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sf.docxStudent Feedback Form- Compare & Contrast Essay
Essay Title: Old telephones vs. modern smartphones
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General Essay Evaluation |
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Thesis Statement |
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☐ Good |
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Comments : · The last part of the thesis is unclear |
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Essay & Body Paragraph Structure |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Body paragraph 1: Storage Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good
Body paragraph 2: Apps Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good
Body paragraph 3: Plans Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good
Body paragraph 4: Internet Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good
Body paragraph 5: Uses Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Missing the controlling idea
Body paragraph 6: Communication Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Good
Body paragraph 7: Mobile line Topic sentence: Good Wrap-sentence: Missing the controlling idea
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Conclusion |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Comments : · You did not mention ALL the points of comparison in the conclusion |
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APA Formatting |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Comments : · Missing the correct header · Missing the title on the front page
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Language Use |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Comments: · See highlights in yellow for grammar corrections to make |
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Mechanics |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Comments: · See highlights in yellow for corrections |
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Use of Sources Evaluation: Reliability/Citation |
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Did the student use 3 sources? |
☐ Needs improvement |
☒ Good |
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Are there at least 3 in-text citations, one from each source? |
☐ Needs improvement |
☒ Good |
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Is the References page formatted correctly? |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Comments : · Use hanging indent |
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Are all sources reliable, relevant and appropriate? |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Comments: · Berenguer et. Al (2017) is NOT relevant- it talks about seniors using cell phones- You should choose sources that are directly related to your topic. This source IS NOT directly related to it. · |
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Are all sources correctly paraphrased or directly quoted (no plagiarism)? |
☒ Needs improvement |
☒ Good |
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Comments : · The information cited for Berenguer et al. (2017) is common knowledge and does not need to be cited because everyone knows it. Please find a better source and another citation that is necessary, NOT common knowledge. |
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Are in-text citations in the correct format? |
☒ Needs improvement |
☐ Good |
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Comments : · There are several sources cited that have multiple authors but you only cited ONE author- please check PURDUE OWL for the correct way to cite multiple authors |
Draft A Grade Estimate:
See the highlighted box for the estimated grade range for each of the areas in your essay. The estimate will help you know which areas you need to improve before the final grade.
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Grading Criteria |
VERY GOOD - EXCELLENT |
AVERAGE -GOOD |
POOR - FAIR |
VERY POOR |
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Content/Development (out of 30%): |
27-30% |
22-26% |
17-21% |
13-16% |
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Organization/Essay Structure (out of 30%): |
27-30% |
22-26% |
17-21% |
13-16% |
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Grammar/Language Use (out of 15%): |
13-15% |
10-12% |
7-9% |
0-6% |
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Formatting (out of 15%): |
13-15% |
10-12% |
7-9% |
0-6% |
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Mechanics (out of 10%): |
8-10% |
5-7% |
2-4% |
0-2% |
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Overall Grade = |
Total % points X 1.5 = _____/150 points |
