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8/5/14 6:00 PM

Please write your essay without the false separations. It should be one continous essay. Don't announce. Your thesis statement should be the last sentence of your introduction. The background information should be in a separate paragraph. Each body paragraph should have a topic sentence that identifies the each of the problems. Each problem is to have a one or two paragraphs that elaborate on the problems. If you do this, there is no need to announce statement of problems. Is the second problem that NCCA is negatively exploiting student athletes? If so, state that clearly, not I think that. There is no such word as secondly or ironical. Is that another problem? The question of collegiate amateurism is a problem? That reads like you are still providing background information. Please don't begin your conclusion as you have. Simply state what you have said but in different words, not announce what you did already. You fail to offer a solution.