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The Case for Paying College Athletes
The Case for Paying College Athletes
Introduction
College sports are not mere sideshow but a massive business that makes millions of dollars selling tickets, merchandise, as well as TV contracts. Each season, millions of fans who watch their favorite teams on TV fill stadiums. This leads to earning of massive profits by colleges, coaches, and sponsors. However, beneath all the glamour and excitement lies a less glamorous reality: student-athletes, whose abilities and diligence enable all of this, seldom receive substantial financial compensation. Scholarships are given to the majority of student-athletes, but they frequently fall short of covering the actual cost of living and the sacrifices that athletes must make for their sport. Since a long time, the NCAA has maintained strict rules against directly paying athletes. They assert that college sports will go ‘amateur’ once players do start getting paid. In fact, it is the schools, networks, and sponsors that benefit and not the players themselves (Haile, 2023). To add to this, many college athletes put in about 30-40 hours a week into training, travelling and competing. Due to this heavy schedule of events and competitions, many athletes cannot take outside jobs anymore and are struggling financially (Haile, 2023). On top of this, athletes put their bodies on the line every game, facing injuries that can not only end their sports careers but also affect their long-term health. Because of their time commitment, the unfair system, the fact that they are the ones driving the money, and the risks they take with their health, student-athletes deserve to be paid fairly.
It is not unjust to pay student-athletes due to the equal amount of time they give their sport on full-time basis. College athletes have between 30 and 40 hours per week in practice, training, traveling and competing. It is this amount of time the majority of the adults spend at a full-time job (Pacenta et al., 2024). In the case of athletes, this period is physically demanding besides being highly psychologically straining as they combine sport with academics. These long hours leave them with small time or energy to pursue outside employment hence cannot earn additional money to sustain their personal bills. Some of them are awarded scholarships, however, these are not always reflective of the actual expensive cost of living. Most of the athletes are yet asked to finance food and accommodation, clothing and transportation costs out of their own purse which may be hard to do without a stable income generating process. This puts an unjust state of affairs where sportspeople are dedicating their time, met, and efforts to a billion-dollar business and still failing to have the ministry needs (Delventhal, 2021). Due to the high demands of the schedules along with the nature and lapses of the financial sharing, it is but natural to expect that student-athletes deserve to be rewarded by their devotion.
References
Delventhal, M. L. (2021). A Latent Class Analysis Predictive Modeling Approach to Profile Division I Collegiate Athletes for Nutrition and Relative Energy Deficiency in Sport (RED-S) Concern. The University of Mississippi.https://www.proquest.com/openview/4e90b7577eaa02be870947121e398896/1?pq-origsite=gscholar&cbl=18750&diss=y
Haile, A. J. (2023). Equity implications of paying college athletes: A title IX analysis. BCL Rev., 64, 1449. https://heinonline.org/HOL/LandingPage?handle=h
ein.journals/bclr64&div=45&id=&page=
Pacenta, J., Starkoff, B. E., Lenz, E. K., & Shearer, A. (2024). Prevalence of and contributors to food insecurity among college athletes: a scoping review. Nutrients, 16(9), 1346. https://doi.org/10.3390/nu16091346
SweetStudy.pdf
Follow instructions The Introduction and first body Paragraph is already done Finish the Rough Draft of the Essay Its entry level freshman in college essay so same format as in the introduction paragraph and body paragraphs Atleast two sources per paragraph The outline of the essay Please follow the outline
I. Introduction
A. Hook: College sports bring in billions through ticket sales, merchandise, and TV deals, yet the athletes themselves rarely see direct financial benefits.
B. Background Info: The NCAA prevents college athletes from being directly paid, though schools and networks profit heavily. Athletes dedicate 30–40 hours weekly to their sport, making it difficult to balance academics and work, while scholarships often fall short of covering living costs.
C. Thesis Statement: Student-athletes should be paid because of the time and effort they dedicate, the financial struggles they face beyond scholarships, the unfair exploitation in the current system, and the health risks that come with competing.
II. Body Paragraph 1: Time and Effort
A. Topic Sentence: Paying student-athletes is fair because of the full-time commitment they dedicate to their sport.
B. Supporting: Athletes spend 30–40 hours weekly on training, traveling, and competing.
C. Supporting: This is equal to a full-time job but without financial compensation.
D. Supporting: Balancing sports and academics leaves little time for other income.
III. Body Paragraph 2: Financial Struggles
A. Topic Sentence (with transition): In addition to their time commitment, many student-athletes face serious financial struggles.
B. Supporting: Scholarships often fail to cover the full cost of living.
C. Supporting: Athletes still pay for food, housing, transportation, and personal expenses.
D. Supporting: Without the ability to work, many athletes struggle to sustain themselves.
IV. Body Paragraph 3: Unfair System and Exploitation
A. Topic Sentence (with transition): The current system is unfair because it allows universities, coaches, and networks to exploit athletes without compensating them.
B. Supporting: Schools, networks, and sponsors profit from the athletes’ abilities.
C. Supporting: Coaches earn large salaries while players receive nothing beyond scholarships.
D. Supporting: The system prioritizes money for institutions over fairness to athletes.
V. Body Paragraph 4: Health Risks
A. Topic Sentence (with transition): Finally, athletes deserve pay because they take significant health risks every time they step onto the field.
B. Supporting: Injuries can end sports careers instantly.
C. Supporting: Some injuries affect long-term physical and mental health.
D. Supporting: Payment would acknowledge the sacrifices athletes make with their bodies.
VI. Conclusion
A. Restated Thesis: Student-athletes should be paid because of the hours they dedicate, their financial struggles, the unfair system that exploits them, and the health risks they face.
B. So What?: Paying athletes would make college sports more fair and ethical, while giving recognition and respect to the players who make the industry possible.
Instruction for the Rough Draft
For this assignment, you will create the first draft of your essay. Begin with the outline, introduction, and first body paragraphs that you previously developed, then add the remaining three body paragraphs and the conclusion. Make sure to apply the feedback you received on all previous assignments.
To earn full credit, the following components must be present:
● An introduction with a thesis statement ● At least four body paragraphs with topic sentences ● Smooth transitions between paragraphs ● A conclusion paragraph ● A reference page with a minimum of five outside sources ● In-text citations for the sources cited on the reference page
Below are a few tips to consider as you draft your essay:
● Your paper should be making an argument rather than simply stating facts. ● Each paragraph should further the argument and directly relate to your thesis
statement. ● Your argument should be founded on logical thinking and solid evidence, not
on anecdotal evidence, hearsay, or personal beliefs. ● Do not write in first or second person (avoid the use of pronouns such as I,
me, mine, we, us, ours, you, yours, etc.). ● Your outline should be a starting point, but you may find you need to make
some adjustments as well. ● You paper must follow APA guidelines for formatting, references, and
citations. ● See the Signature Assignment: Argumentative Essay (Full Instructions)
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Type your work into the APA template: APA Template
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Also, carefully review this sample paper, which includes instructor comments meant to demonstrate what the student did well on the paper. You can use it as a guide for your own: Sample Argumentative Paper
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See the rubric for specific grading criteria.
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