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The Leader as a Strategist Report
The organization named McDonalds [Misspelling: according to their website, the spelling of the fast-food company is "McDonald's"] is opted [The passive voice is a form of "be" (is) and a participle (opted). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Prefer the active voice. For example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time. See Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] for carrying out the discussion further. The company is recognized [Passive voice ] to be a fast-food outlet and is established [Passive voice ] in the United States. It is well-known for its fast-food and is sharing a global presence also. The customer contentment is taken [Passive voice ] as a priority. The running conditions pinpoint that the company with the help of its key members puts in best possible [Redundancy--the "X-est" means the greatest degree of X, so "possible" is unnecessary] efforts. Moreover, the company also shows proper concern towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] its employees by handling their expectations with proper potential. The company is experiencing immense presence amongst [Archaic word. Use "among"] the key customers as well.
As a new leader, the requirement is to assess the organization’s overall [Wordiness: unless meaning denim work clothes, "overall" is general and vague and contributes little to the sentence] alignment between its vision, mission, values, and strategy. In this way, the business processes can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] made [Passive voice ] out effective and better than before [Remove "than before" (the meaning remains the same)] . All [Writing suggestion: "All" or "all of" used as an intensifier very often can be removed with no loss of meaning] what is being [Doctoral rule (but good advice for any academic writer)--If not a noun (as in "human being"), the word "Being" is hard to imagine; it means "existing." Try to rewrite this without using "being"--with action words like "attending," "working," "living," "experiencing," simply "as"--or even removing "being" completely] demanded [Passive voice ] is to have an effective check on the respective areas. For the same, the need is to experience far better resultants and that too at an active pace.
1. An analysis of the strategic cascade of the organization.
The strategy of the company is to generate far better resultants. It is important enough to adopt effective practices and to manage business accordingly. The need of the hour states that the business should be helped [Passive voice ] to grow and [Misspelling: "and" is a conjunction (apples and oranges); "an" is an indefinite article (I ate an apple)] function with proper potential. Moreover, the company aims more on adopting such effective practices that lead [Check spelling--if the sentence is in the past tense, the verb conjugation is "led"] to greater growth and development. It is important enough to make business growing and developing (Jones & Hill, 2009).
All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is to make customers feel special and contended. For the same, the best possible strategies are made employed [Passive voice ] to carry on with the best possible growth. It [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- the best possible growth] would turn out to be significant enough to experience far better resultants. This is termed [Passive voice ] to be important enough to form effective knowledge and understanding in the [The preposition should be "of" ] key areas. The key strategies that are [Writing suggestion: rewrite the sentence to remove "that are"] considered [Passive voice ] by the company are to help business to meet the expected levels.
· The target market for the company are primarily youth. At the same time, the key customers come under the age bracket of 12-60 years of age. [Wordiness: "years old" or "years of age" can be removed--the meaning will be the same] The company also focuses on kids [Unless meaning young goats, this is slang and inappropriate in academic writing; use "children"] and family oriented branding. On the whole [This expression is wordy and vague; the sentence means the same without it] , the company design products that are [Writing suggestion: rewrite the sentence to remove "that are"] going to [Wordiness: These words mean simply "will"] meet the needs and requirements of the key customers. This is known to be the best part and leads to make situations highly effective and better than before [Remove "than before" (the meaning remains the same)] .
· The value proposition of the company is acting upon customers' needs and desires in a uniform manner. It covers up key aspects and helps in offering a sense of satisfaction and contentment to the key audience. In general, the company serves to be the place that is [Wordiness: see if you can remove "that" or "that is"] meant for offering low cost and quality product at a clean setting. This seems to be important enough to carry on business functions with proper effectiveness. Along with this, the workforce of the company is dedicated [Passive voice ] towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] making customers feel good enough. This is surely going to help the customers to obtain a better feel. It means a lot [Only commercial shipments and real estate are measured in lots. To use "a lot of" to mean "many," "much," or "a large amount" is a colloquialism (not universally clear). Use another term.] to go for managing situations at its best possible manner. Along with this, the employees so possessed helps the company meet the needs and requirements of the intended audience. With this, it [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- this] can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] ensured [Passive voice ] that the situations are turning out to be highly well-versed and better than before [Remove "than before" (the meaning remains the same)] (Burrow, 2011).
· The product and services offered by the company are effectively positioned [Passive voice ] . It is recognized [Passive voice ] to be useful enough in helping the customers to carry on business practices at an active pace. At the same time, the products and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] services are customized [Passive voice ] to match with the target audience expectations. The specific features and attributes that are [Writing suggestion: rewrite the sentence to remove "that are"] carried [Passive voice ] out by the products and services are that it is qualitative and specifically designed to make customers highly pleased. The company also shows proper concern towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] customer’s health. For the same, the menu list carries some healthy items. It is merely formed [Passive voice ] to meet customer’s expectations only. This is surely going to help the customers to obtain best possible resultants. With this, it [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- this] can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] ensured [Passive voice ] that the running conditions need to be made managed [Passive voice ] and highly well-versed.
At the same time, its value gets reflected in its pricing, distribution, marketing communications. It can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] understood in a way that the product is priced [Passive voice ] low just to make it used by people at a massive level. Along with this, the distribution process is also quite well-defined. It seems to be effective enough to manage business expectations with proper potential. In this way, it can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] stated [Passive voice ] that the product flow is maintained [Passive voice ] on a regular basis. The marketing communication is also said to be impressive. It makes use of the best possible modes to help the customers to obtain the best possible resultants.
· The organization is sustainable different from its competitors with respect to different aspects. Most importantly [The extra syllable in "importantly" adds no additional meaning because the word is seldom adverbial in intention. Use the word without "ly"] , the organization has duly felt [Clearer writing suggestion: if "felt" is used in the sense of "to believe or think," it is a cliché and vague; use "believed" or "thought"] [Style suggestion: if "felt" is used in the sense of "to believe or think," it is a cliché and vague; use a form of "believe" or "think"] that the customer contentment should not be ignored [Passive voice ] at any cost. For the same, the need is to experience hopeful resultants. It holds great [Writing suggestion: "great" is an overworked word, too frequently seen, and too vague. It has too many meanings: huge, superior, numerous, etc. Use a more specific adjective] importance from the perspective of experiencing immense growth and progression [Check spelling--Progression means "sequence," but "progress" is "advancement, development, movement," etc. ] . The accentuation needs to be more on realizing best possible growth and development. This means a lot [Avoid using "lots" or "a lot of"] to carry on business practices with due effectiveness. As far as competitors are concerned [Passive voice ] , the company is believed [Passive voice ] to be sustainable in terms with maintaining the ecological balance at an active pace (Ferrell & Pride, 2011).
The uniqueness so considered would allow the company to carry on business practices with due effectiveness. All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is to manage business growth and development at its best possible manner. This seems to be important enough to offer a sense of contentment to the customers by maintaining the uniqueness. The company is termed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough in comparison to its competitors. This is so because the company is believed [Passive voice ] to be highly competent and [Run-on sentence: Insert comma before "and" if the following is an independent clause (not part of a series)] it adopts effective marketing and likely practices. It makes it successful and growing in the respective industry.
2. SWOT Analysis
Strengths
• The advantages that organization having ["having" as a transitive verb is vague. Reconsider the sentence using "possessing," "acquiring," "developing," etc. Often "having" can be deleted] strong brand recognition, global presence, customer loyalty. All these altogether helps the company to obtain best possible growth and progression [Check spelling--Progression means "sequence," but "progress" is "advancement, development, movement," etc. ] . Along with this, it [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- this] can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] ensured [Passive voice ] that the business is obtaining far better resultants by means of these strong points. It is important enough to understand the importance of these aspects and to carry on business practices at an active pace.
• The most effective and the best part of the company is the way it lives up to its customer’s expectations. It would also ensure that the running conditions are turning out to be hopeful enough. The best possible ways are considered [Passive voice ] to match with customer’s desires and wishes. It would also ensure that the business growth should not be ignored [Passive voice ] at any cost. This is believed [Passive voice ] to be important enough to manage business growth and development with proper potential. All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is to execute business practices with proper potential. The key programs are made ensured [Passive voice ] to help the clients to obtain immense growth and satisfaction (Bohm, 2009).
• The unique or lowest-cost resources that can draw upon that others cannot are the product quality and service promptness.This [If not in a URL, leave a space after the period] is termed [Passive voice ] to be helpful enough to manage business growth and development at an active pace. It is considered [Passive voice ] to be important enough to manage situations with proper potential. This greater demands for supporting the company to manage situations accordingly. It seems to be important enough to obtain the best possible growth and progression [Check spelling--Progression means "sequence," but "progress" is "advancement, development, movement," etc. ] . • The people see strengths with respect to effective market potential, having global presence, brand recognition and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] matching with customer’s wishes and desires. It would also help in enjoying an effective name and image amongst the key people. This adds on great growth and development for the company itself.
• Factors that mean "get the sale" are to offer key benefits to the customers in the form of the finished product. This persuades the clients to obtain the best advantage by using it. It means a lot [Avoid using "lots" or "a lot of"] to carry on business practices with proper effectiveness.
• The organization's unique selling proposition (USP) is the quality maintained in the product at such cost-effective prices.
Weaknesses
• The aspects of product or service need to be improved [Passive voice ] are adding in more healthy supplements. At the same time, this would help in making others feel good enough. It would be good enough to go in understanding the key expectations of the clients only.
• Market segments or competitive areas need to be avoided are aged populations and competing on the base of price. There stays great necessity to go from forming knowledge and understanding with the customer’s requirements (Bohm, 2009).
• The people locate weaknesses in the form of high employee turnover, capitalization on organic trends and fluctuations in profit levels. This is termed [Passive voice ] to be the key weaknesses that are [Writing suggestion: rewrite the sentence to remove "that are"] looked [Passive voice ] by the people.
• Factors that can make lose sales are lack of competitive advantage, the requirement of quality control and not understanding customer’s [if not possessive, "customers" is spelled without the apostrophe] needs with changing time.
Opportunities
• The good opportunities that can be spotted [Passive voice ] by the company are having [Writing suggestion: the present progressive "are having" is an awkward phrase; use the present tense--simply "has," "have," or "are to have"] healthy items on the menu list, showing more concern towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] customer’s health by adopting hygienic ways, maintaining cleanliness at the respective point. It seems to be important enough to make sure that business practices are turning out to be helpful enough.
• The interesting trends one need to be aware of are getting acknowledged with change in technological trends, market opportunities and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] lifestyle trends. It can also turn out to be effective enough in carrying on business practices with due effectiveness. Along with this, the business can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] helped [Passive voice ] to grow and develop in an incessant manner.
Threats
• The obstacles that can be faced [Passive voice ] by the company is changing customer’s expectations, government policies, intense level of competition and different cultural settings. This seems to be important enough to form knowledge and understanding in the [The preposition should be "of" ] key areas. It is termed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough to allow the company to grow and develop incessantly.
• The competitors are also having a good presence in the marketplace. The best possible moves are made adopted [Passive voice ] just to have better positioning at the industry level. There stays great necessity to go from forming proper knowledge and understanding in the [The preposition should be "of" ] key areas. Competitors of the company are also actively participating in obtaining good growth and progression [Check spelling--Progression means "sequence," but "progress" is "advancement, development, movement," etc. ] (Lomax & Stokes, 2008).
• The quality standards or specifications are primarily designed [Passive voice ] for for [Typographical error: eliminate duplicate word (if on the same line)] products, or services changing. This means a lot [Avoid using "lots" or "a lot of"] to help the customers to possess an effective image towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] the company. Not only this, the business practices can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] made [Passive voice ] out effective and hopeful in nature [Vague wording--unless the intended meaning is "in the forest," "in nature" communicates very little and can be deleted with no change in meaning] . It seems to be important enough to make customers feel highly pleased and satisfied.
• The changing technology is threatening the position of the company. For this, the company is supposed [Passive voice ] to form and develop knowledge towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] it. This turns out to be effective enough to manage business practices accordingly.
• It experiences cash-flow problems and fluctuations related to profit levels. It is important enough to adopt such effective practices that helps in executing business functions accordingly. Along with this, the organization needs to work hard for bringing regular processing of the cash flow operations.
• The weaknesses that seriously threaten business are changes [Join a d to "change" to form the participle--"changed"] received [Passive voice ] in customer’s requirements, market uncertainty and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] cultural setting.
3. Summary of the internal environment
1. Structure: The organization follows top to down approach. It is believed [Passive voice ] to be important enough to manage business growth and development accordingly. This turns out to be effective enough to help the company to assign tasks and activities in a good way. The need is just to help the company to perform the key functions with full effectiveness. The structure of the company is quite clear and well-defined. It adopts effective ways to assign formal roles and responsibilities among the members of the company. The decision-making authority lies within the head of the company. But [In academic writing, avoid starting a sentence with a conjunction ] at the same time, the members or the key employees are free to participate or give suggestions on any of the key areas. The employees of the company are expected [Passive voice ] to have expertise and skills and efficiency in handling work tasks. The organization chart is believed [Passive voice ] to be important enough and [Run-on sentence: Insert comma before "and" if the following is an independent clause (not part of a series)] it pinpoints and its implied structure directs the decision making, resource allocation and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] [Insert a comma before this word if this is the last in a list of more than two -- or if it begins a new clause] workflow of the organization. It is consistent with the strategy of the company as well. The need of the hour states that the organizational structure is quite well-versed and helps in managing situations with proper effectiveness (Porter, 1996).
2. Systems: The system prevailing in the organization is believed [Passive voice ] to be important enough. It allows the company to manage business functions at an appropriate basis. This seems to be helpful enough to maintain proper governance and orderliness in the key areas. At the same time, the information flow should also move on [Phrasal verb: These two words mean something different from the two words separately (looking up each word in the dictionary would not produce the meaning), which could cause misinterpretation in a business communication if the reader is not from your region (or country). Try simpler wording, such as "advance," "continue," or "progress"] smoothly and effortlessly. It makes sure that the information flows in a proper way. All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is to manage business practices with due effectiveness.
With the help of proper and well-versed information flows, the coordination between groups and across the organization structure would go on smoothly. Along with this, the synchronization would be formed [Passive voice ] amongst the management and the employees. It assists the company to carry on functions with full potential. At the same time, the direct worker behavior, performance management, financial management, operating, forecasting and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] planning, and other regulating mechanisms should also be concentrated [Passive voice ] . The worker behavior would lend a helping hand [Cliché--"lend a helping hand" is an old phrase, seen too often, and marks your writing as unoriginal. Try to express the idea in another way] in getting acquainted with an employee’s contribution.
In addition to this, the performance management would help in assessing the employee’s competence in handling the key roles. Financial management is very much requisite to make optimum use of financial resources. The operating, forecasting and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] planning and other regulating mechanisms should also be taken [Passive voice ] into consideration. It would also ensure that the situations are turning out to highly well-versed and hopeful enough. All these systems are termed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough in helping the company to form an alignment of workers and their actions with the strategy. This turns out to be effective enough in executing business practices with proper potential. Moreover, the workers of the company would also be permitted [Passive voice ] to adopt key practices to manage situations accordingly (Western, 2007).
3. Culture: The organizational culture is termed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough and allows the business to obtain best possible resultants. With this, it [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- this] can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] ensured [Passive voice ] that the business functions should move on properly. The company’s culture is very well-defined and encourages the employees to contribute with full sincerity. This is believed [Passive voice ] to be helpful enough to manage business situations at its best possible degree. The need of the hour states that the culture of the company is believed [Passive voice ] to be helpful enough. It seems to be important enough to handle business obligations with due effectiveness.
The need of the hour states that the best possible knowledge should be gained [Passive voice ] to handle business obligations accordingly. The culture of the organization is believed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough and contributes towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] company’s growth and progression [Check spelling--Progression means "sequence," but "progress" is "advancement, development, movement," etc. ] . Not only this, the business would be allowed to reach the expected levels. In this way, it can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] stated [Passive voice ] that the running conditions need to be analyzed properly. It would result into effective and successful accomplishment of the key tasks.
Along with this, the culture comprises of the unwritten rules and norms that govern worker behavior and help coordinate the activities across structural boundaries. It would also ensure that the company would be helped [Passive voice ] to monitor the surrounding ambiance followed by employee’s behavior. The culture of the organization is figured [Passive voice ] out to be enabler in nature [Vague wording--unless the intended meaning is "in the forest," "in nature" communicates very little and can be deleted with no change in meaning] . It sees to it that the corporate strategy should be made managed [Passive voice ] and well-versed. This turns out to be effective enough and offers with the best possible outcomes. It [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- the best possible outcomes] is firmly believed [Passive voice ] that the culture of the company seems to be supportive enough in helping the company to grow and [Misspelling: "and" is a conjunction (apples and oranges); "an" is an indefinite article (I ate an apple)] proceed.
The specific behaviors embedded in the culture and that support the strategy of the company is employee’s [if not possessive, "employees" is spelled without the apostrophe] dedication, adjustment towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] changing requirements, ensuring company’s growth and development accordingly. It is important enough to work on these specific behaviors just to obtain great growth. This would also ascertain the business practices are going on smoothly and efficiently. It means a lot [Avoid using "lots" or "a lot of"] to manage business practices at its best possible extent (Northouse, 2009).
The specific behaviors liable for blocking the strategy are less favor towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] changing technological trends, lack of supportive working ambience, lack of concern towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] employee’s betterment. This is believed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough to make business growing and developing. It is very much important to have a look at these aspects just to grow and [Misspelling: "and" is a conjunction (apples and oranges); "an" is an indefinite article (I ate an apple)] function with proper effectiveness.
These behaviors would also allow the company to realize goals and objectives with due effectiveness. It [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- due effectiveness] is highly important to go for managing business practices accordingly. All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is to carry on business practices at its best possible manner. At the same time, the business would be able to thrive and flourish with due smoothness.
4. Kouzes and Posner’s Five Practices as a framework: The five of these practices are modelling the approach, instigate a shared vision, face the process, facilitate others to act and persuade the heart. All of these five practices are able to [Wordiness--"are able to" means simply "can"] help one to lead and to obtain immense success at an active pace. This is termed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough to carry on business functions with full potential. It [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- full potential] is important enough to experience greater growth and development.
• Company Culture
O The values and culture of the organization are primarily linked [Passive voice ] towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] offering a sense of satisfaction to the target audience. For the same, the company adopts effective effective [Typographical error: eliminate duplicate word (if on the same line)] values and maintain positive culture. This would encourage the company to meet customer’s expectations in its best possible manner (Mitchell, 2008).
O The values of the organization are to maintain positive working ambiance, sustaining the quality in the product and services so offered. Along with this, catering to the needs and requirements of the key customers. It means a lot [Avoid using "lots" or "a lot of"] to perform the key roles and functions at its best possible manner.
O They get reflected in the behaviors of the employees at work. Each and every [Redundancy: "each" and "every" mean the same thing, so use either word--but not both] employees [Check spelling--Possessive employee's] see to it that the customers are treated [Passive voice ] efficiently. This greater demands for allowing the business to generate the best possible growth and resultants. It is equally important to go for managing business practices with full effectiveness. The need of the hour states that the business practices should be workable enough. At the company, the employees shows dedication and devotion towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] customers by acting upon their wishes and desires.
• Employee Behaviors
O The behaviors in an organization is experienced [Passive voice ] to be effective enough. It seems to be important enough to execute the key tasks and practices with full effectiveness. All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is to allow the company to grow and [Misspelling: "and" is a conjunction (apples and oranges); "an" is an indefinite article (I ate an apple)] exceed incessantly. There stays great necessity to go for managing business functions with proper effectiveness. This greater demands for helping the company to meet the expected levels. The behaviors are supposed [Passive voice ] to be made [Passive voice ] understood in an active manner (Martin & Chaney, 2007).
O These behaviors are believed [Passive voice ] to be consistent with the business strategy. It [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- the business strategy] can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] comprehended [Passive voice ] in a way that the business functions should not be overlooked [Passive voice ] . The employees fully understand the business strategy and acts upon it as well. It would also ensure that the situations are turning out to be highly well-versed and better than before [Remove "than before" (the meaning remains the same)] . The aim is just to experience far better resultants. This is believed [Passive voice ] to be effective enough to manage business practices accordingly.
O It can conflict with the strategy with respect to issues linked with unfavorable areas. It [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- the strategy with respect to issues linked with unfavorable areas] may be possible that the strategy can lead to conflicting behaviors, if it does not match with employee’s expectations. The employees have the right to have an effective knowledge and understanding in the [The preposition should be "of" ] key areas. This would make sure that the situations are going on smoothly and effortlessly. It is equally important to meet the expected levels.
O The new behaviors so required to align with the strategy are to raise employee’s potential. At the same time, the employees should be made [Passive voice ] informing about the respective behaviors. It would also ensure that the employee’s [if not possessive, "employees" is spelled without the apostrophe] needs and requirements are supposed [Passive voice ] to be made [Passive voice ] hopeful and better than before [Remove "than before" (the meaning remains the same)] . This is surely going to allow the company to manage business expectations accordingly. It means a lot [Avoid using "lots" or "a lot of"] to understand the significance of business strategy. The new behaviors are mainly linked [Passive voice ] with forming proper knowledge and understanding in the [The preposition should be "of" ] key areas. Not only this, the business would grow and function effectively.
• Leadership
O The leaders create new behaviors to support the strategy by formulating such effective plans that leads to make employees committed towards [The preferred spelling is "toward"] the key task. It seems to be important enough to carry on business functions with proper effectiveness. Along with this, the understanding is supposed [Passive voice ] to be formed [Passive voice ] with the pertinent areas. The leaders are held [Passive voice ] liable for making employees to accommodate with the new behaviors. In this way, it can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] stated [Passive voice ] that the situations need to be made controlled [Passive voice ] and better than before [Remove "than before" (the meaning remains the same)] (Mitchell, 2008).
The leaders direct the workers of the company to think wide and different. This seems to be effective enough in carrying on business functions at an active pace. All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is just to form connection with the business strategy. Due to [Check word usage: This phrase is most accurate in referring to something owed ($5 due) or an arrival time (due at 6:00)--try "because" or "because of"] this only, it can be stated [Passive voice ] that the company is able to [Wordiness--"is able to" means simply "can"] generate best possible outcomes. This seems to be important enough to form an effective understanding in the [The preposition should be "of" ] key areas.
O The specific actions that would be implemented [Passive voice ] to communicate, motivate, model the way, coach, inspire the vision, challenge the process, and encourage the heart are to introduce best possible aspects just to manage things in a good way. It is very much requisite to go for managing business practices accordingly. The actions that are [Writing suggestion: rewrite the sentence to remove "that are"] primarily required [Passive voice ] are to consider innovation, creativity and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] [Insert a comma before this word if this is the last in a list of more than two -- or if it begins a new clause] newness to the business areas (Hall, 2007).
With this, it [Writing suggestion: often you can remove "With" and "it" (and the comma before "it" if present), simplifying the sentence-- this] is for sure that the communication, leading, directing and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] challenges can be handled [Passive voice ] with proper effectiveness. At the same time, the employees are helped [Passive voice ] to experience hopeful resultants. It would help in allowing the employees to carry on business functions with utmost sincerity. Additionally, the business situations can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] made managed [Passive voice ] and tackled successfully. The leadership adds to strength and [Misspelling: "and" is a conjunction (apples and oranges); "an" is an indefinite article (I ate an apple)] fortification to the company and directs its working and functioning. In the similar way, the business practices can also be [This is smoother as "also can be"] done [Passive voice ] growing and developing. All what is being demanded [Passive voice ] is to adopt such key practices that allow the business to grow and [Misspelling: "and" is a conjunction (apples and oranges); "an" is an indefinite article (I ate an apple)] function hopefully [This means "in a hopeful manner," but it should not be used to mean "I hope" or "it is hoped"] .
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