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Submission date: 02-Feb-2022 12:45PM (UTC-0500) Submission ID: 1753552444 File name: rough_draft.docx (19.26K) Word count: 1505 Character count: 7989
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We need APA or MLA format
Great Hook!
Add Citations
Revise Thesis
Revise APA Throughout
Great Analysis
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Nice Paragraph Structure
Add Topic Sentence
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Nice Paragraph Structure
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Nice Opposing Viewpoint
Add Outside Evidence
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rough draft.docx ORIGINALITY REPORT
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Submitted to Southern New Hampshire University - Continuing Education Student Paper
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rough draft.docx GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
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We need APA or MLA format
You have the start of formatting here. Move into APA or MLA as you move forward.
Great Hook!
Great hook!
Add Citations
You seem to have information here that should be cited. Make sure to cite any time you use outside information.
Revise Thesis
You have a great start of your thesis. Look back at the Week 5 Reading on thesis and my Announcement as you revise.
Revise APA Throughout In APA,] you should list the author and the date in the first sentence of information. Something like According to Smith (2019) the measles vaccine… or According to the CDC (2019) the measles vaccine… This is dependent on whether the source has an author. See our library for further focus - https://libguides.snhu.edu/apa
Great Analysis
Great analysis. this is what we need more of throughout.
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Nice Paragraph Structure
Nice Paragraph Structure.
Add Topic Sentence
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Add Topic Sentence. Never start with evidence.
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Nice Paragraph Structure
Nice Paragraph Structure.
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Nice Opposing Viewpoint
Nice Opposing Viewpoint Section!
Add Outside Evidence
Where is your outside evidence? We need outside evidence in every Body Paragraph. Remember that we are not experts.
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