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TheAutobiographyofBenFranklin_D1.docxRunning head: THE AUTOBIOGRAPHY OF BEN FRANKLIN 1
THE AUTOBIOGRAPHY OF BEN FRANKLIN 6
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One area I want to focus on is plagiarism. Quite a few areas of your paper appear as though the work is not your own, since it varies from earlier sections of your paper. I highlighted these areas in green.
This is not a practice that students should engage in, especially given the fact that readers – whether at work, in social contexts, or in school – will figure out when you are stealing material, and your credibility will be irreparably harmed.
Another area I wish to focus on is your professor’s instructions. You were asked to include at least three direct, block quotes from Franklin’s Autobiography to support your position. You were also to put your citation for these quotations in parentheses and in all caps.. You have not done any of these.
Finally, quite a few parts of your paper seem a bit awkward due to either punctuation errors or sentence construction. Some of the simple errors that were made – comma usage, word forms and informal language – can easily be fixed.
During the 1970’s most of the Americans had only limited access to books. [Do you mean the 1770s? Franklin was not alive in the 1970s.] At this time books were not only rare but were also very expensive. There were no public libraries as a result leaving only the people that were wealthy and the clergy as the only ones that were able to get hold of a large number of publications and books. Alike the citizens of the modern wealth weren’t able to afford this books readily. awk Comment by alex.kanakis: Awkward Sentence: This idea is not clear. Rewrite it. awk
Benjamin Franklin was known as an avid reader. He was quoted saying that the only amusement that he allows himself is that of reading. [This is specific information that you would not know without some research. Because this information is not cited, it would appear as plagiarism.] He preferred not to spend his time in frolicks, games and taverns of any kind. Most of the time he would often get together with some of his associates and close friends and they would carry out their club meetings so as to read and share some of the books that they had. This is dele prompted Franklin to be able to come up with a library where all the members would be allowed to bring in their books so that in the end CE each individual would be able to easily access them. All of the men were in agreement with his idea and in no time they had already began a library at Mr. Grace where they also carried out their own meetings. [Make sure to identify Mr. Grace to the reader. Who was he? Why was his association with Franklin important?] Comment by alex.kanakis: Delete: For clarity, delete the highlighted text. dele Comment by alex.kanakis: Comma Use Error: A comma needs to be added, changed, or deleted. CE
The library was started when fifty subscribers contributed forty shillings each to start the library. [What year did it start?] Each of these members also made a commitment that every year they will give a contribution of ten shillings that will be invested in the purchasing of extra books as well as help them in the maintenance of the library. Their motto was that supporting common good was divine. [See my previous statement about specific information.]
Benjamin’s plan was able to achieve a lot of success as the membership of the library was able to grow even beyond the number of the Junto membership. [What exactly is the Junto membership?] The community was able to benefit as reading was now viewed as more fashionable. The level of sophistication intelligence of the citizens which largely outshone that of other inhabitants from the foreign cities was evidently noted by visitors who visited the city. This in the end made other colonies to follow their lead and setup their own libraries.
Explain Franklin's quest for moral perfection. What process did he use? How successful was he? Which virtues did he find the most challenging to maintain? What was meant by his saying, "a speckled ax is best?"
According to Franklin CE morality was the correct way in which one should act in any given circumstance. This MM included what one was involved in so as to earn a living as well how he treated his kids inf . It was about one’s personal hygiene and how he spoke. It entailed the behavior of an individual as a neighbor, friend and their psychological quest. Comment by alex.kanakis: Comma Use Error: A comma needs to be added, changed, or deleted. CE Comment by alex.kanakis: Misplaced or Dangling Modifier: This identifying phrase does not modify the noun closest to it. Move either the modifier or the antecedent. MM Comment by alex.kanakis: Informal Language: Avoid using informal language, slang, or clichés in a formal essay. inf
Despite the fact that Benjamin Franklin wasn’t able to achieve moral perfection CE he nevertheless believed that his radical ideas for making attempts at the effort was SV a perfect one. He says, “Despite the fact I never arrived at perfection, I was a happier and a better man than I would have been.” [You need to cite the source for this quote.] Comment by alex.kanakis: Comma Use Error: A comma needs to be added, changed, or deleted. CE Comment by alex.kanakis: Subject/Verb Agreement Error: The subject and verb do not agree in this sentence. SV
His saying "a speckled ax is best?" represented the failure by most of the individuals who only viewed moral perfection as being very difficult to be achieved and as a result viewed it as not worthy of being pursued wholeheartedly.
Was Franklin a religious man? Why, or why not? Provide specific evidence to support your conclusions.
Ben Franklin early in his life WO was committed to Deism. [Explain to the reader what deism is.] However CE this did not last any long as his flirtation that was with the views of the world at that time was attributed to youthful rebellion that was specifically against Calvinism in his Puritan upbringing. Despite the fact that he abandoned the Calvinism that was present in his childhood, much of his adult thinking was largely influenced by the religion of his parents. Comment by alex.kanakis: Word Order Error: These words are in the wrong order. WO Comment by alex.kanakis: Comma Use Error: A comma needs to be added, changed, or deleted. CE
Franklin believed in the creator- a God of great power, wisdom and goodness. This God was responsible for both creating the world and sustaining it. For example CE Franklin was amazed at Gods poss creation of the stars and the planets. He was more amazed that God “governed them continuously in their great acceleration so that they don’t end up flying out of their designated boundaries or go out against each other causing mutual destruction.” Comment by alex.kanakis: Comma Use Error: A comma needs to be added, changed, or deleted. CE Comment by alex.kanakis: Possessive: A possessive form needs to be added, changed, or deleted. poss
Frank out his faith in a God that was active and constantly watched over his own natural creation and only intervene in their lives occasionally. ill Franklin took time to write prayers for his own use and even went further to rewrite the Lord poss prayer to make it more suiting WF for contemporary readers. Franklin was horrified with the thought of having a world without religion. He wrote, “If Men can be this wicked as it’s evident with religion, what would have become of them if they were without it.” Comment by alex.kanakis: Illogical Statement: This is an illogical and confusing statement. Think about what you are really trying to say and then restate it. ill Comment by alex.kanakis: Possessive: A possessive form needs to be added, changed, or deleted. poss Comment by alex.kanakis: Word Form Error: This form of this word does not fit the structure of your sentence. WF
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