about foreclosure delays from workers who have security clearances or are trying to get them. Many don't know whether they should be elated or concerned about the turn of events.
Answer:
The headline in the story under Example 2 is “Foreclosure freeze could put security clearances at risk” while the “lead” is “The sudden moratorium on many foreclosures across the country is unexpectedly putting some federal workers and contractors at jeopardy of losing their security clearance because of the heightened uncertainty clouding their finances, according to lawyers who handle these cases”. The headline together with the “lead” can be said to have fully supported the principal point of the story because they have provided a comprehensive thesis of what has been covered within the story.
Eng329-BLACKOUTASSIGNMENTDIARY.docx
(YOUR NAME GOES UP HERE ON ALL PAPERS)
BLACKOUT ASSIGNMENT DIARY
Just cut out all the information sources from my life for the next 2 days. I won’t be getting any newspaper, plus my cell phone (from which I could have got
RECEIVED many information regarding sports, weather and of the sort
THE EXPRESSION IS ETC, ABBREVIATION FOR ETCETERA) is switched off and put into the store
STORAGE. My PC, Led TV, and radios are also put off now. I have even told all my friends and relatives that if they want to contact me, just come here to meet me but beware that no information or news must be shared even if its IT’S related to my own family. So basically, I have been truly “cut off” from the real world COMMA that is the world of information and news. I am really excited to do this assignment.
The time WHEN I start with this assignment, I am like COMMA what to do now? I don’t have my cell phone to chat or to call, I don’t have my PC to browse over the internet, I don’t have the TV to listen to some gossips GOSSIP (NO S) or some news channel, and even I don’t have A newspaper which I love to read every day. Sitting idle is what I am left out with. Do I have anything to be done? I don’t think so. The basic things that surround my daily scheduled life are not with me anymore for THE next two days.
After sometime, I switch on my music system and start listening music. I try to enjoy it but I don’t know why the feeling that what am I going to do in these 2 days kept KEEPS (STICK WEITH PRESENT TENSE, DON’T SWITCH BACK TO PAST TENSE IN MID SENTENCE) scaring me. This is because I have never been cut off from any kind of information. I also keep reading the news even when I browse over the internet. But today I don’t have access to it and I am feeling like only half alive. I try to get engaged in the music and enjoy it and I get a bit successful when I hear to my favorite collection for 5 minsSPELL OUT , but when I used to look at the clock,UNCLEAR WHAT YOU ARE TRRYING TO SAY I was sailing in the same boat again as before.
I kept taking naps after sometime so that I have very (DELETE, WRONG ADVERB) less time to face the reality that I can’t get to know about the news of my first cousin APOSTROPHE S brother who was not well. I wanted to ask MY PARENTS about him from my parents but I had to ask them not to tell me about any news regarding anything, and this resulted in one of the angriest mood I ever got into. I was sad, firstly FIRST because I wanted to know about the health of my cousin since my parents had been so busy going to the hospital and coming back again and again, which made me think more and more about IT and I felt so worried. Another thing was that I wanted to talk to my parents about the weather forecast so that I can take my dog for the A regular check up and to take it for the walk.
I don’t know whether I was sad because I wasn’t able to talk to my family about the topic that concerned them the most these 2 days or just because I wasn’t up to date during the time of the assignment. As I always do to calm down myself, I went to the church and started enjoying my day there by talking to the Almighty and praying to Him.
Even at the night, I was in HAD mixed feelings of getting scared, sad and worried. But thinking of all the different things that might have happened that day, I slept.
After not having a sound sleep, I woke up tired and lazy
WRONG WORD--UNENERGETIC. Realizing the fact that there is another day to be spent like this, I started studying after sometime for my exams. I passed my day studying, playing with my dog, reading different things and playing some games, etc. But while doing all these things, I had an eye on the clock, since it was really hard for me to pass these two days without getting any information and getting fully cut off from any type of news.
The only thing by which I kept myself happy was THE THOUGHT OF LETTING
let the 48 hours end and I will be GETTING back to my life. But still, the 48 hours of life to conduct a blackout assignment was really very difficult, and on the other hand, it taught me a lot of things about myself, which would really help me in my life.