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Individually or in small groups, review the following statements or paragraphs. Diagnose each one and rewrite. Then check the Readability Index to compare the old and new versions, and be sure you’ re satisfied with your new ones. Try the read-aloud test as well. Finally, proofread. For an added learning experience, compare your version with those of classmates. A. From a Respected Online Newspaper in a Weak Moment The core values of an effective community leadership program help create among stakeholders and participants a shared sense of destiny in devising strategies for implementing a common set of community goals based on holding the community in trust for future generations. B. From an Interoffice E-mail Dear X Department Staff: On June 18, at 2:00 p. m., a meeting has been scheduled to follow up on our previous conversation of May 10, and I would ask you to make arrangements to be in attendance. It is anticipated that approximately two hours will be necessary to cover the agenda thoroughly and review the various recommendations that were previously made. Please advise me of your availability. C. From a Wall Street Journal Op-Ed At the most basic level, however, capitalism has become the world’ s economic ideology of choice primarily because it demonstrably unlocks a higher fraction of the human potential with ubiquitous organizational incentives that reward hard work, ingenuity, and innovation. D. From an Advertorial With risk-weighted profitability metrics implemented in a consistent manner across the organization, both financial and staff resources can now be optimally allocated based on maximized overall business performance.E. From a Website Design happens at the intersection of the user, the interface, and their context. It’ s essential for interface designers to understand the gamut of contexts that can occur, thereby ensuring they create designs that are usable no matter what’ s happening around the user. F. From an E-Mail Promotion of an Event Called “ The Harsh New Media Reality ” Insights on the need for more precise media training that emphasizes a contextual sentence that stimulates a reporters lead and to provide compelling quotes, which together manipulate the reporter’ s script, giving you the ability to control the edit.