Chapter (1)

Great efforts on your latest revision. There are many noticeable improvements, additions, and revisions to this submission. Kudos to your excellent progress! Below are two buckets of feedback to center your focus for revision: Green Means Go: The main need still centers on citing your statements and claims. If a sentence reads as if you are stating something or claiming something, it needs a citation. In some places, you go several sentences without a citation, but make claims in those sentences. Make sure citations are present. This is non-negotiable for doctoral writing and is something we have to get right before moving on. I've used green highlights to indicate places you need to go and provide appropriate citations. In some instances, you have some in-text citations that have 2-3 authors cited together. Make sure that you are providing the citation directly after the claim/statement from research. While it is generally acceptable to combine citations in this manner in some academic work, with a capstone or dissertation it is more vital to cite directly after you have claimed or stated to avoid any semblance of plagiarism and to avoid any vague or unclear assertions. Other Areas: I have highlighted some other areas to address that were noted last time: alphabetizing sources when multiple are cited in text (yellow highlights), and inserting the word "proposed" throughout when you refer to your study (orange highlights). Even though I highlight many areas with feedback and commentary, ultimately, make sure you are combing through your work to apply the feedback to all instances. I will not always identify all areas, so make sure you take what is shared and apply it to your body of work to ensure complete coverage and application. Final Thoughts: There's a strong chance that just 1 (maybe 2) more good revisions can get you to chapter approval. You're almost there and are in the fine-tuning stages of this initial chapter! Great progress so far!