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After reviewing this study there were a couple of strengths that stood out. First, the
articles cited were relevant to the study, which made the discussion section easy to
understand. Secondly, the table and figure used are easy to read and correctly changed
from color to grayscale as stated in Section 7.26 in the APA manual(American
Psychological Association, 2020).
There was also a few errors, stated below, that can be easily fixed by the author.
1. The reference section should start with a new page break bringing the reference title
to the top of the page instead of the middle as stated in Section 2.12 in the APA
manual (American Psychological Association, 2020).
2. Figure 1 should be called out within the text or cited as stated in Section 7.5 of the
APA manual, instead it is randomly stated making it confusing with how the figure is
related to the text (American Psychological Association, 2020).
3. The results section should come before the discussion section, following the layout
described in the video presentation for this week (St. Peters, M., 2021).
After reviewing your study, I was able to find some strengths regarding your study. The
first strength was that the articles that you shared within your study were relevant and
helpful while discussing the relationship between religion, anxiety, and depression. The
articles enhanced your study from the survey results and helped create a strong
discussion. The second strength was that your table and figure were easy to read and
understand. However, I did stumble across to find some errors within your study. The
first error was that I did not see that you called out the figure within your text based
on the APA manual. Due to the figure not being mentioned within the text; it appears
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confusing because the figure is not discussed within the paragraphs that correlate the
study together. Therefore, I would suggest writing a few sentences that discuss the figure
and correlate with your discussion. The second error that I found was that there were a
few grammar errors when discussing the percentages among the participants. I would
suggest rewriting the percentages to flow appropriately within your discussion and
checking the APA manual to correct these sentences. The third error that I found was
the results section should appear before the discussion. I would suggest looking over the
layout based on the video presentation to appropriately correct the layout of the paper
References
American Psychological Association. (2020). Publication manual of the American
Psychological Association 2020: The official guide to APA style (7th ed.). American
Psychological Association.
St. Peters, M. (2021, November 10). Scientific writing: results and discussion [Video].
Liberty University. https://canvas.liberty.edu/courses/336469/pages/watch-scientific-writing-
results-and-discussion?module_item_id=25799373
