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Worksheet for the Peer Review of the Research Paper

Address the following thoughtfully and thoroughly in your review

Review Category Number

Review Category

Reviewer’s Comments

1

Format

Is the paper formatted properly according to MLA style guidelines? 

· Suggest what to fix, including headings, title, margins, font, page numbers, and last name header

There are a few grammar and punctuation errors.

2

Thesis

· Write down the thesis statement of the paper

· How can this sentence be improved to become more precise, detailed, or interesting?

· Is it argumentative or merely summary?

· Describe what makes it effective or suggest changes

This essay compares the short story and the film in regards to the life of Emily’s character.

It is summarizing the essay.

3

Introduction

· Is the introductory paragraph interesting?

· What makes it effective?

·  How can the author improve the introduction?

· Does it do enough to set the context of the story, mention the title of the work, author’s name, etc.

· Does it prepare the reader for the thesis?

· If not, suggest improvements

It draws my attention because I am interested in history and it talks about how this related to life in that time period.

4

Paragraph Development

· Does each paragraph have enough examples, reasoning, proofs, or explanation?

· Which body paragraphs need more development?

There are enough examples but not enough quotes or references to back the information.

5

Use of Quotes and Outside Sources

· Does the writer user enough quotations? Too many?

· Where could the writer add or delete quotations? 

· Explain your suggestions

There is a lack of quotes in this essay. The first reference from the book isn’t until the end of the third paragraph. I think quotes could be added in the second paragraph when talking about the story related to actual life in the south during this time.

6

Overall Impressions – Essay’s Strengths

· What is the best part of the research paper?

· Why?

It explained the story effectively, on how society related the story in this time period.

7

Overall Impressions – Essay’s Weaknesses

· What part of the research paper needs the most revision?

There need to be more references on how society was after the civil war. There are no references discussing this issue.

8

Grammar and Mechanics

· List any grammar, punctuation, mechanical, or syntax problems detected.

· You don’t have to point out each error.

· You can point to categories of errors like run-on sentences or improper comma usage

There are commas missing in a few places. There were also a few Improper word placements as well. A word or two was also misspelled.

In a few sentences, please list any additional thoughts, comments or concerns about the essay: