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English 1201 / Peer Feedback Questions

Essay Writer's Name: Nouf Almutairi

Essay’s Title: Visual Text Analysis

Peer Reviewer’s Name: Denise Niyomugeni

Read through the paper completely before answering any of the following questions.

1. Does the introduction draw your attention and make you want to read on? If not, make suggestions for improvement.

 After you provided the date image were published, it would sound better if you would add something interesting about that art to draw attention before explaining the main purpose of the image.

2. In the first couple of sentences of the introduction, does your classmate identify the genre and context of the image (where and when it was published; what was happening in the world at the time of publication; who the artist or graphic designer is)? If not, please help your classmate add this information.

 She identified the genre and context of the image such as when, where and who published not only that but she provided the purpose of the image. “meant to communicate the theme of nurture.” However is would be better if she tells us why that was important or why people would care at the time that image were published.

3. Does your classmate make a claim about the image in terms of what the image is presenting as its argument? If this isn’t clearly articulated, please provide detailed suggestions for revising this important piece of information.

 Yes she made a claim about the image in term of what the image is presenting as its argument.

4. Is your classmate’s thesis clearly stated? In other words, do you know the focus of the writer’s response to the image? Does he/she find the image to be effective/persuasive? Does the writer clearly and carefully articulate how the image works to persuade? Make sure this articulation is detailed and takes the reader back to the image again and again.

 At the end of the introduction I am having trouble with figure out which one is your thesis. After you said “The artist has also used shape to achieve balance (Williams, 66). For example, the bottom part of the woman is wider than the top. Shape also helps us to view the picture as real.” It would be better to provide the hypothesis that would give us an idea of what next paragraph or you overall essay.

5. Does the writer discuss the audience of the image and give reasons and examples as support? Is this organized into a paragraph with a clear topic sentence?

 Definitely, you discussed the audience of the image very well and give reasons and example as support.

6. Do all the topic sentences relate to the thesis statement? Mark any that don’t and write the reason that they don’t. What you are doing here is helping your classmate write a unified, cohesive essay.

 As I read whole essay I think she did great with staying on topic and provide more information relate to the thesis statement except that that she did not lay out thesis in introduction

7. If there is text in or with the image, does the writer address the language used and analyze their effect on the overall argument presented by the image?

 Definitely, the writer addressed the language used and analyze their effect on the overall argument presented by the image.

8. Are the rhetorical appeals in the image identified by your classmate? Are there symbolic (historical, cultural, political, and/or religious, for example) elements that the writer can discuss to clarify the appeal to the viewer?

 Yes there are rhetorical appeals in the image that she identified such as pathos, logic and ethos for example, she explain that anyone that sees the image would feel some warmth inside and see how motherhood is beautiful which indicate pathos not only that but she also explain that how they use logos ins showing the image of the women flowers and child holding flower. “It means that we have to nurture what those who will come after us will enjoy, which is just about the rule of life. These rhetorical appeals enable the audience to better understand the image and increase the author's persuasiveness in giving her argument.”

9. Is there enough explanation in each paragraph for you to understand the point that your classmate is making? If not, indicate where more explanation is needed.

 There is enough explanation in each paragraph for to understand the point that she is making.

10. Compare the thesis and the concluding paragraph. Can you see a logical connection between the two and not just a repetition of information? If not, make suggestions for improvement.

 You did great, I can see a logical connection between thesis and the concluding paragraph clearly and understandable with not just repeating information.

11. Underline any sentences that are unclear and need to be revised for clarity.

 All sentences were clear.

12. What is the most interesting part of the essay?

 I think the entire essay is very interesting especially when you were talking about how the image depicts the picture of a woman with her child. which means that the woman is nurturing the child. Also, the woman is watering the flowers, which also means that she is nurturing the flowers. The child is holding a flower, which can be translated to mean that we nurture so that others can enjoy our work's fruits. This is extremely strong message.

13. Do you have any overall suggestions for improvement? Please be specific.

 Beside providing more information in introduction for overall essay I think you did great job.

14. Has your classmate included the image in his/her essay (as fig.1), referred to it throughout, and included its MLA citation on a separated Works Cited page?

 Yes she included the image in the first page of her essay and MLA citation (Work Cited) on separated paper. However on right corner of the pages where it says page number you should put first initial and you lastname instead of ( surname 1)

15. What techniques or strategies does your classmate use to communicate his/her argument clearly and fairly that you would like to try in your own Visual Analysis?

 After reading entire essay I think the strategies my classmate used to communicate her argument was to try to explain her main arguments and provides examples to make the essay clearly and fairly that I would like to try in my own visual analysis.

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Surname 1

Name: Nouf Almutairi

Instructor: Arnold Dair

Course: ENG -1201-R07

Date: 10.12.2020

Visual text analysis

Date accessed: 14/10/2020

This is an image by Loveis Wise, which appeared on the New Yorker cover on the 4th and 11th of June 208. The image was meant to communicate the theme of nurture. There are various elements of art that we can see from this image. One of these is line. The artist has used line to make the picture look real (Williams, 66). Even though there is no physical distance in the picture, we can perceive, for example, that there is a distance between the woman and the flowers in front of her. The artist has also used shape to achieve balance (Williams, 66). For example, the bottom part of the woman is wider than the top. Shape also helps us to view the picture as real.

There is the use of color by the artist. Apart from aesthetics, it helps us identify the various objects in the image (Williams, 67). We can, for example, tell that flowers, underground vegetation, and people, among others. The artist has also utilized the element of space in the image. There is an unpainted section in the image, which helps to bring about the element of space. Lastly, the artist uses texture, which is brought out by how the artist uses color in the image (Williams, 67). For example, we can tell that the texture of the woman's skin is different from that of her hair.

The overall argument and purpose of this image are to enhance the theme of nurture. The image is suitable for a general audience as the theme of nurture is a general topic among many. The image depicts the picture of a woman with her child. This means that the woman is nurturing the child. Also, the woman is watering the flowers, which also means that she is nurturing the flowers. The child is holding a flower, which can be translated to mean that we nurture so that others can enjoy our work's fruits. This is a very strong message.

We can tell that the artist uses rhetorical appeals to bring out the visual argument. In appealing to ethos, the artist is renowned for her many images, which usually communicate love and oneness. The artist uses pathos greatly to bring out the argument. Motherhood is beautiful, and anyone who would see this would feel some warmth inside. She also uses logos in showing the image of a woman watering flowers and a child holding a flower. It means that we have to nurture what those who will come after us will enjoy, which is just about the rule of life. These rhetorical appeals enable the audience to better understand the image and increase the author's persuasiveness in giving her argument.

The visual and verbal cues in this image work together to bring out the argument of the artist. The image is titled 'nurture'. The visual work comes in to emphasize this theme. It shows the image of a woman with a child and the woman watering a flower, both of which illustrate nurture. By showing the image of a child holding a flower, the visual emphasizes the author's argument that we have to nurture for the sake of ourselves and others. In this case, the context is the importance of nurturing, and it makes the image more impactful.

In reading this analysis, I would like the reader to think about the elements of art and how they have been used by the author to bring out meaning in the image. I would also want them to think about the argument that the artist was trying to pass across in her image. The image's theme is clearly indicated (nurture), but what does the artist want us to learn about nurture? The unique perspective of this image is how the author has used it to hide meaning to engage the audience's mind. It communicates several things in one picture, including what nurture is and its importance. My argument for this paper is that by nurturing, we give our future generations something to enjoy.

Works Cited

Williams, Wendy R. "Attending to the visual aspects of visual storytelling: using art and design concepts to interpret and compose narratives with images." Journal of Visual Literacy 38.1-2 (2019): 66-82. Retrieved from https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/abs/10.1080/1051144X.2019.1569832

Wise, Loveis. “Nurture” (2018). Retrieved from https://www.google.com/url?sa=i&url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.newyorker.com%2Fculture%2Fcover-story%2Fcover-story-2018-06-04&psig=AOvVaw1-gwVTR3XJEYxzlAylG5vG&ust=1602769590253000&source=images&cd=vfe&ved=0CAIQjRxqFwoTCNjY27ChtewCFQAAAAAdAAAAABAD

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