5-7 page english paper draft already done... need help with final paper

· The length requirement of 5-7 pages is just for the essay component of the assignment. That length does not include the title and references page.

· Sources: Your research paper must directly refer to at least five sources all sources must be properly cited using APA guidelines. (in the paper's text, not just on the references page). At least two should be scholarly books or articles. One great way to find academic sources is to look for articles in refereed or peer-reviewed journals, and "Academic Search Premier" allows you to limit your search to scholarly (peer-reviewed) journals.

· Your final project must show significant and substantial revision from the draft, meaning multiple paragraphs must be significantly revised, other paragraphs must have been added or deleted, etc.

· Final draft must be in third person point of view

Here is my draft it needs a lot of work. Concept: better recycling programs to create jobs, and to help stop global warming

Tips from peers and instructor:

· I need to put some statics about how much trash is not recycled.

· Statics about young adults without jobs.

· A better “eye catching” intro

· Work with third person point of view

· 2 more references

· Longer paper

· more depth in your introduction.

· seems like your big idea is a recycling program; it seems you go into global warming a little more than actual recycling

Here is my draft it needs a lot of work next attachment: