Fixing essays
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poished_draft_2.docxProfessor. D
English 113A
03/10/2014
Two Essays One Judge
Have you ever imagined the word without writing? Well, it is impossible, in other words, the life will be more difficult. Without writing you cannot save information, read history, write your feelings in essay or the most important we cannot chat. Chatting has become a major part of life routine, there are many applications that make you chat with other people like What's App, Line or We Chat. The users of these applications are using a curtailment for many words, for example U means you, R means are, and UR means your. That going to led the writing to dark way because most of the users are from the new generation, wish means the future is going to control by our children. However, writing an essay is totally different than chatting or writing a letter. Nowadays, almost of the students are writing essays as homework, and it is different from person to another. Each person has his own style, thoughts and word to express his/her idea in essay. When comparing those two essays "Two Years Are Better Than Four" written by Addison, Liz and "The New Liberal Arts" J.Ungar, Sanford. The first essay is better than the second because it is supported well, shorter and organized. The author had written a nice essay wish it was wrote by following the essay steps.
Writing an essay is not that hard, almost everybody can do it. But the essay should be in particular way that makes it easier to the reader. For writing a good essay that makes the people like it you can use follow the essay's steps. According to Samuels, the first step to write an essay is outline, put all the information in order, skip the introduction and start with the first body paragraph, the first thesis statement with the first body paragraph, support your thoughts, keep doing this format until you reach the conclusion. The most important step is supporting your ideas, wish like the Liz's essay has. The good support in the essay is "I read an article in the New York times describing a 'collage application essay…," Liz (213,) the author Liz Addison, juggle chooses this quote because it fits in the right place and that shows that what ability the writer has. On the other hand, Ungar had supported his ideas, but his support took a whole paragraph. Even with this whole paragraph of support, he could not explain it well and clear.
Writing an essay with a quotation that is hard to explain can take a lot of space and words. Many words with on meaning is west of time, a large number of pages is not necessary prove to a good essay. The essay that might reach many pages is not necessary a good essay, some people could write many pages, but it has a lot of mistakes and with no goal that they want to talk about. The other people can write a nice essay and perfect, with fewer pages. The Arabic people may think differently, they have proverb that says "The best speech what is less and make sense," they mean that the less is better considering the entire required thing that the author should include. They also, like to reach the point directly to make it easier and less word, Liz did two pages back and forth. She was perfect in her essay; she all the information that she can mention to make the reader interested more about her ideas. Ungar did around five pages. Lis has less pages and good information comparing with Ungar's essay wish have about five pages.
Organizing an essay is very important to make the essay better. Organizing an essay is helpful and easier for the reader to follow the author. Meanwhile, the author can control them to any way that he wants them to reach or to follow. Since he knows how he can organize his own essay, he can assume where the readers are heading. Ungar won in this point, his essay was much organized than Liz's essay. He has a good skill organization that made the audience hooked. He used his organization skill to make the readers interested and enthusiastic fort what coming next. Ungar was very clear, he explained the misperception. Without reading the essay you can say that this essay is organize because for each paragraph has the number of the misperception. Also, it was easy to recognize those misunderstandings because it is bold and it was numbered. He explained the seventh misperception. Liz's was not organized comparing to Ungar's essay, Ungar was like showing off his organizing skill.
In conclusion, writing an essay is very important. Writing an academic essay is not that easy. The writer should take it seriously and follow the steps that can help him/her to write a perfect essay. Depending on these details above we can say or judge that the Liz's essay wins this competition. Since the Liz's essay explained all the information that she wanted, and with supporting sentences, her essay was better. Ungar essay looks organized and harmonic but his support and many pages did not help him. However, those days, most of the students are writing many pages because it is required, meanwhile, they are not felling that they are comfortably with writing. They cannot write comfortably if they must do some papers that force them to write. They will not understand the real meaning of writing. However, the essay is very important to learn, but it should teach the real meaning if an essay before the essay itself. On the other hand, the whole world needs to learn and educate to become professional writers and help the people who do not learn that.
Samuels, Holly. N.p. Web. 10 Mar 2014.
<http://www.crlsresearchguide.org/15_Body_Of_Paper.asp>.
