Comparison & Contrast Essay help needed

This is a college-level writing class. I have completed the full essay 1st draft. But I still need help to proofreading it. Please see the attachment to know what kinds of errors should be corrected. And please change whatever looks like badly written (off topic, bad transition, awkward vocabulary or sentences, etc.) Please be aware of that any grammar error will result in losing credits. You can edit on my document directly.

It's only 2 pages long and without research resources. So I'm paying $10 for this.

Thank you.

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