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This outline sounds like a travel brochure. For this speech your audience needs your perspective and concrete examples. As written this could apply to any island anywhere.

For the revision include 3 specific nouns (places, foods, events), 2 first-person moments (“I remember…”, “I noticed…”), 1 comparison to life in the U.S.

Consider answering this: What is one thing about living in the British Virgin Islands that would surprise us?

Our parents are allowed to beat us, and they don’t play, if we are out of control we will get a beating where ever we are.

Introduction -- needs a specific example like a grocery store or a commute

Body -- needs specifics. what music?what festivals? "slow" compared to what?

Calypso music is the main music played by local bands, festival- emancipation we celebrate each year as our freedom form slavery, the music, costumes and food, partying for 2 weeks its to dye for.

Conclusion - include something specific that you miss or a lesson you've learned.