Persuasive Speach Part II

Touchstone 3 Rubric and Feedback

Rubric Category

Feedback

Score

Organization

It was somewhat challenging to follow your thoughts because of the way you put ideas together. The speech structure meets most requirements (follows Monroe's Motivated Sequence, includes key message in introduction, includes main points and support in the body, and includes a conclusion). Make sure that you remain consistent—in one moment you said to promote racial difference, then moments later you noted that we should abolish racial difference—so, just be careful of the language you use so that it isn’t confusing to your audience.

21/25

Persuasive

You created a compelling argument, so it was mostly persuasive. Good work presenting complex factual information to increase the speech’s persuasiveness. The speech takes a clear stance on an issue that impacts society and the arguments and approach are consistently persuasive in nature.

Add more contemporary context, compelling statistical information, and anecdotes/testimony to improve audience connection and understanding of your topic and perspective. You need more facts to support your discussion of the problem of inequality.

17/20

Use of Appeals

The appeals in the speech were reasonable and not argumentative. You use all three kinds of appeals in multiple instances.

Incorporate visual aids to support the presentation of statistical data and/or key factual points.

15/20

Balance of Appeals

There was some imbalance between the emotional appeal (pathos) and the logic appeal (logos)—you need more logos.

18/20

Language

Appropriate and developed language. Your use of language is sometimes unclear; it could be consistent to help the audience connect with the speaker and the topic. Where necessary, technical jargon is explained.

13/15

You have a thoughtful and evocative topic—racial inequality and structural racism. Your audience may feel compelled to pay attention to this speech because of its importance to them, in general. Good work with eye-contact, limited non-verbal communication, and appropriate tone of voice throughout—you are very passionate about the topic and that’s great. Including visual aids as well as more statistical data and other compelling forms of evidence (suggested above in “Persuasive”) within the presentation will be very helpful in increasing the persuasiveness and informativeness of your presentation. Very good job! Dr. Doss

Overall Score:

84/100