Editing help on written essay

Rubric:  1. Reader Hook--pretty good 

2. Subject Reference--cite the ad too 

3. Essay Purpose--ok 

4. Writer Credit--maybe; 2 paragraphs

 5. Analysis: A. Picture-- B. Text-- C. Audience-- D. Pitch-- 

6. Critique: missing topic questions A. Technique-- B. Appeal-- C. Support--

 7. Evaluation-- any editing?  

 MARK EVERY PARAGRAPH!!! LOOK for PARAGRAPH FOCUS! That means Topic Sentences and Topic Support in each assigned topic.