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PERSUASIVE ESSAY REWRITING SSIGNMENT P A TEMPLATE
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Step 1: Argument Essay Thesis Statement and Planning
Directions: Complete all of the elements of the planning; otherwise, the content of your piece
will not be accurate.
My Topic: Can Money Buy Happiness?
Topic:
You will choose 1 from the following topics for your Persuasive Essay:
• Should children participate in chores at home?
• Should schools teach financial literacy?
• Do all students need to learn a foreign language?
• Should households be required to recycle?
• Is dieting healthy?
• Can money buy happiness?
My Attitude: Most people think money can buy happiness, research shows this to be
true but it the actual money that is the cause. isn’t
My Purpose: To inform.
My Thesis Statement: I will argue that money can buy people happiness as
supported by both scientific research and my personal experience
My Audience: Everyone
Outline:
I. Everyone’s lives depend on the choices they make as well as goals that they set
for themselves.
a. Some believe that romantic relationships bring happiness and
satisfaction, while still others find it in fame and wealth.
b. Though the end goal for most people is different, several believe
that money will bring them closer to it.
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II. I will argue that money can buy people happiness as supported by both scientific
research and my personal experience
a. Buying’ time gives people a better sense of well-being than acquiring
material things.
b. people need money to be happy, not necessarily because of money itself but
rather because of feeling more secure and relaxed to be their true self.From
personal experience money is a vital key to happiness.
a. When my bills are covered I don’t have to worry.
b. I have the opportunity to experience things I normally . wouldn’t
III. More money in one’s bank account has nothing to do with happiness
a. What we choose to spend the money on is key.
b. We will have a increase in a fulfilled type life.
Step 2: Persuasive Essay First Draft
Everyone’s lives depend on the choices they make well as goals that as
they set for themselves. Though the definitions will differ, most people want to
live a happy and content life But what exactly is the meaning of a happy and .
content life? Some believe that romantic relationships bring happiness and
satisfaction, while still others find it in fame and wealth. Though the end goal
for most people is different, several believe that money will bring them closer
to it.
In this essay, I will argue that money can buy people happiness as
supported by both scientific research and my personal experience. Studies
show that there is a positive and statistically significant relationship between
financial gain and happiness In his article, Nield (2017) refers to a study, .
which has found that money can buy happiness if we spend it on making more
free time. This analysis shows that ‘buying’ time gives people a better sense
of well-being than acquiring material things. On another hand, Rampton
(2017) suggests that happiness is significantly correlated with income up to
approximately $75,000 in annual salary. After that, the author states, “there
tends to be little correlation between income and happiness” (Rampton, 2017,
para. 1). This implies that the standard understanding of the relationship
between money and happiness is wrong. Most people claim that more income
implies more satisfaction. However, the research shows that people only need
to pass a certain threshold; after that, they carry about their income less. This
figure is not random. Having approximately $75,000 in annual income gives
one freedom to be their true self. In his 1943 paper, “A Theory of Human
Motivation”, Abraham Maslow stressed that “healthy human beings have a
certain number of needs, and that these needs are arranged in a hierarchy”
(Burton, 2012, para. 1). The psychologist famously proposed that higher
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needs come into an individual’s focus only once their most basic needs, such
as food, shelter, safety, and stability, is met. Thus, the empirical evidence, as
well as psychological studies, seem to be unanimous that people need money
to be happy, not necessarily because of money itself but rather because of
feeling more secure and relaxed to be their true self.
My personal experience also tells me that money is a vital component of
happiness. There are several primary reasons that support this statement.
First, money tends to aid in allowing me to enjoy various experiences that
wouldn’t be possible otherwise Also when I have money to cover life .
necessities then I worry less about coming up with ideas on how I am going to
pay bills so that brings happiness .
Gordon (2017) suggests that experiences help to put a positive spin on our
recollections. She argues that we can put a positive spin on any experience,
even if it did not seem to be perfect at the moment it was taking place.
Material things, on the other hand, get worn out and forgotten over time. In
addition, experience is less subject to comparison with other individuals.
Gordon (2017) proposes that, when focusing on gaining material things only, it
is always possible that someone else will have something that’s more
expensive, better, faster, larger. Experiences, on the other hand, are hard to
compare. Thus, money invested in a good vacation may bring someone a
personal satisfaction .
Second, money allows individuals a opportunity to invest in oneself. Money
gives provides a freedom to be their true self. Ever wanted to learn French?
You can go to France for summer and study a language there. Always dreamt
of playing the piano?You can hire a private tutor and learn how to play in a no
time. Money assists an individual to focus more on getting in tune with
themselves and pursuing their dreams.
In conclusion, the objective of this essay is to support the argument that
money can buy happiness as suggested by scientific studies and my firsthand
experiences. However, I have shown that money is not a goal. More money in
one’s bank account has nothing to do with happiness; instead, what matters is
how the money is spent. In my opinion, spending money on experiences and
self-development, instead of material things, is exactly what will help us to
build a better and more prosperous society.
References
Burton, N. (2012). Our Hierarchy of Needs. Psychology Today. Retrieved 31 March 2018, from
https://www.psychologytoday.com Gordon, A. (2017).
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Can Money Buy You Happiness? Psychology Today. Retrieved 31 March 2018, from
https://www.psychologytoday.com Nield, D. (2017).
Study Shows Money Really Can Buy Happiness If You Spend It the Right Way. Entrepreneur. –
Retrieved 31 March 2018, from https://entrepreneur.com/article/30981
Step 3: Persuasive Essay Rewriting
s goals that they set for Everyone’s lives depend on the choices they make as well a
themselves. Though the definitions will differ, most people want to live a happy and content
life. But what exactly is the meaning of a happy and content life? Some believe that
romantic relationships bring happiness and satisfaction, while still others find it in fame
and wealth. Though the end goal for most people is different, several believe that money
will bring them closer to it.
In this essay, I will argue that money can buy people happiness as supported by both
scientific research and my personal experience. Studies show that there is a positive and
statistically significant relationship between financial gain and happiness. In his article,
Nield (2017) refers to a study, which has found that money can buy happiness if we spend it
on making more free time. This analysis shows that ‘buying’ time gives people a better
sense of well-being than acquiring material things. On another hand, Rampton (2017)
suggests that happiness is significantly correlated with income up to approximately $75,000
in annual salary. After that, the author states, “there tends to be little correlation between
income and happiness” (Rampton, 2017, para. 1). This implies that the standard
understanding of the relationship between money and happiness is wrong. Most people
claim that more income implies more satisfaction. However, the research shows that people
only need to pass a certain threshold; after that, they carry about their income less. This
figure is not random. Having approximately $75,000 in annual income gives one freedom to
be their true self. In his 1943 paper, “A Theory of Human Motivation”, Abraham Maslow
stressed that “healthy human beings have a certain number of needs, and that these needs
are arranged in a hierarchy” (Burton, 2012, para. 1). The psychologist famously proposed
that higher needs come into an individual’s focus only once their most basic needs, such as
food, shelter, safety, and stability, is met. Thus, the empirical evidence, as well as
psychological studies, seem to be unanimous that people need money to be happy, not
necessarily because of money itself but rather because of feeling more secure and relaxed to
be their true self.
My personal experience also tells me that money is a vital component of happiness.
There are several primary reasons that support this statement. First, money tends to aid in
allowing me to enjoy various experiences that wouldn’t be possible otherwise. Also when I
have money to cover life necessities then I worry less about coming up with ideas on how I
am going to pay bills so that brings happiness.
Gordon (2017) suggests that experiences help to put a positive spin on our recollections.
She argues that we can put a positive spin on any experience, even if it did not seem to be
perfect at the moment it was taking place. Material things, on the other hand, get worn out
and forgotten over time. In addition, experience is less subject to comparison with other
individuals. Gordon (2017) proposes that, when focusing on gaining material things only, it
is always possible that someone else will have something that’s more expensive, better,
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faster, larger. Experiences, on the other hand, are hard to compare. Thus, money invested
in a good vacation may bring someone a personal satisfaction.
Second, money allows individuals a opportunity to invest in oneself. Money gives
provides a freedom to be their true self. Ever wanted to learn French? You can go to
France for summer and study a language there. Always dreamt of playing the piano?You
can hire a private tutor and learn how to play in a no time. Money assists an individual to
focus more on getting in tune with themselves and pursuing their dreams.
In conclusion, the objective of this essay is to support the argument that money can buy
happiness as suggested by scientific studies and my firsthand experiences. However, I have
shown that money is not a goal. More money in one’s bank account has nothing to do with
happiness; instead, what matters is how the money is spent. In my opinion, spending money
on experiences and self-development, instead of material things, is exactly what will help us
to build a better and more prosperous society.
References
Burton, N. (2012). Our Hierarchy of Needs. Psychology Today. Retrieved 31 March 2018,
from https://www.psychologytoday.com Gordon, A. (2017).
Can Money Buy You Happiness? Psychology Today. Retrieved 31 March 2018, from
https://www.psychologytoday.com Nield, D. (2017).
Study Shows Money Really Can Buy Happiness If You Spend It the Right Way. –
Entrepreneur. Retrieved 31 March 2018, from https://entrepreneur.com/article/30981
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