help with some engl due in 48 hours

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You don't have a thesis without a thesis your essay has no focus. It has information about Fenatyl, but it has no focal point for your readers.

Oct 18 at 11:28pm

I looked over your opening paragrah a second time and saw that you do have a thesis statement. However, it is blended into a statement of judgement. Consequently, it is convoluted and indetectible. These two different points need to be separated. Then, your thesis sentenece needs to be refined so your reader does not have to search to find it. Make sure you go back and do this to your Rough Draft and Final Draft.

Oct 19 at 

Oct 18 at 11:59pm

The paragraphs of your body are not in the same order as listed in the points of your thesis. Please reorder them to place them in the same order as your thesis.

EMAIL ON OCTOBER 19TH:

I looked over your opening paragrah a second time and saw that you do have a thesis statement. However, it is blended into a statement of judgement. Consequently, it is convoluted and indetectible. These two different points need to be separated. Then, your thesis sentenece needs to be refined so your reader does not have to search to find it. Make sure you go back and do this to your Rough Draft and Final Draft.

I just sent you an email concerning your Rough Draft of Essay #2. Either your theisis sentence is non-exisistent or it needs re-working. Please note that you should not submit a Final Draft Essay if I notated and/or sent you an email informing you that your thesis sentence needs work. Submitting the Final Essay before you have addressed the issues of the Rough Draft is simply moving ahead and duplicating the problem in the two versions of the Essay. If you have already submitted your Final Draft, please note that you will have to resubmit it after you have made the corrections to your Rough Draft. Please go back and take care of your Rough Draft and resubmit it. After I have reviewed and graded it, you can then should edit and resubmit the Final Draft.

I just sent you an email concerning your Rough Draft of Essay #2. Either your theisis sentence is non-exisistent or it needs re-working. Please note that you should not submit a Final Draft Essay if I notated and/or sent you an email informing you that your thesis sentence needs work. Submitting the Final Essay before you have addressed the issues of the Rough Draft is simply moving ahead and duplicating the problem in the two versions of the Essay. If you have already submitted your Final Draft, please note that you will have to resubmit it after you have made the corrections to your Rough Draft. Please go back and take care of your Rough Draft and resubmit it. After I have reviewed and graded it, you can then should edit and resubmit the Final Draft.