Assignment 4: Business Plan--Final

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Gregory,

Thank you for your response. Good information but condense your pitch. The opening should be one sentence. The second sentence should present what your product is and the key characteristics. Then, you can discuss the benefits to the consumer. Keep in mind this is a conversation with a person you meet perhaps in an elevator. You can offer your business card at the end.

Keep up the good work.

Dr. Banto

Nadjie Carew 

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Gregory,

 Your pitch is great and you were able to grab my attention. Here are some ideas. Your pitch should be short and highlight the benefits of your product and not long because you run the risk of losing them. Your pitch should also be general to the industry and not give too much away because you want to  leave them wanting more and build a connection with the audience and once you get the contact you can include more details.

Joshua Gayle 

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Great post!! Your elevator was very good, Gregory. it was short and sweet and made a great impression about your company. I like how you opening statement asked a question. I feel with asking your audience a question you are engaging them and getting their participation within the conversation. Your elevator pitch paints a great picture for the audience about Fizzy Bottles. You definitely do a great job of communicating the fun aspect of Fizzy Bottles and delivering your message to your target group. Thank you for sharing Gregory, I really enjoyed your post. 

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