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Afterb readingb throughb theb study,b thereb wereb twob notableb strengths:
1. Theb datab analysisincludingb Y-interceptareb present,b withb theb SPSSb
formattingb ofb APAb doneb well.
2. Theb authorb didb ab goodb jobb identifyingb limitationsb ofb theb studyb thatb couldb
haveb beenb impactful.
b b b b b b b b b b b b Theb relevanceb ofb theb articlesb discussedb wasb clear,b butb causalb languageb
wasb usedb inb theb lastb paragraphb whenb theb authorb mentionsb thatb spiritualityb
improvesb mentalb health;b ifb heb wasb referringb tob ab studyb thereb wasb nob clearb
reference.b Ab fewb issuesb thatb couldb beb improvedb uponb areb asb follows:
1. Inb theb runningb head,b thereb isb singularb languageb (woman’s)b andb pluralb
languageb (their).b Whileb theb Americanb Psychologicalb Associationb (2020)b
encouragesb singularb “they”b whenb genderb isb inb questionb (Sectionb 4.18),b
hereb itb doesb notb appearb tob be,b sob theb correctionb wouldb beb tob changeb “ab
woman’s”b tob “women’s”.
2. Whileb theb authorb doesb ab greatb jobb formattingb SPSSb datab inb APAb format,b
thatb applicationb tob theb wordb processorb couldb useb someb improvement,b
withb largeb chunksb ofb whiteb space.b Itb seemsb shrinkingb theb tablesb slightlyb
mayb beb enoughb tob getb themb onb theb sameb pageb asb theirb headings;b titleb
caseb shouldb alsob beb usedb forb tableb titlesb asb perb Sectionb 7.9b (Americanb
Psychologicalb Association,b 2020).
3. Theb authorb expressesb theb understandingb thatb theb resultsb areb non-
significant,b butb inb theb Resultsb section,b saysb thatb theb nullb hypothesisb isb
not.
Afterb goingb throughb yourb studyb onb theb correlationb betweenb spiritualityb andb
loneliness,b theb resultb andb discussionb sectionsb areb wellb writtenb andb checkedb
manyb ofb theb assignmentb requirementb boxes.b Youb startb byb statingb theb
hypothesisb ofb theb study,b whichb givesb theb readerb ab goodb ideab ofb theb purposeb
ofb theb study.b Youb commencedb theb resultb sectionb byb statingb theb attributesb ofb
theb sampleb populationb whileb presentingb theb frequencyb statisticsb withoutb
includingb theb tablesb asb perb theb instructions.b Youb rightlyb notedb theb missingb
demographicb characteristicsb inb theb data,b whichb pointedb tob weaknessb inb theb
data.b
b b b b b b b b b b b b b Theb simpleb linearb regressionb modelb inb theb hypothesisb testingb
sectionb wasb used,b whichb isb preferb tob correlationb analysis.b Theb linearb
regressionb modelb providesb moreb informationb thanb theb correlation.b Ib alsob
appreciateb thatb youb correctlyb formattedb theb tableb usingb theb APAb guidelinesb
andb namedb themb appropriately.b Yourb useb ofb ab scatterb plotb gaveb anb excellentb
visualb analysisb ofb theb relationshipb betweenb theb variablesb inb theb research.
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b b b b b b b b b b b b Yourb interpretationb ofb regressionb outputb wasb alsob correct,b whichb
indicatedb thatb spiritualityb wasb anb insignificantb predictorb ofb lonelinessb withb ab
p-valueb ofb 0.423.b Ib alsob agreeb withb yourb R
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b interpretation,b whereb youb indicateb
thatb spiritualityb accountedb forb ab 3.16%b percentageb inb theb variabilityb ofb
loneliness.b However,b Ib thinkb yourb interpretationb ofb theb relationshipb betweenb
theb variablesb mightb beb misplaced.b Forb instance,b youb state,b “Theb correlationb
betweenb lowerb levelsb ofb lonelinessb andb higherb levelsb ofb spiritualityb isb 0.190.”b
Ib thisb thisb isb misleadingb sinceb thereb isb ab positiveb correlationb betweenb
lonelinessb andb spirituality.b Therefore,b higherb levelsb ofb spiritualityb predictedb
higherb levelsb ofb loneliness.
b b b b b b b b b b b b b Inb theb resultb section,b youb correctlyb mentionedb theb aimb ofb theb
studyb andb itsb findingsb whichb gaveb theb readerb ab summaryb ofb theb study.b Youb
furtherb revisitedb theb weaknessb inb theb data,b notingb thatb convenienceb samplingb
resultedb inb ab biasedb andb non-representativeb sample.b Youb alsob citedb threeb
previousb studiesb onb theb studyb topic,b notingb thatb theyb contradictedb yourb
researchb findings.b Youb finallyb highlightedb theb importanceb ofb studyingb theb
relationshipb betweenb theb studyb variablesb whenb recommendingb ab similarb
studyb thatb surpassedb theb weaknessesb ofb yourb study.b Ib appreciateb theb factb
thatb yourb researchb wasb wellb conductedb andb explained.
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References
Americanb Psychologicalb Association.b (2020).b Publicationb manualb ofb theb Americanb
Psychologicalb Associationb 2020:b Theb officialb guideb tob APAb styleb (7thb ed.).b Americanb
Psychologicalb Association.
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