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Denise Niyomugeni

Dair Arnold

ENG 1201.215

13 October 2020

Summertime City

Many people do not realize the benefits of teaching and letting our children socialize at a

young age. Kadir Nelson photograph was uploaded on December 18th,2019 on The New Yorker

Magazine Cover called, “Summertime City.” I believe the overall argument and his purpose of

this image are to show people especially parents the happiness of children when they spend time

outside of their apartment and play with other kids.

The rhetorical appeals that operate in this painting is pathos because there are more than

seven kids in this photograph playing in the back of their apartment and 95% of those children

have a smile on their face which indicate their emotion. This means that most kids love playing

outside with others instead of staying inside of their homes. I would like my readers to see

positive outcomes toward children when they spend time playing outdoors with other children as

an important part of a child’s life. Interacting with other children impacts them in several ways:

provides good mental exercise, promotes personal development, and develops social skills.

Specifically, I can relate to this cover because of my background. I was born and raised in a

village called Gihembe Refugee Camp, where I and the kids in my village would spend most of

our free time playing together. I consider myself as being a lucky person to have grown up in a

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generation where playing outdoors was a regular occurrence, where boys and girls played

together in mixed ability and mixed age groups.

I have nieces and nephews here in America, and I wanted to continue the great experiences that

I had as child by encouraging them to play outdoors with other children instead of letting them

stay indoors. Nelson’s painting shows how happy children are when they are outdoors and

playing with each other. It is exactly the same reaction my nieces and nephews get when I tell

them that we’re going to play outside. My argument for this paper is to support parents to help

them feel confidents about letting their children play together outside. Once they understand the

benefits, I feel confident they will agree.

Finally, it may be concluded that the purpose of the image is to show the happiness kids

get when they get out of their house and spend time with other kids playing outside.

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Work Cited

Kadir Nelson, “With Kids Around an Open Hydrant.” The New Yorker. 18 December 2019.

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Peer Feedback Questions for the Visual Analysis - Essay #2.docx

English 1201 / Peer Feedback Questions

Essay Writer's Name:

Essay’s Title:

Peer Reviewer’s Name:

Read through the paper completely before answering any of the following questions.

1. Does the introduction draw your attention and make you want to read on? If not, make suggestions for improvement.

2. In the first couple of sentences of the introduction, does your classmate identify the genre and context of the image (where and when it was published; what was happening in the world at the time of publication; who the artist or graphic designer is)? If not, please help your classmate add this information.

3. Does your classmate make a claim about the image in terms of what the image is presenting as its argument? If this isn’t clearly articulated, please provide detailed suggestions for revising this important piece of information.

4. Is your classmate’s thesis clearly stated? In other words, do you know the focus of the writer’s response to the image? Does he/she find the image to be effective/persuasive? Does the writer clearly and carefully articulate how the image works to persuade? Make sure this articulation is detailed and takes the reader back to the image again and again.

5. Does the writer discuss the audience of the image and give reasons and examples as support? Is this organized into a paragraph with a clear topic sentence?

6. Do all the topic sentences relate to the thesis statement? Mark any that don’t and write the reason that they don’t. What you are doing here is helping your classmate write a unified, cohesive essay.

7. If there is text in or with the image, does the writer address the language used and analyze their effect on the overall argument presented by the image?

8. Are the rhetorical appeals in the image identified by your classmate? Are there symbolic (historical, cultural, political, and/or religious, for example) elements that the writer can discuss to clarify the appeal to the viewer?

9. Is there enough explanation in each paragraph for you to understand the point that your classmate is making? If not, indicate where more explanation is needed.

10. Compare the thesis and the concluding paragraph. Can you see a logical connection between the two and not just a repetition of information? If not, make suggestions for improvement.

11. Underline any sentences that are unclear and need to be revised for clarity.

12. What is the most interesting part of the essay?

13. Do you have any overall suggestions for improvement? Please be specific.

14. Has your classmate included the image in his/her essay (as fig.1), referred to it throughout, and included its MLA citation on a separated Works Cited page?

15. What techniques or strategies does your classmate use to communicate his/her argument clearly and fairly that you would like to try in your own Visual Analysis?