Personal Statement & Statement of Purpose need help

Statement of Purpose (UCLA)

What is the statement of purpose, and what is it used for? The statement of purpose is an integral part of your application for graduate admission and consideration for merit-based financial support. It is used to understand your academic interests, and to evaluate your aptitude and preparation for graduate work, as well as your fit with the proposed program of study. It is also used to assess your ability to write coherent and convincing prose. Instructions Please respond to the following. Your statement can be up to 800 words in length (approximately 1.5-page, single spaced, using 1-inch margins and 12-point font). You do not need to answer every question; focus on the elements that you feel are most relevant to your candidacy.

· What is your purpose in applying for graduate study in your specified degree program? Describe your area(s) of interest, including any subfield(s) or interdisciplinary interests.  

· What experiences have prepared you for advanced study or research in this degree program? What relevant skills have you gained from these experiences? Have your experiences led to specific or tangible outcomes that would support your potential to contribute to this field (examples: performances, publications, presentations, awards or recognitions)?  

· What additional information about your past experience may aid the selection committee in evaluating your preparation and aptitude for graduate study at UCLA? For example, you may wish to describe research, employment, teaching, service, artistic or international experiences through which you have developed skills in leadership, communication, project management, teamwork, or other areas.  

· Why is the UCLA graduate program to which you are applying is the best place for you to pursue your academic goals? If you are applying for a research master’s or doctoral program, we encourage you to indicate specific research interests and potential faculty mentors.  

· What are your plans for your career after earning this degree?

Personal Statement

What is a Personal Statement and what is it used for? The Personal Statement is an opportunity for you to provide additional information that may aid the selection committee in evaluating your preparation and aptitude for graduate study at UCLA. It will also be used to consider candidates for the Cota-Robles and Graduate Opportunity fellowships. Instructions Please respond to one or more of the following prompts. Your statement can be up to 800 words in length (approximately 1.5-page, single spaced, using 1-inch margins and 12-point font).

· Are there educational, personal, cultural, economic, or social experiences, not described in your Statement of Purpose, that have shaped your academic journey? If so, how? Have any of these experiences provided unique perspective(s) that you would contribute to your program, field or profession?  

· Describe challenge(s) or barriers that you have faced in your pursuit of higher education. What motivated you to persist, and how did you overcome them? What is the evidence of your persistence, progress or success?  

· How have your life experiences and educational background informed your understanding of the barriers facing groups that are underrepresented in higher education?  

· How have you been actively engaged (e.g., through participation, employment, service, teaching or other activities) in programs or activities focused on increasing participation by groups that have been historically underrepresented in higher education?  

· How do you intend to engage in scholarly discourse, research, teaching, creative efforts, and/or community engagement during your graduate program that have the potential to advance diversity and equal opportunity in higher education?  

· How do you see yourself contributing to diversity in your profession after you earn your advanced degree at UCLA?

IDEA PAPER (This is a paper I wrote applying for a different college)

My name is Yile Tian, and I am applying for the Civil Engineering master's program at Cal Poly Pomona with a focus on structural engineering.

I came from China and moved to Los Angeles in 2012 with my family. Looking back at those seven years of adapting and studying, I am pleased with who I am and the achievement that I accomplished today. I can still remember the struggle that I endured during my first year of high school. English is not my first language; therefore, the language barrier was my first challenge in my school life. I forced myself to speak up, discussing with my teachers, and making new friends, so that I could have a better English learning environment. With two years of practice, I built up my confidence in speaking and writing in English and completed all the required courses from high school. I always manage my time efficiently and find a balance between my social and study life to fulfill my college life, making it meaningful and compacted. I pursued my bachelor's degree at California State University, Los Angeles, majoring in Civil Engineering. After four years as an undergraduate student, I found my interest in the subject and knowledge that I have learned in this major. Not only do I need to deliver the accurate calculation, but also to carry the responsibility to paramount the public safety, health, and welfare. To be a qualified engineer, I need to be serious about the education that I have already completed and the degree that I want to pursue in the future. With all the courses I took from school, I found my passion for structural engineering and willing to set up my career as a certified engineering designer. I graduated with an honor of Dean's list for three consecutive years, and a cum laude in May 2019 with an Overall GPA of 3.70. I especially want to attend Cal Poly Pomona, since we have an exceptional faculty team and a great learning environment.

I am confident that Cal Poly Pomona will provide me with a robust understanding of engineering materials, and get me ready to step into the engineering field and perform my duty and responsibility as an engineer. As soon as I choose my path as an engineer, I set up my career to be a lifetime learner. Since technology and new code are developing rapidly, keeping my education is one of the commissions that I should do to refresh my knowledge. At the same time, I am spending my free time at BWU structural engineering company to gain more experience in a related field. The primary responsibility is to help the engineer preparing the residential floor and roof plan with AutoCAD. With my engineering analysis skills, I am also able to help my supervisor with the wind load, beam design, and retaining wall calculations. I am gaining my engineering experience in the company and decide to pursue my master's degree with a structural focus.

The purpose of this statement is applying for the UCLA civil engineering master's program. After four years as an undergraduate student at California State University, Los Angeles majoring in civil engineering. I received an excellent learning experience from CSULA and would like to pursue a higher education facility to finish my master's degree with a focus on structural engineering. I finished all my courses in civil engineering, and it starts to have a strong connection with structural engineering. I enjoyed all my designing courses and took all of the classes with a structural focus.

With a strong fundamental knowledge in structural engineering, I received the "Engineering-in-Training" certification during my senior year in CSULA. Furthermore, I am currently preparing for my professional engineering exam and aiming to pass the test before my master's graduation. 

UCLA is being known as one of the most top learning facilities for the student who is seeking a quality education experience. With the optimistic perspectives, students who graduate from UCLA in any field of the industry could have a better chance of finding themselves as part of the community and be able to improve the surrounding with their outstanding performances. UCLA also earned its reputation as one of the top research-based universities; students would have sufficient access to resources, new technologies and types of equipment, and leading faculties. With all the adequate assistance at UCLA, numerous well-educated students contributed prominent game-changing innovations. 

I am confident that UCLA will provide me with a robust understanding of engineering materials and get me ready to step into the engineering field and fulfill my duty and responsibility as an engineer.

I love to spend my free time researching new infrastructures, including all various contemporary buildings and bridges, I am always impressed by the designers and the numerous amount of engineering calculations and analysis.

At the same time, I also have a passion for transportation engineering as my second intended engineering field. 

I graduated last year. Asian American scholarship (high school). Outstanding graduates. GPA (3.7/4.0).

I have Team working skills. Preparing good Presentations. Group leader…