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Week4Feedback.pdf
Week 4 by Kimberley Handford
Submission date: 23-Apr-2023 11:58PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 2073556684 File name: 130602_Kimberley_Handford_Week_4_6035509_55434999.docx (14.58K) Word count: 553 Character count: 2966
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14% SIMILARITY INDEX
12% INTERNET SOURCES
0% PUBLICATIONS
11% STUDENT PAPERS
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Week 4 ORIGINALITY REPORT
PRIMARY SOURCES
www.politico.com Internet Source
Submitted to Georgia Military College Student Paper
www.citethisforme.com Internet Source
FINAL GRADE
80/100
Week 4 GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Kimberley, thank you for completing the Week 4 Rhetorical Analysis essay. Please review my comment markups within your document for suggestions that may help you with future writing projects. Thanks for your work on this! Professor Gonzalez
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Comment 1
This is a run-on sentence. Plus, you don't have an appropriate thesis statement for this project.
Remember that a thesis statement (for this project) should have clearly presented a specific argument regarding the credibility of the Nichols article. Remember that the points that should be discussed throughout the body should be focused on author credibility, claims the author made, and how well the author supported (or didn't support) those claims. See the instructions for complete details.
Comment 2
Make sure each body paragraph begins with a strong, specific topic sentence that directly connects to a proper thesis statement.
Comment 3
Remember that the goal of this activity wasn't to provide a summary/overview of the Nichols piece. Instead, it was to analyze the author, his credentials in relation to the subject matter he wrote about, as well as the specific claims (and claim types) that he made.
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Comment 4
As a rule, avoid ending paragraphs with cited information, as you need to discuss, in your own words, all source materials used.
Comment 5
You seem to have two conclusions (this paragraph and the next one, which is actually labeled "conclusion). For short essays like this one, you don't need to label the parts of them.
Comment 6
Remember that the conclusion should begin with a restatement of your thesis argument. The rest of the paragraph should provide a good wrap-up of the main points of your paper.
Comment 7
Try to ensure that each paragraph contains about 5-8 well-developed sentences. This is a good guideline for academic work.
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Comment 8
Make sure you completely follow MLA guidelines for citation development. Here is a helpful link:
https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/mla_style/mla_formatting_and_style_guide/
RUBRIC: ENG101 RESPONSE PAPER
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Content
Not submitted or plagiarized
Content is below average. Assignment criteria not attempted, superficial, vague, or absent. Logical fallacies may exist.
Content is average. Student addresses some assignment criteria in content, but not all. Critical thinking is underdeveloped or undistinguished.
Content is above average. Student addresses all assignment criteria, though quality and depth may not be as high as that reflected in superior papers.
Content is superior. Student fully addresses assignment criteria and demonstrates effective critical thinking.
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MLA Format/Documentation
Not submitted or plagiarized
MLA format/documentation is below average. Student exhibits little to no attempt at correct formatting. Documentation is consistently incorrect or absent.
MLA format/documentation is average, with some requirements done inconsistently or incorrectly.
MLA format/documentation is above average, with only infrequent or minor errors.
MLA format/documentation is superior. All format/documentation standards are addressed correctly.
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Writing Style
Not submitted or plagiarized
Style is below average. Essay contains pervasive stylistic issues that may include fragments, run-ons, and/or awkward sentences. Paper may lack a professional or appropriate tone/diction.
Style is average, with frequent stylistic errors. Tone/diction may be unprofessional or inappropriate at times.
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GRAMMAR (10%)
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Style is above average. Only minor or infrequent stylistic errors exist. Tone/diction are appropriate and professional.
Style is superior. Writing contains no awkward passages or sentence errors and flows smoothly. Student exhibits mastery of tone/diction.
15 / 20
Grammar/Mechanics/Punctuation
Not submitted or plagiarized
Below average. Pervasive and distracting errors in grammar/mechanics/punctuation are present.
Average. Frequent errors in grammar/mechanics/punctuation are present.
Above average. Few errors in grammar/mechanics/punctuation are present.
Superior. Student exhibits mastery of grammar/mechanics/punctuation; errors, if they exist, are minor and very infrequent.
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Follows Instructions
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Average. Student submits paper that does not address one instruction.
Above average. Student submits paper that addresses assignment instructions, but one instruction is not addressed completely.
Superior. Student submits paper that meets or exceeds assignment instructions.
