Can someone help me with my Week 3 Assignment in Management and Organizations?

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Paper Style: APA Paper Type: N/A

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No

Feedback Areas: General, N/A

Paper Goals: Identify the top three issues your writing tutor focused on in your work (e.g.,

paragraph structure, proper use of quotations, thesis statement, etc.). Describe

any issues that were surprising. Share some of the feedback your writing tutor

provided as explanations. What did you learn?

Proofing Summary:

Hi Joyce,

I’m Kristen, your composition tutor for the Writing Center. I have reviewed your submission and have several suggestions that

will help you revise. Please feel free to contact us through a live chat session with any follow-up questions or for any clarification.

Below, you will find a revision plan along with margin comments within your paper. Use my suggestions as a starting point for

the revision process. Also, please note that I have not edited or proofread the entire draft for minor errors, but rather, focused on

overall concerns such as idea development. For a complete look at your grammar and punctuation, please use the Grammarly

software available under “Writing Center” in your classroom.

You have done a good job of presenting your paper discussing your plan as a district manager for Dunkin Donuts. You have a

clear focus, and you have included good details to support your points. Your paper is also well organized. Each paragraph

focuses on developing one main point, and your thoughts flow well. Nice work!

For your revisions, I suggest focusing on:

1) Thesis Statement

The third sentence of your introduction works as a good thesis statement overall in presenting your focus on job design and

organizational design. You might consider developing your thesis further so that it presents the purpose/focus or claim of your

paper as well as your main points. Right now, it describes that you will analyze the categories, but not that you will apply them in

your plan to run the stores.

See this link for more information on thesis statements: https://writingcenter.ashford.edu/writing-a-thesis

2) Topic Development

You have developed your topic well overall. In the job design section, consider defining job analysis, job description, and job

specification so it is clearer for the reader how you are applying these. In job description, consider describing the different

positions you will have.

3) Citations and References

For citations and references, I have made notes where possible. Be sure to review your APA style guide to ensure that you are

meeting all formatting requirements.

For help with citing in your reference list, click here: http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/format-your-reference-list

See this link for more information on in-text citations: http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/citing-within-your-paper

Check out this link for more information on APA format: http://writingcenter.bridgepointeducation.com/introduction-apa

Good luck in the course, and I hope we can help you with your next assignment.

 

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Be sure to review the new APA 7th Edition format. In that, you do not need to include a running head

with your title at the top of each page. You just need the page number at the top right of each page. Your

information should begin three or four lines from the top of the page. Your title should be in bold font,

and include an extra space between your title and name.

Please use this guide to help you to set up your title page in correct APA style.

Click here: http://writingcenter.ashford.edu/introduction-apa

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Your paper should begin at the top of the page. Your title should

be in bold font.

This works as a good thesis

statement in presenting the focus of

your paper. You might consider

rephrasing to present a claim, such

as indicating you will be applying

these to the stores you will be

overseeing.

Your introduction does a good job of

setting up your paper.

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You might consider defining each of

the points (job analysis, job

description, and job specification)

briefly. A good rule to follow when

writing is to include enough

information to paint a clear picture

for a reader who is not familiar with

the topic.

An in-text citation should include the author’s

last name, the year, and if citing a direct

quote, a page number. (Author, year, p. #). If

no author is provided, you would have the

title of the piece instead: (“Title of article,”

year). If no year is provided, you will include

n.d. for no date: (Author, n.d.). If no page

numbers are provided, you will use the

paragraph number: (Author, year, para. #).

Here are two ways that you can set up a

citation, which works for quoting or for

summarizing and paraphrasing:

a. As Last Name (year) states, “quote” or

paraphrase (p. #).

b. “Quote” or paraphrase (Last Name, Year,

p.#).

You might consider describing the different

positions. You mention overall what most

employees do, but what about the specific

positions?

When you have three or more authors,

use the first author and et al. for all

citations. For example (Smith et al., 2020).

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Your paper is well organized. You

have clear sections, each paragraph

focuses on developing one main

point, and you have good topic

sentence.

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First level headings should be centered.

Your conclusion does a good job of

tying your main points together to bring

your paper to a close.

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The titles of books do not need to be

underlined and should be in black

font.

In APA 7th Edition, you no longer

need to include the place of

publication before the publisher.

The titles of web pages should be

placed in sentence style

capitalization and italicized. Include

the title of the web site in headline

style capitalization as well.

You do not need "accessed from"

before the URL.

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