presuasive email . i already have assignment done just need to get some editing done. Please if you are not familiar don't waste my time and yours.

I need help in fixing persuasive email assignment using toulmin model( backing,claim, data/support, rebuttal and warrant)  in  12 hours.  I already attached my assignment and template. The teacher's comment " You have made some progress, but there are still issues to be adressed. First, your subject line is not punctuated correctly and it is grammatically incorrect. Please correct it. There are also grammatical errors throughout this assignment. I have highlighted just a few in yellow, there are many more and they must be corrected. I suggest you get some tutorial help with written English. There are resources available at the Dallas College site under student resources. Again, as I stated before, the last warrants paragraph needs to be rewritten. It is more support and does not speak about the direct benefits to students. It should not be about the problems presented, but about the benefits that will occur for students if we return to face-to-face. You should also address the fact that there is quite a bit of risk to teachers. You are going to have to justify why faculty should take the risk and how the college will also benefit in the long run. One more rewrite.  "