Paper on Data Driven Decision Making Using Real World Data

I need a paper that follows the task 1 template that is attached and has been approved which is used to write the paper for this question which is task 2. I have attached a previous task 2 that was written but did not meet grading expectations. I have also attached the feedback given for the the paper that did not meet a "high competent" level which is required. I have attached one of the graphs that were used in the previous paper that has feedback on a new streamlined question or approach and what type of analysis to use. Look at all the attachments and follow the instructions completely.