Corrections Week 5 Sustainable Evironment Essay.

WEEK V: ESSAY NO. GRADE 4 JAMES

6. … how an organization organizations conduct …

7. … to the ( United …   Assembly (1987), Environmental   environmental sustainability...    GREAT DEFINITION.

8. …counties, thus all seeking …  #10 SHOULD BE PLACED AFTER #8.

8 -12. HOW DO THESE ESTABLISH A DUTY, WHICH YOUR STATEMENTS IMPLY IN #9 & 312? IF YOU PLAN TO SUPPORT THIS LATER IN THE ANALYSIS, YOU SHOULD LET THE READER KNOW OF YOUR INTENTIONS.

12. …  thus assuring future generations OF inheriting  …  … current generations NEED  to sacrifice …

15. ACCOUNTABILITY IN WHAT WAY? ARE YOU ALLUDING TO ENVIRONMENTAL LAWS? IF SO, THEN YOU SHOULD ALERT THE READER THAT THIS WILL BE DISCUSSED LATER.  ANY QUOTES, EVEN PARTIAL ONES, MUST BE MARKED AND CITED W/ PG. NO.

16. IS THIS EVEN POSSIBLE? A SIMPLE ACT LIKE RELEASING WARM WATER INTO A BODY OF WATER WITH A DIFFERENT NATURAL TEMPERATURE CAN BE A FORM OF POLLUTION.

18 DO YOU MEAN …  Understanding the development of morals…?

19. … face various moralLY challenging …

21. PLEASE SUPPLY A PG.NO.

22. … KOHLBER’S …

19-22.  ANY OTHER DIRECT QUOTES?

26. PLACE #26 AFTER#23 FOR CONTINUITY OF THOUGHT.   26. DO YOU MEAN … INDIVIDUALS AND BUSINESSES CAN DETERMINE IF THEIR AUDIENCES OR STAKEHOLDERS HAVE DEVELOPED THE MORAL REASONING ABILITY TO realize…

25. CITE PG. NO.

29-30.  ARE THESE DIRECT QUOTES? IF SO, GO BACK AND DETERMINE IF YOU OMITTED SOME PUNCTUATION AND THEN PROPERLY MARK AND CITE WITH PG. NO.

31. WHAT DO YOU MEAN BY “THE BASED ACTIVITY”?

32. … the convectional CONVENTIONAL level… the individual can disguise the... I AM NOT SURE OF YOUR MEANING.

33. MISSING THE WORD IS IN THIS QUOTE

OKAY BUT, HOW DOES KOHLBER’S THEORY RELATE TO THE ISSUE UNDER ANALYSIS?  TO WHICH LEVEL, AND STAGE, OF MORAL REASONING DO CURRENT GENERATIONS NEED TO DEVELOPE to RECOGNIZE A DUTY TO FUTURE GENERATIONS? ARE WE THERE YET?

38. … facING of …

37 & 38. DIRECT QUOTES? PLEASE PROPERLY MARK AND CITE W/ PG.NO.

39. … are thus able …

40. … New Kew …

41. ARE YOU SURE? DO YOU MEAN “NOT REQUIRED”?

42. MISSING WORDS --- REWRITE AND USE QUOTATION MARKS ETC.

47. WHY SO? WHO CREATED MOST OF ENVIRONMENTAL PROBLEMS?

48. THE Last last New Kew Garden…

48a.  DELETE, THIS SENTENCE EXPRESSES THE SAME THOUGHT AS SENTENCE  #49

WHAT ABOUT THE FIFTH PRINCIPLE OF “ NOT TOO MUCH TO LOSE “ BY THE ACTOR (S)?

52. … resources repect to  REGARDING …

53 & 54.   ANY DIRECT QUOTES?

60. CITE THE PG. NO. AS WELL

FOR A COMPLETE UTILITARIAN ANALYSIS YOU MUST IDENTIFY, DEFINE AND THEN APPLY EACH OF THE FOUR THESES STATED IN YOUR TEXT AND POSTED IN DR. LAURA’S  VARIOUS WRITING TIPS POSTS AS LISTED BELOW.

CONSEQUENTIALISM

UNIVERSALISM

HEDONISM  

MAXIMALISM

61a.  INCOMPLETE THOUGHT

 

64 THROUGH THE LAST 66.  WHICH ETHICAL THEORY WITHIN DEONTOLOGY? (IT SOUNDS LIKE KANTIANISM) ANY OTHER DIRECT QUOTES?

68-75.  THESE APPEAR TO ALL BE DIRECT QUOTES WITHOUT PROPER MARKINGS.  DO YOU HAVE ANY EXAMPLES OF THE USE OF ENVIRONMENTALORAL IMAGINATION IN CURRENT USE?

74. INCOMPLETE THOUGHT.

77-83. ALL APPEAR TO BE DIRECT QUOTES WITHOUT PROPER MARKING OR CITES.  WHERE IS YOUR APPLICATION OF THIS CONCEPT?

85. APPEARS TO ALSO BE A DIRECT QUOTE IN NEED OF PROPER MARKINGS.

NOWHERE, SO FAR, DO YOU ESTABLISH A DUTY TO FUTURE GENERATIONS. HOW DO WE KNOW, OBJECTIVELY, THAT FUTURE GENERATIONS WILL IN FACT APPEAR? DO ANY OF MASLOW’S NEEDS VIRTUALLY GUARANTEE CURRENT GENERATIONS THAT FUTURE GENERATIONS WILL BE BORN? IF YOU ARE A SUBSTANTIAL CAUSE OF A MORAL ISSUE ARISING, DOESN’T IT IMPOSE UPON YOU A GREATER DUTY TO PREVENT/ DIMINISH OR PREVENT THE RESULTING HARM? IF YOU KNOWINGLY BRING FUTURE GENERATIONS INTO BEING SHOULDN’T YOU PROVIDE A LIVABLE SPACE FOR THEM?

102. WHAT STATUTORY REQUIREMENT? I AM NOT FAMILIAR WITH ANY SUCH LAW. PLEASE CITE YOUR SOURCE.  

103. DELETE, IT STATES THE SAME THOUGHT AS 104

TO WHICH CSR MODEL AND RESPONSIBILITY WITHIN THAT MODEL ARE YOU REFERRING?

106. GOOD EXAMPLES OF CORPORATE CONTRIBUTIONS. WHAT ABOUT DUTIES TO PRODUCE PRODUCTS AND PROVIDE SERVICES THAT ARE ENVIRONMENTALLY SUSTAINABLE?

 108. APPEARS TO BE A DIRECT QUOTE WITHOUT PROPER MARKINGS. PLEASE CORRECT AND CITE ETC.

IN ORDER TO ESTABLISH A DUTY OWED BY CURRENT GENERATIONS TO FUTURE GENERATIONS, YOU MUST FIRST ESTABLISH A RECOGNIZED RIGHT OF FUTURE GENERATIONS. DON’T WE USUALLY SAY, THAT   YOU MUST BE LIVING IN ORDER TO CLAIM ANY RIGHTS? DO WE CURRENTLY RECOGNIZE ANY RIGHTS OF THE YET-TO-BE-BORN? (HINT: RESEARCH ABORTION LAWS)

CONCLUSION: HOW DOES THIS SUMMERIZE YOUR SUPPORT FOR YOUR ANSWER TO THE QUESTION UNDER ANALYSIS?

CRITIQUE GRADE = GOOD

TOTAL GRADE = C- (HIGH)167/225

ALTHOUGH THE WRITING IMPROVED, THE GRADE IS BASED ON INCOMPLETE CONCEPTS  APPLICATIONS  AND SEVERAL OMISSIONS OF CITES AND QUOTATION DESIGNATIONS.