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Reviewed Paper: ntp1348905 - Sun Nov 14 2:18:00 EST 2021

Paper Title: Draft

No. of Pages: 4

Paper Style: MLA Paper Type: Persuasive/Argumentative

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No

Feedback Areas: Focus/Thesis Statement, Topic Development

Paper Goals: I need to get feedback on this paper from an online tutor in order to be graded

Review Summary:

Hello, Kenyell, and welcome to NetTutor! My name is Janolyn, and I am happy to review your argumentative paper.

Strengths:

You have done an ample amount of research for your paper. All three supporting points have been explained in detail in their

respective paragraphs. There are no grammar or sentence errors in the paper. Good job!

Suggestions:

Make sure to develop a single-sentence thesis statement at the end of the introduction that clearly states the three supporting

points that you have discussed in the paper. You want to inform the readers of the points that you will focus on before

developing them in detail. Good job!

Also, make sure to develop clear topic sentences. Topic sentences are the first sentences of the body paragraphs. The topic

sentence informs the readers of the supporting point that you will discuss in a particular paragraph. The topic sentence should

be developed as per your opinion; refrain from writing borrowed information in the topic sentences.

I have marked the major issues in the paper. I hope those comments help you. You can also submit a second draft of the paper,

but be sure to mark it as a second draft. Thanks for using NetTutor! Please visit us again, and tell your friends!

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1348905 - Sun Nov 14 2:18:00 EST 2021

Refrain from adding designations before the information.

Make sure to write your last name in every page.

Good introduction. You have addressed

both sides of the argument before

narrowing down to your opinion.

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1348905 - Sun Nov 14 2:18:00 EST 2021

What are the three supporting points that you

have discussed in the paper? Make sure to

develop a thesis statement at the end of the

introduction that clearly states your supporting

points.

Good topic development. You have

explained the importance of guns for

law-abiding citizens.

Refrain from starting off a body

paragraph with borrowed information.

The first sentence of the body

paragraph should clearly state the

point that you will discuss in the

paragraph.

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1348905 - Sun Nov 14 2:18:00 EST 2021

Good topic development.

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1348905 - Sun Nov 14 2:18:00 EST 2021

Good conclusion. You have

summarized the supporting points

without rewording them blatantly.

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Reviewed Paper: ntp1348905 - Sun Nov 14 2:18:00 EST 2021

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