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Madonna Robinson

ENG/100

February 2018

Korijna Valenti

How sports positively affect children

Thesis statement: Sports play a vital role in developing positive behavior and social skills in children. [This is a little too simplistic. It should reflect your three main points specifically.]

Sports participation has been associated with several positive developmental indicators that encompass improvement of self-esteem, emotional regulation, achievement of goals and improvement of social skills and academic performance, and creating emotional balance. [What is this section? It doesn’t seem to have a place in the essay, as it’s not a thesis statement and it’s not a body paragraph.]

Boosting Self Esteem

Children who participate in sports are likely to have a higher self—esteem compared to those who do not participate. Boosting the self-esteem of children has an impact on influencing their positive behavior. However, the link between sports participation is influenced by the children's sports self-concept (Slutzky & Simpkins, 2009). The self-esteem of children is grounded in their academic and non-academic areas. Based on skill development hypothesis, children's perceived competence in sports is associated with an increase in self-esteem. Children’s physical self-concept is a core model through which their time spent in sporting improves their level of self-esteem (Slutzky & Simpkins, 2009). Sports participants often have a perceived physical competence and self-worth, which subsequently make them develop heightened self-esteem. [This reads like a good set of notes that can help you create a cohesive discussion of the point, but each sentence seems to be its own topic sentence rather than creating a through-line from one sentence to the next. Try to write the paragraph sentence by sentence where the next sentence relates to the previous sentence and moves the discussion forward. Otherwise, you end up with a choppy and fragmented paragraph.] [Last reminder—This is a repeated error. Please read the rest of the document carefully to locate other similar errors.] Comment by Korijna Valenti: What does this mean? Comment by Korijna Valenti: What is a sport’s self-concept? This idea is confusing. Comment by Korijna Valenti: By whom? Comment by Korijna Valenti: Awkward phrasing. Is this yours or the support’s?

Building cCharacter

Participation in sports makes children to develop a sense of belonging by belonging to a team or a particular group. In the process, the children get to interact with friends and peers in a cordial manner (Holt et al., 2011). This makes children consider and respect the interests of other teammates through mutual respect and interaction(Holt et al., 2011). They get to work together while taking turns to play to learn the success and failure of the team. This level of interaction strikes a bond and a lasting relationship with teammates hence making them sociable and outgoing while growing into adulthood. Most children who participate in sports are often more confident, fitter, and healthier. [This is only six sentences long, which means it is not a fully developed paragraph reflecting the main point. Each paragraph needs to be 7-10 sentence long in order to comprehensively explain your idea.]

Creating eEmotional bBalance

Sports rather on a team or individually can stabilize emotions and instill emotional balance in children. Sports participants experience positive effects on their mental well-being. Physical activities often trigger the production of endorphins in the brain, which subsequently boosts moods and prevents one from getting into depression(Slutzky & Simpkins, 2009). Studies have indicated that children who participate in sports have a better way of dealing with pressing situations and are less likely to experience depression. They also have a low likelihood of developing anxiety. [This is only five sentences long, which means it is not a fully developed paragraph reflecting the main point. Each paragraph needs to be 7-10 sentence long in order to comprehensively explain your idea.]

References

Holt, N., Kingsley, B., Tink, L., & Scherer, J. (2011). Benefits and challenges associated with sports participation by children and parents from low-income families. Psychology of Sport and Exercise, 490-499.

Slutzky, C., & Simpkins, S. (2009). The link between children's sports participation and self-esteem: Exploring the mediating role of sports self-concept. Psychology of Sport and Exercise, 381-389.