EDIT a paper

MGT 431 (G) Fall 2017

Re: SAP Internal Analysis

1. Human resources

Major improvements are needed:

a) This section does not meet the writing requirement. There are many grammatical errors and unclear sentences. The following are only three examples:

P13: “All through its venture, Trash Butler is well known to be very committed in ensuring every other player in its field of business is well in the same play and focus to which the economic hard times have had to be dealt with by the institution.”

P14: “Although the interviewing process considers the applicant’s technical skills, he will be hired primarily based on their character.”

P14: “The collecting the application on a central point then follows this.”

b) Many descriptions are not data-based, but your group’s own ideas. For example, does Trash Butler really receive “thousands of applications”? Evidence?

c) The last paragraph is not relevant to HR

Suggestion: rewrite the HR section.

1. Operations

It would be helpful if your group could discuss the operational process: steps used to complete a job