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#1 Source

A problem with getting coherent thinking on the risk of terrorism is that reporters and politicians find extreme and alarmist possibilities so much more appealing than discussions of broader context, much less of statistical reality.

That is, although hysteria and alarmism rarely make much sense, politicians and the media are often naturally drawn to them. Mueller, J. (2009)

#1 Student:

A problem in getting coherent thinking on the risk of terrorism is that politicians find extreme and alarmist possibilities so much more appealing than discussions of broader context, much less of statistical reality. Hysteria and alarmism rarely make much sense but politicians and the media are drawn to them.

#2 Source:

By its very nature, domestic and homeland security intelligence is intrusive and risks infringing on civil liberties. Dahl, E. (2011)

#2 Student:

Former DHS Secretary Michael Chertoff admits that by its very nature, domestic and homeland security intelligence work is intrusive (Dahl, 2011).

#3 Source:

In struggling to answer the seemingly simple question of who is in charge of fusion centers at a recent congressional hearing, a Department of Homeland Security official could only offer that ‘fusion centers are in charge of fusion centers.’ One analyst reportedly described his fusion center as the “wild west,” where officials were free to “use a variety of technologies before ‘politics’ catches up and limits options. (ACLU, 2013)

#3 Student:

In a recent Congressional hearing however, one DHS official described the fusion center as the ‘wild west,’ where officials are free to use a variety of technologies before politics catches up and limits the options (ACLU, 2013).

POSITIVE (+) evaluation

NEGATIVE (-) evaluation

Although (-) evaluative criterion #1,

[Author’s last name (year)] writes an effective article because (+) evaluative criteria #2 and (+) evaluative criteria #3.

Although (+) evaluative criterion #1,

[Author’s last name (year)] writes an ineffective article because (-) evaluative criteria #2 and (-) evaluative criteria #3.

Author’s last name (year) states/explains/illustrates ... [general main argument]

To start/ At first, Rapaport begins/refers that ….

Then, the author asserts/elaborates/expands that ….

After that, Rapaport continues/describes/adds that …

In the end/Finally, the author suggests/concludes ….

Assertion

State what the paragraph will discuss/prove with the main THESIS key word (overall evaluation) and an ASSERTION key word (criteria + evaluation of criteria) from the roadmap.

e.g. The article is ineffective because of the complex writing style through which the author writes the article

Explanation

(one sentence)

Explain the evaluation of the criteria (assertion key word) in more detail.

e.g. More specifically(=In more detail), the author chooses to use a series of jargons that do not have a significant bearing on the overall main argument.

Evidence 1

More general evidence below; make sure to introduce with accurate context to the criteria (i.e. organization/evidence/style) and use some “quotation” to prove close reading of the article.

e.g. For instance, when the author describes the scene of a child being separated from her mother in order to be taken to her workplace, the author states, “The mise-en-scene of this scene is heartbreaking.” (Smith, 2017, p.00)

Discussion 1

Explain how the evidence proves the evaluation in your own words. Remember to use specific evaluative language/ focus on proving the evaluations of the criteria, and how the author was successful/unsuccessful in using the criteria.

e.g. Clearly, the author is using the phrase “mise-en-scene” in order to describe the heartbreaking scene of the separation between the mother and the child, but the words do not bring any new meaning or introduce any new idea into the argument. The phrase “mise-en-scene” is used to describe a particular scene from a film, thereby not being appropriate for this type of article (citation). The writing style of the article takes away from the description of the scene.

Evidence 2

Use another quote or direct reference to the book/article. Make sure to introduce with accurate context to the criteria. Use some “quotation” to prove close reading of the article.

e.g. In addition, Moreover, Not only this) + (The article also states/reports/highlights)

Discussion 2

Explain the effectiveness or ineffectiveness of the evidence as it is related to the chosen criteria and its evaluation. Use specific evaluative language to justify your evaluation.

e.g. Clearly (=For this reason, With this in mind), This suggests/reveals/means/highlights that,

Connection sentence

Using the thesis key word (overall evaluation) and the assertion key word (criteria + evaluation of the criteria) (same key words from the assertion), summarize how the paragraph proved the assertion/thesis

e.g. Therefore(=Thus/Hence),

Assertion

Explanation

(one sentence)

Evidence 1

Discussion 1

Evidence 2

Discussion 2

Connection sentence

(one sentence)

Source Types

References in APA Format

Useful sentences from the source with a “direct quotation” (p. **).

Why do you believe this article to be useful?

Journal Article

Journal Article

Newspaper

Newspaper

Newspaper

Gov/NGO Websites

Gov/NGO Websites

Book (or journal)

Book (or journal)

Youtube/

TedTalk

INTRODUCTION

1) Hook (1 source): “Direct quote” with or without a context in one sentence.

2) Topic & purpose sentences

3)Thesis statement (PTOCR)

· Perspective:

· Topic:

· Opinion:

· Concept:

Cause OR Effect (Highlight one)

· Roadmap (4 paragraph keywords):

Write your thesis statement here :

BACKGROUND PARAGRAPH (3-4sources. Paraphrased. Cited.)

1) General definition on the topic

2) Historical information

3) Factual information (if your essay is focusing on causes, consider writing researched effects here. If your essay is focusing on effects of the issue, consider providing causes here.)

4 BODY PARAGRAPHS

- ‘Main evidence 1’ & ‘Supporting evidence’ can be found from general sources including experts’ opinion & statistics (Newspaper, Journal articles, Government/NGO websites).

- ‘Main evidence 2’ should be more specific sources such as illustrative examples/ interviews from the demographics/ testimonies/ case studies (YouTube/ Ted-Talks/social media can be used).

-All ‘Supporting evidence’ needs to be paraphrased in this essay.

CONCLUSION

1st Body Paragraph: Paragraph Key Word: ________________________

1

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

2

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

3

Supporting Evidence

(in 2nd discussion)

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

4

Supporting Evidence

(in explanation)

Optional

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

2nd Body Paragraph: Paragraph Key Word:

1

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

2

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

3

Supporting Evidence

(in 2nd discussion)

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

4

Supporting Evidence

(in explanation)

Optional

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

3rd Body Paragraph: Paragraph Key Word:

1

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

2

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

3

Supporting Evidence

(in 2nd discussion)

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

4

Supporting Evidence

(in explanation)

Optional

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

4th Body Paragraph: Paragraph Key Word:

1

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

2

Main Evidence

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

3

Supporting Evidence

(in 2nd discussion)

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

4

Supporting Evidence

(in explanation)

Optional

Direct Quote with a citation: “…..” (citation)

·

APA reference:

Thesis

Statement

(Introduction)

i.e. From an anthropological perspective, orphan care in Haiti must focus on nurturing because of complex cultural patterns continue to put children at risk through the following effects: abandonment, 2, 3, and 4.

Yours:

Body Paragraph: I will organize my paper by CONCEPT or OPINION (highlight one)

Assertion

State Topic + Thesis KW (concept or opinion) + Paragraph KW.

CONCEPT

i.e. Orphan care in Haiti reveals complex cultural patterns because children are at risk through abandonment.

OPINION

i.e. Orphan care in Haiti reveals the need to focus on nurturing because children are at risk through abandonment.

Yours:

Explanation

Trans. (In more detail, More specifically, In other words)

Explain the paragraph keyword with a synonym. What do you mean by ‘abandonment’?

i.e. In other words, children in Haiti without parents are often left alone to fend for themselves while given no support from outside sources, which leads to their sense of distrust (Proctor, 2018).

Yours:

Evidence 1

Trans.(According to, As ____states/reports/indicates)

Introduce expert explanation/statistics with sufficient context, 3Es & “quote” (citation needed).

i.e. According to John Smith, a reporter from the New York Times, a newspaper that covers a variety of topics OR who has written extensively on the orphanage crisis in Haiti, […context…] “Orphans are often thrust into adulthood because they are forced to live their lives on their own” (Smith, 2018, p.00).

Yours:

Discussion 1

Trans. (Clearly, This indicates that, It is clear that, In other words)

Explain how the evidence connects to the assertion. Connect the assertion KW with Thesis KW (Concept/opinion).

i.e. This indicates that without support from adults, which speaks to the cultural norm of Haiti as leaving children to fend for themselves, orphans are isolated from the rest of the society. (2-3sentences)

Yours:

Evidence 2

Trans. (In addition, For example, Moreover, For instance, According to _____, ____ states/reports/highlights/suggests that)

Write more specific evidence (a real illustrative example/ interview/case study) + credentials + context + “direct quote” (citation).

Yours:

Discussion 2

Trans. (Clearly, With this in mind, This suggests/reveals/highlights that)

Explain how the evidence proves the assertion/thesis/evidence above.

Explain the importance in the scheme of topic.

Supporting Evidence appears here to back up the evidence above (expert’s opinion/ testimony/ statistics). Supporting evidence should be paraphrased.

Yours:

Connection

Trans. (Therefore/Thus/Hence)

Using Topic + Thesis KW (concept/opinion) + Paragraph KW, summarize how the paragraph proved the assertion in one sentence.

Yours:

[Biblical passage] demonstrates/reveals + [BIG IMPRESSION] + through the following events/characters/symbols (choose one): 1, 2, and 3.

i.e. [The book of John 13:1-17] reveals [the significance of serving others] through the following events: Jesus preparing to wash His disciples’ feet, ___________________ and ____________________.

Your thesis statement:

John 13:1-17 demonstrates the significance of serving others through the following events: Jesus preparing to wash His disciples’ feet, Jesus kindly answering to Peter’s request, and _____.

Thesis

Statement

(End of Introduction.)

Thesis pattern: [Biblical passage] demonstrates/reveals/illustrates + [BIG IMPRESSION] + through the following events/characters (choose one): 1, 2, and 3 (roadmap).

Write your thesis here =>

Body Paragraph Pattern

Assertion

State what the paragraph will discuss with Big impression (Thesis Key word) and Paragraph Key word (character/event) from the roadmap.

Yours:

Explanation

Trans. (In more detail, More specifically, In other words)

Explain the assertion in more detail, focusing on the Paragraph Key word in one sentence.

Yours:

Evidence 1

Trans. (In the book of […] /In the passage/text, + context + “quote”)

Provide a “quote” of the text that includes words that are meaningful to the big impression. (Citation needed).

Yours:

Discussion 1

Trans. (Clearly; This indicates that; It is clear that; In other words)

Explain how the quotation is meaningful focusing on key words from the text and explain how the words are connected to the assertion and big impression (Thesis key word).

Yours:

Evidence 2

In addition,/Moreover, in the book of […], context + “quote”

Provide another “quote” that explains your big impression. The evidence should be from the same bible story, not from other stories (Citation needed).

Yours:

Discussion 2

Transition word/phrase (Clearly, This suggests/reveals/means/highlights that, For this reason, With this in mind,)

Explain how the quotation/evidence connects with your big impression (Thesis Key word) highlighting some key words from the text and explain how it proves the assertion.

Yours:

Connection

Trans. (Therefore/Thus/Hence)

Using Big impression (Thesis Key word) and the same Paragraph Key word (character/event) from the roadmap, summarize how the paragraph proved the assertion/thesis in one sentence.

Yours: