Part 2 Writing Draft

 

In the example below, the writer’s position  statement is supported by three distinct points that, along with the  counter perspective, structure the entire essay. On the next page, you  will combine your position and supporting points to create your thesis  statement. 

1. Introduction
   1. Hook:  Most people who get tattoos as teenagers don’t think about how their  body art might affect their future. [find current laws about minors and  tattoos]
   2. Position Statement: Teenagers should be legally barred from getting tattoos 
2. Body
   1. First Point: Teens lack brain development 
      1. quote from Scientific American article
      2. information from Credo search
   2. Second Point: Tattoos have health risks 
      1. American Medical Association website
      2. Health risks from interview with dermatologist
   3. Third Point: Damage to future employment prospects 
      1. anecdote from Harvard Business Review 
      2. data from Gallup poll about interview first impressions
   4. Counter Perspective: Parental rights to approve tattoos 
      1. If  a parent feels strongly, an exception can be made, but this is probably  rare [look for evidence about parents approving tattoos]
3. Conclusion
   1. Rephrased Thesis Statement: State laws should prevent...
   2. Action Request: Find out your state’s laws