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Muhannad Alkhateeb (MeMo)

Craig Dolce

Eng-1A

7 May 2014

Evaluation essay on Wikipedia resource entitled Racial Inequality in the United States

It is a fact that there are no way all people in the society can actually be the same. This is due to the undeniable truth that people are actually brought up in different circumstances and from different backgrounds. While, these are facts, it is important to mention that they don’t justify in whatsoever way the existence of racial inequality in the United States. A lot of theories and literature has been written down all explaining the issue of racial inequality in the US. One of the important publications on the issue of racial inequality is a publication in Wikipedia entitled, “Racial Inequality in the United States”. This Wikipedia entry affirms the reliability of the Wikipedia entry in reference to its Logos, Ethos and Pathos. ( I think I did the background ok, but after that I did the theses and the map which I am going to talk about wrong. The thesis must answer is the Wikipedia reliable or not, then put the map the idea you are going to talk about)

The “Wikipedia” entry for Wikipedia actually has used ethos to demonstrate the authority and credibility of authors. This is evident given the fact that different editors and contributors can easily track any form of changes as well as give their ideas on a given article. It has also been mentioned that readers can edit any Wikipedia resource without any permission. This idea has also been supported by the fact that the Wikipedia entry for Wikipedia mentions that articles in Wikipedia are not considered to be owned by the creators (“Wikipedia” sec. 1). However for any edit to be considered as credible, then it must not include the insertion of obscenities and crude humor. Moreover, it is important that edits should not include advertising language or any form of spam, otherwise, it will be considered to be a form of vandalism (“Wikipedia” sec. 3). The motive of the Wikipedia entry for Wikipedia is to demonstrate that all Wikipedia resources are open to individuals, and readers can make changes. However, they must be responsible when making such changes.

(The second paragraph after the introduction paragraph you have to write paragraph include Authority from editing policy, credibility from vandalism policy, and motives “free”, org, easy etc. this information you have to make quote from the Wikipedia Wikipedia article. I did wrong I did not do the quote editing and for vandalism correct. Please correct to me)

The author of the Wikipedia resource has used ethos to demonstrate that there is indeed existence of racial inequality in the USA. This is well evidenced given the nature of resources that the author of this Wikipedia entry has used. In fact it is important to mention that the author has actually used a number of credible and trustworthy resources in presenting his/her ideas. Some of these resources include The Pew Research Center of 2009 that showed housing disparity among different races. The author has also used a study carried by Lusardi that also indicated different approaches to asset possession by different races. In addition, the author also used a study carried by Conley which indicated that wealth inequalities in the US results due to economic disadvantages of different groups. There are also a number of reliable resources that have been used by the author to explain the issues of racial inequality in the US. One of these resources includes Bowman’s study which showed the issue of wealth disparities in the USA arises because of the amount of wealth different races are able inherited from their parents (“Racial inequality in the United States” sec. 3.1). (Check the quote I think I did wrong). By implication this study suggest that if a person comes from a rich family, then a person will definitely continue being rich. However, other contributory factors on inheritance include the number of children in the family as well as the amount to be inherited. A good example is a scenario where the amount to be inherited is small while the number of children is high.

The Wikipedia resource has used Logos in explaining the existence of racial inequality in the USA. The author of the Wikipedia resources introduces the topic and writes that there is a range of societal issues that affects the lives of many people in disproportional manner (“Racial inequality in the United States” sec. 1) (Check the quote I think I did wrong). In this case, the author explains in details the manner through which racial inequality manifests itself in the USA. The author mentions that racial inequality can be clearly seen from looking at the wealth owned by different races that in this case are Whites, Hispanic population, Asians as well as African –American populations (“Racial inequality in the United States” sec. 3.2) (Check the quote I think I did wrong). In this case, he notes that the wealth owned in terms of different races differs from one race to another. This gives the justification of existence of racial inequality in the US. To further proof his/her point, the author also considers the amount of inheritance that different races are likely to inherit from their parents. In consideration of inheritance, this also gives a clear indication that indeed racial inequality exists in the USA.

The author for the Wikipedia resource on racial inequality in the USA has also used pathos in presenting his/her ideas. There are a number of instances throughout the resource where the author has actually used emotions or rather appeals to express his views on the issue. One instance include where the author says that the wealth gap between different races has tripled with time (“Racial inequality in the United States” sec. 3.1) (Check the quote I think I did wrong). In this case, the author aims at demonstrating that indeed the problem of racial disparity and inequality that has been in existence in the USA, still exist and there is need to come up with better solutions or rather ways of dealing with the issue. Another instance where the author has used emotional appeals is when talking about the number of prisoners who are jailed. According to the author, most prisoners are non-white. The major reason being that they are neither in a position of receiving the services of better lawyers nor able to afford the amount required for bail application (“Racial inequality in the United States” secs. 3.3-3.5) (Check the quote I think I did wrong). This implies that individuals who have sufficient money or rather who are affluent in the society can actually escape punishment while the poor consist of a big percentage of prisoners in the USA. There are other instances in the Wikipedia resource where the author has also used emotions appeals such as when most non-white residents in the USA fear investing in risky assets and end up earning very little as opposed to the white who invest in risky assets. The major reason stated in the article for non-white fearing to invest in risky projects is actually a lack of knowledge (“Racial inequality in the United States” sec. 3) (Check the quote I think I did wrong). This is discouraging and surely something need to be done so that they can also get the necessary and helpful required skills to invest in different projects.

Racial inequality still exists in the USA. This is evident given the facts and statistic information that has been published in the Wikipedia resource. The article has demonstrated that there is a lot of inequality ranging from different areas in the USA. This is evident given the consistence and clarity of information and facts as presented in the Wikipedia resource. Moreover, the article can be termed, as being credible and trustworthy given that, there are very nice articles that were referred to prior to its preparations. ( this sentence is wrong) On top of that, the author uses various appeals aiming at showing the impact of racial inequality in the entire USA population. Regardless of how bad the situation on racial inequality is in the USA, I strongly belief that with the concept of globalization, people will one day start appreciating and helping one another, thereby enhancing equality in society. (Make sure from the conclusion paragraph that answer the Wikipedia is reliable or not and it restate the point and has the opinion)

Note: make sure when I put word Wikipedia in Italic or in quotation mark

Works Cited

"Racial inequality in the United States." Wikipedia. Wikimedia Foundation, 19 Apr. 2014. Web. 30 Apr. 2014. <http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Racial_inequality_in_the_United_States>.

"Wikipedia." Wikipedia. Wikimedia Foundation, 30 Apr. 2014. Web. 30 Apr. 2014. <https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia>.