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Jeinny Urrego
Mr. Dreiling
English 101
March 30, 2019
Higher Education this is just a topic, like “Electric Cars” The title should suggest more of the opinion, like a simplified thesis. Look at the titles the professionals often create in our book that let readers know what it to come more clearly than just a topic. And this is the subject of the essay assignment. You’re topic is no doubt not all of Higher Ed. You narrowed it down to a topic inside that big topic
Higher or tertiary education is the last stage of formal education which is offered at the universities and colleges. Over the past, human rights movements have championed for the acquisition of higher education to is this word the problem? all through education incentive that gave rise to the emergence of free education (Ewell). In America, higher education has played a critical role in as far as the knowledgeable minds are concerned; people cannot become professionals without passing through the tertiary education where character and cultivation of mind take place, giving rise to the emergence of the informed citizens and human beings. What’s the difference between a citizen and a human being? Do you need both? No, not unless you have established some specific use for citizens, like legal citizens of a nation or something, maybe voters? You probably know what you intend, and it probably is a good idea, but you need to convey it more clearly to your readers.
Presently, concerns about higher education have aroused, wrong word here. you mean arisen causing massive debates and discussions among philosophers and scholars; in this domain, deliberations and questions have aroused in respect to the same. The discussion in this discourse aims to bear an argumentative essay, which seeks to answer the question: “Are too many people going to college?” which is premised on “They Say, I Say” book edited by Gerald Graff and Cathy Birkenstein. The book is about a whole bunch of topics, so you add something to show it’s a collection of essays in a chapter from the book. Not a big deal, but if you want to be 100% accurate, that’s needed.
Over the past, the question has become one of the controversial issues among the scholars with some arguing that too many people going to colleges is good illogical. Too many going is a negative. Too many went to the concert doesn’t mean to readers, oh, that’s great, what a positive assessment of the experience you had there. See my point? since it increases knowledge intensity while others argue that too many people going to school is unhealthy since it causes massive competition for the available jobs, rendering some people jobless. In my view, I subscribe to the fact that people should pursue higher education. No limit? If the question is “Are too many people going to restaurants,” and I say, “Well, in my opinion, I think people should go to restaurants” does that relate logically to the first statement? It’s not a question about whether or not people should go, but about are too many going. Big difference.
In the essay, “Are too many going to college?” capitalize titles written by Charles Murray. Notice this “sentence” is a fragment? Just use a comma after the last name, change the cap in he, and it’s fixed He states that too many people were are attending college. To dispute develop this claim, Murray brings forth three justification claims.; thatFirstly, he argues that liberal understanding can be acquired in middle and elementary schools than in colleges. Secondly, he observes that some people should not go to college because they already have the necessary skills and knowledge to undertake a certain career; Thirdly, he also portends that some people pursue tertiary education to seek the employment ticket.
However, I cannot argue against the colleges themselves, but I raise my arguments against the education and the social system; if the system of education is altered, there will be low demand for college education. Altered how? Must be a big change to reduce demand. But what change? Charles Murray also offers to criticize parents and counselors who encourage students to join college immediately after high school; he describes the course as thoughtless about young peoples’ interests.
Murray’s proposition sends me to believe that if the parents and counselors were concerned about their children’s needs, then few of them would join college. In the essay, “Are too many people going to college?” we provide the title one time only Murray addresses a vast audience involving students and parents because they are the ones who advise their children to go to college and also spend money on them. He also addresses administrators and teachers because they are the ones who can change what is taught in schools. Secondary school counselors are also included in this audience since more than 60% of the students report that they were encouraged to go to college by their counselors. He’s saying some students would be happier and richer in some cases, if they chose other paths, paths other than a four year degree. To help them succeed and thrive, he recommends other paths for some.
However, Charles Murray contends that the liberal understanding got through higher education is important, though; I am opposed to this view since I believe that this education can be acquired from somewhere else, he argues they can get most of this in K-12, is that what you believe too? and therefore, more people should get liberal education basics, but the only available platform for facilitating liberal knowledge is middle and elementary school. So is this the somewhere else you mean, K-12? Confusing According to Higher Education in the United States: An Encyclopedia (Forest and Kinser), young people should be indulged into massive leaning since they have better memory and they should be subjected to the liberal education while they are young, not when they join college.
C.E. Finn believes that there are many people going to college who have been coerced to join college. He thinks that they would do better in life having passed through college and that they are likely to be successful because of the college knowledge they acquire from higher education. The first sentence says something about being coerced and then I think the second one is to say that this is okay because it’s the best thing for them. It’s good to coerce people into going to college? A college graduate is just an average person in both intrapersonal and interpersonal abilities with the above average portfolio in education and that he could acquire these values elsewhere. Perhaps, there are some claims from Charles Murray that are logical; for instance, the author insists that the employers should be degree holders which makes sense, however, the author did not provide the provision for this claim; he appeals to the emotions when he brought the intrinsic rewards. So, the essay is showing some solid writing skills, no doubt, and the avoidance of small typos and the general use of MLA is pretty good. However, the essay needs clearer focus, improved paragraphs structure and development. A thesis that sums up the essays purpose and provides enough specifics so that readers have a good sense of what the essay will do and how, to some extent is needed. After this, body paragraphs built around one sentence that offers a topic and opinion that relates to the thesis, and where each sentence in the paragraph explains and supports the claim in the topic sentence is the next step. This is challenging for all of us. That’s why we have a few weeks to work on these issues. It’s hard. I understand. But the essay here contains a great many confusing moments. Diction is another issue to address. Misused words should be sought out and revised.
Managers are confined to a cubicle and make difference daily, thus Charles Murray holds that a person doing what he/she desires has more job satisfaction than a person with a degree. Well, he says this can be the case for some but not all and that too many are not given options to pursue such a path when it would be better for them This idea about a non-graduate being more rewarded make someone think that they should do whatever they please rather than go to college. In other words, Charles Murray believes that the intrinsic outcome of being a manager is the same as becoming an electrician. In his essay, “Are too many people going to college?" he reveals his arguments about a high number of people going to college who should not.
Although he has a point, there are various themes about the argument which make the essay ambiguous. At one point in the essay, Charles Murray talks against the brick and mortar schools. His argument against having these schools is prevalent, though this does not help his idea about many people going to college; rather, this contradicts and confuses the audience more. In the essay, the author states various facts, but they are not supported by evidence. For instance, the essay reveals that employers do not recruit applicants who have not undergone college education; the author made a valid argument here, but he did not explain its basis; he does not state whether it was his own findings or a study had been conducted.
On the other hand, the essay “Are too many people going to college?” (Murray) is premised on various assumptions, some of which are accepted because they are fair, based on audience, while some of the assumptions are unreasonable. One of the assumptions made is the valuation of the liberal education by everyone; more young children should acquire liberal education basics, but for most people, the places to acquire these basics are the middle schools and the elementary schools.
Charles Murray assumes that everyone should value the liberal learning when they say that it should be received by all. The author in the essay is addressing all those who are in education, either being the educator or those being educated. Most audiences are likely to value the liberal learning, rendering this assumption valid.
Another assumption of concern is that the author of the essaypoint held by Murray is that young people should be focusd on what they are already good at rather than going to college to learn something which they could might have no skills in. yes, good point, but the assumption of concern is a confusing phrase The author compares expectations of the income and as he speaks for the younger people, he says “realistically, young men should look at income toward bottom of distribution of managers”; this reveals that the author assumes that a person does not get better at the needed skills to be a manager at a higher school, it is not a must that someone goes to college to become a manager. There is a great contrast to Charles Murray’s view when the Pew Research Center conducted a survey asking U.S. adults what their views were about how well higher education prepares someone for a job, as represented in fig. 1 below (Control).
Fig.1 Higher education aids in the skills needed to get well-paying job.
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For the majority of us in this contemporary society, the idea of enrolling for a college or a university program is something that has been engrained since our young age. The scenario here is that we are almost expected to join college/ university as soon as we are done with our high school, without asking any questions. Transition here For one to be regarded as employable and marketable in most parts of the world, he or she is expected to have a college degree. Since the primary school education, we have always been taught that the higher education is a “great equalizer”, which we can all make our socioeconomic standing better within the society.
The major assumption here is that even after college, a young man comes out as an average man both at intrapersonal and interpersonal capacity. Accordingly, this assumption does not hold because many people, especially Charles Murray’s audience, have gone to college. At the same time, those who go to college grow the experience throughout college life and as a result, they develop unique and various capacities and skills. The comment above about structuring and essay will help you avoid too many small paragraphs. You’ll have a few main points to make, and you’ll make them in those paragraphs.
The author of “Are there too many people going to college?” (Murray) within the essay also posits that young men do not require the interpersonal capacity to become professional. The author also reveals that the students do not get enough education in colleges; he drives a point that the students do not need to learn more than what they know. This poses a logical problem in Murray’s argument because he is addressing an educated audience.
Higher education should be pursued. It allows graduates to have more job openings as compared to those individuals who did not bother to pursue their education beyond the high school level. It does not also go without mentioning that college graduates earn more as compared to non-graduates. Research has shown that college graduates have higher lifetime incomes as compared to those who finished at the high school level. One is therefore guaranteed of a better life when he pursues higher education rather than just leaving it at the high school level.
High education improves the quality of life that an individual has as mentioned above. Studies have shown that college graduates have less incarceration and criminal activity, more self-confidence, more volunteer work, greater leadership and community service, greater knowledge about the government, lesser dependency on assistance offered by the government, greater job satisfaction and more prestigious employment, greater security and economic stability, better health and dietary practices, better health care access, and longer life spans as compared to those who did not pursue higher learning.
Higher education will generally enable an individual to expand his skills and knowledge, and to better articulate his ideas in writing and speech. This way, one is able to have a good understanding of the community and the world at large. Well-stated
Works Cited
Center, Pew Research. www.pewsocialtrends.org. 28 September 2016. Internet. 09 April 2019.
Ewell, Peter T. “Assessment of higher education and quality: Promise and politics.” Assessment in higher education: Issues of access, quality, student development, and public policy. Edited by Samuel J. Messick, Lawrence Erlbaum Associates, Inc., 1999, pp. 147-156.
Finn, C. E. Changes. Public Policy and Higher Education. Edited by Edward P. St. John, Nathan Daun-Barnett, and Karen N. Moronski-Chapman, Routledge, 1988.
Forest, James JF and Kinser, Kevin. Higher Education in the United States: An Encyclopedia. ABC-CLIO, 2002.
Murray, Charles. "Are Too Many People Going to College?" They Say, I Say with Readings, edited by Graff, Gerald, Cathy Birkenstein and Russel Durst, 4th ed., W.W. Norton & Company, Inc., 2018, pp. 344-363.
Good job on the works cited page.
Essay grade D 160/250
