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Sujith Ellekuttige Essay 1 Draft.docx

by Sujith Ellekuttige

Submission date: 15-Jul-2021 06:45PM (UTC-0500) Submission ID: 1620122884 File name: Sujith_Ellekuttige_Essay_1_Draft.docx (20.39K) Word count: 1404 Character count: 6978

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6% SIMILARITY INDEX

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Sujith Ellekuttige Essay 1 Draft.docx ORIGINALITY REPORT

PRIMARY SOURCES

Submitted to University of Otago Student Paper

Submitted to Hong Kong Baptist University Student Paper

Submitted to South Dakota Board of Regents Student Paper

www.ecampus.com Internet Source

www3.uakron.edu Internet Source

mafiadoc.com Internet Source

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Sujith Ellekuttige Essay 1 Draft.docx GRADEMARK REPORT

GENERAL COMMENTS

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PAGE 1

Awk. Awkward: The expression or construction is cumbersome or difficult to read. Consider rewriting. Additional Comment

This makes it sound as though expert opinions, personal experience, and facts have made it possible for materialism to thrive

Vague Unclear: When making a point in one of your body paragraphs, one of the most common mistakes is to not offer enough details. A paragraph without much detail will seem vague and sketchy. A paper is always strengthened when your claims are as specific as possible, The more detailed evidence you offer, the more reference points your reader will have. Remember that you are communicating your argument to a reader who has only your description to go by. Someone who reads your essay will not automatically know what you mean to express, so you have to supply details, to show the reader what you mean, not just tell him or her.

Comment 1

Necessary? Does your reader need this much commentary on his overall essay? Or is the summary of his argument sufficient?

format

Check formatting.

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No need for italics.

par. ref.

See examples of parenthetical references in section 32C of St. Martin's Handbook.

Comment 2

Necessary? Does this commentary add/clarify much?

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par. ref.

See examples of parenthetical references in section 32C of St. Martin's Handbook.

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Good summary/paraphrase -- just add the page reference to complete the in-text citation.

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par. ref.

See examples of parenthetical references in section 32C of St. Martin's Handbook.

Additional Comment

Again, well stated! Just add that parenthetical reference to make the citation clear and complete.

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Comment 3

This is the first real indication of your own views on the topic. As you revise your essay, it is important that you clearly define your own argument/thoughts on the topic, then although you can frame that with the ideas of the authors we have read, make that the main focus on the essay. Right now it feels almost like an afterthought or subpoint. So, find the balance in the They Say and the I Say aspects of your essay, making sure that your I Say is the actual heart of the essay!

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Remember that the works cited entry changes significantly when you use more than one selection from an anthology as compared to a single selection from an anthology. Note the difference in model #11 and model #12 on page 418 of St. Martin's Handbook.

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Be sure you are using MLA style citations!