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Paper Title:

No. of Pages: 3

Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Narrative

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? Yes

Feedback Areas: Topic Development, Paper Format

Paper Goals: Please chose a issue that is interesting to you AND impacts Black women and

provide an intersectional analysis of said issue. Below are some examples of

major topics impacting Black women. The idea would be for you to choose an

issue, within one of these topics, to do an intersectional analysis. An

Proofing Summary:

Hi Sanjay, welcome to Net Tutor. Thank you for submitting your paper.

Strengths:

The topic is very interesting. It looks like you worked hard on this paper. Also, as far as the topic, focus, development, and

organization, they are good. Keep up the hard work and good luck!

Suggestions:

I think you should revise the thesis statement in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion. Also, you need to specify which

black women you are referring in your paper. Other than this, you are on the right track.

Before submitting assignments, I suggest writing more than one draft and editing your papers more than once. Reading aloud will

help you find areas of concerns that need revision.

Paper format- Be sure to provide a cover page and revise paper and references' format.

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Proofed Paper: ntp626635 - Sat Jun 1 18:03:52 EDT 2019

You did good with the introduction

because you presented the topic and

have a thesis. However, I suggest not

announcing in the thesis what you are

going to discuss. Consider writing it in

third person.

Which Black women are you referring?

African American women or African

women? I think it will be better if you

specify.

Make sure to provide a cover page

and all pages must have a running

head and page numbers.

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Proofed Paper: ntp626635 - Sat Jun 1 18:03:52 EDT 2019

You did a good job with the

sentence structure, coherence,

and mechanics on this page.

The paragraphs do focus on the

factors that affect black women's

education.

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Proofed Paper: ntp626635 - Sat Jun 1 18:03:52 EDT 2019

You did a good job with the in-text

citations' format.

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Proofed Paper: ntp626635 - Sat Jun 1 18:03:52 EDT 2019

You have a good start with

the conclusion because you

reflected on the topic.

However, be sure to restate

the thesis.

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Proofed Paper: ntp626635 - Sat Jun 1 18:03:52 EDT 2019

The order of the references is

good.

Be sure to remove the links from

the URLs.

Why did you write the words in

all caps?

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