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Goodman, in her article, convinces the reader on how bad commercial surrogacy is with its rising embracement and practice. She stimulates objective thinking by the reader by first walking them on the positive aspects of the trade but afterwards lays out evidence that suggests the general negativity of the trade to all parties involved. Although she portrays the business as a source of livelihood for some women in the world and the fact that the practice has solved cases of barrenness with respect to failure some couples to hold pregnancies, she emphasizes that the business is a breach of ethical boundaries, a disregard of the dignity of surrogate mothers and even denial of identity to those who are born from the process. She concludes by tactfully dissuading the reader from positively embracing the idea.

To convince the reader of her topical theme, the author uses figures and the logic principle in her article. First, she informs the reader that the average woman in India earns more than $5000 by lending out her womb for the growth of another woman's fetus which is what an average woman in the same locality can make in five decades. She goes ahead to convince the reader further that surrogacy will not subject the woman to the hard labor she goes through in Indian glass crashing factories.

Apart from using logic, the author employs the use of emotions to reinforce her suggested pinion over the matter. First, the author uses rhetorical questions which stimulates the reader to think in the favor of her opinion. For instance, if modern patients have become medical tourists, why not rent a foreign womb? and, ‘what will we tell the offspring of the international trade?'. Another way the author whips the emotions of the reader is in her choice of words. She deliberately uses words with negative emotional connotation to lead the reader to think bad of an idea. Such words include international business and the title of the article itself, ‘wombs for hire'. Finally, she uses insinuation to negatively portray the trade, she says that surrogacy is akin to slavery.

This article addresses an issue whose debate will help square out the issue conclusively. Even if the trade is a source of livelihood to some women and that it helps infertile couples get children, it goes against ethical boundaries, dehumanizes the surrogate mothers and goes ahead to denial children born from the process the right to identity. Goodman uses the logic and emotion as his tools of persuasion to convince the reader to adopt her opinion over the matter.

Reference

Ramage, J. D., Bean, J. C., & Johnson, J. (2016). Writing Arguments: A Rhetoric with Readings, Books a la Carte Edition, Mla Update Edition. Prentice Hall.

FEEDBACK:

Good work on your draft! You have a good introduction with a thesis that focuses on how Goodman presents her argument (the title of the article is  “Womb for Rent”).

For your revision, be sure to pull one or two quotes to illustrate to your readers, as you note, how well Goodman presents her information. When you note specific facts and points from the text, either direct quotes or paraphrases, you should include in-text citations, for example: (Goodman, 2016, para. 4).

Keep working on your APA format. Be sure to include a title page, headers, and page numbers. You also need the reference on a reference page. Here is your reference:

Goodman, E. (2016). Womb for rent. In J. Ramage, J. Bean & J. Johnson (Eds.) Writing arguments: A rhetoric with readings (p. 169) Boston, MA: Pearson.

Do you have any questions about revising your draft? Please be sure to review and proofread your essay.

Great paper. In the first paragraph did you consider that her tone is apart of the delivery?