the concept "life"

The Feedback

1. Give evidence for your thesis by quoting from the text and other reputable sources for support . This includes analyzing the quote , i.e. stating which aspect of the quote supports thesis in which way.

2. Avoid personal reflection. Avoid saying “I” or drawing from your personal experience Instead focus on the text to analyze. This is an analytical academic paper not a personal essay , and it is difficult to give evidence for subjective claims.

3. Avoid spelling mistakes and incorrect word choices : Proofread and edit your paper , and use spell - check Ask others to read your paper (Writing Center preceptors , roommates) Re - read it yourself.

4. Avoid writing more because you have more to say Edit carefully and be succinct. This is part of the challenge of paper writing More is not better . There are deductions for both short and too long paper.

5. Have an introduction that clearly states your thesis , divide your paper into paragraphs that are each dedicating to giving support to ONE aspect of your thesis, and conclude with a summary of your findings . Each aspect should follow logically from the next and not jump back and forth between ideas.

6. Avoid writing for your teacher: Write for a reader who is not familiar with the text give them the information about the text they will need to understand your argument ) and write in a tone that is appropriate for a stranger and an analytical paper (i.e. no colloquial terms).

7. Avoid generalizations: Don't make statements about things all people do/think/agree onstuff everybody knows,or "what's normal. Instead be specific and give evidence for all your claims

Overall Feedback

Too long (1236 words): 1118 without bibliography, title, names, etc., but cutting it a little close. I didn't deduct anything this time, but watch out for this for the rewrite.