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Hi Kingsley,

I enjoyed reviewing your work. You have a strong background in logistics and leadership, and several parts of your resume stood out to me. Here is my feedback based on the peer review questions.

Content

Your resume provides a detailed overview of your logistics, supply management, property accountability, and leadership experience. Managing more than $20 million in government equipment is a strong example because it gives the employer a measurable idea of your level of responsibility. I also liked that you included supervising and training three Soldiers because it demonstrates leadership and communication skills in addition to your logistics experience.

Your professional summary and qualifications make your experience and skills clear. One suggestion I would make is to translate some of the military-specific terminology into civilian-friendly language. Although those terms may be familiar to those of us with a military background, a civilian employer may not immediately understand them. I think this would improve the self-containment of your resume and make your qualifications easier for any employer to understand.

I did not see a cover letter included with your post, so I was unable to review how well it addresses the qualifications from the job announcement. I would be interested to see how you connect your military experience and accomplishments directly to the employer’s needs in your cover letter.

Style

I think your resume maintains a professional and positive tone and does a good job emphasizing your accomplishments. There is a lot of useful information, but some details could possibly be shortened or combined where similar responsibilities are repeated. This could make the resume more concise and allow your strongest accomplishments to stand out even more.

Since the cover letter was not included, I could not evaluate the use of the “you” approach. When adding it, I think focusing on how your logistics and leadership experience can benefit the employer would help keep the letter centered on the employer’s needs.

Correctness

Your bullet points are consistent in beginning with strong action verbs, which helps create parallelism and makes your experience easy to follow. I did not notice any major spelling or grammar issues. I would recommend doing one final review for consistency in punctuation, capitalization, verb tense, and military abbreviations before submitting the final version.

Organization

I think the organization of your resume works well for your experience. Placing your professional summary and qualifications near the beginning allows an employer to quickly identify your strongest skills before reading through your work history. Your military experience also relates directly to logistics and supply management, so keeping that experience prominent makes sense.

I could not evaluate whether your cover letter follows the AIDA approach because it was not included. When you add it, you could use the opening to gain the employer’s attention, use your experience and accomplishments to build interest and desire, and finish with a clear action such as requesting an interview.

Formatting and Design

Your headings and separate sections help organize the information and make the resume easier to navigate. One recommendation would be to make sure there is enough white space between sections so the amount of information does not become overwhelming to the reader. This could also help draw more attention to your strongest qualifications and accomplishments.

I was unable to review the business letter formatting of your cover letter since I did not see one attached to your post.

Overall, I think your military logistics and leadership experience gives you a strong foundation for the position you selected. With seven years of military experience, what has been the biggest challenge for you when translating your military skills and accomplishments into terms that civilian employers can easily understand? Do you think you would change your resume depending on whether you were applying for a military-related organization or a completely civilian company?