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Rosalyn Albright

Assignment: Week 3 - Assignment

Course: ENG122 ENG122: English Composition II (PTF1742M)

Nicole Elliott 11/8/2017 11:09:56 AM

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Hi, Rosalyn.

Thank you for submitting your rough draft.  As we now begin to prepare for the final draft that will be due in Week 5, everyone should be focused on identifying the weaknesses or areas needing improvement. My feedback is designed with goal in mind. I do understand, though, that it is sometimes challenging to receive this type of critique. Know that even students earning 100% of the points will receive this type of feedback.  We are unable to make improvements until we are aware that they are needed.  Please carefully review the comments that I have inserted into your Waypoint document. 

Tips for Improving Focus

 Right now, some of your claims are off-topic. Make sure that you are addressing the focus as it is defined in the research question. This is why your work continues to be "below expectations." Your essay explains how fake news is spread and it describes the ways in which it effects society. It does not explain a) why people find it difficult to identify, and b) how we might limit its influence, potential solutions. These topics do not appear to the focus of most body paragraphs.

Research Question: Why is "fake news" so hard to identify and what can be done to limit its influence in society?

Essays responding to this prompt should focus on two issues: 1) identify specific reasons why "fake news" is difficult to identify, and 2) identify potential solutions that would work to limit its influence.

Fake news is difficult to identify because . . .  [Identify 3-4 reasons]

The influence of fake news may be limited by  . . .[Identify at least 1 potential solution]

Each paragraph in your essay should focus on these two issues.

"Success consists of going from failure to failure without loss of enthusiasm." - Winston Churchill

 "Let me tell you the secret that has led me to my goals: my strength lies solely in my tenacity."  - Louis Pasteur, French Chemist and Microbiologist

"The problem is not the problem. The problem is your attitude about the problem."  - Fictional Character Captain Jack Sparrow

Revision is an essential part of being an effective writer, being WILLING to write multiple drafts. Take Mr. Churchill's advice and don't lose your ENTHUSIASM as you become aware of your mistakes. This is an ESSENTIAL part of the learning process. See the "problem" as an opportunity, like our friend Mr. Sparrow. And, like Louis Pasteur, be tenacious!

Nicole

 

 

( 5.25 / 8.00) Draft Development

Below Expectations - The draft provides barely enough content, sources, or other features essential for the instructor to provide extensive feedback.

( 0.00 / 0.00) Structure

Below Expectations - Draft is centered on a topic or theme, but it lacks a thesis or controlling idea that focuses the paper. The topic or theme is minimally developed through a paragraph structure; topic sentences are absent, and some paragraphs do not advance the topic. The concluding paragraph is absent, or it does not refer back to the paper's thesis, summarize the main points, and/or give final direction to the reader.

( 0.00 / 0.00) Development

Below Expectations - Draft's thesis or controlling idea is minimally developed in the body of the paper; the sequence of ideas lacks logic and focus. Paragraphs are not adequately supported by examples and evidence and/or the draft does not meet the minimum length requirement.

( 0.00 / 0.00) Style

Basic - Draft utilizes techniques of research writing, including language that is mostly appropriate to audience and purpose, although not entirely concise. Errors in word choice and sentence construction are present.

( 0.00 / 0.00) Grammar

Basic - Draft uses the proper conventions of the English language most of the time. Some mechanical errors detract from the development of the content.

( 0.00 / 0.00) Resource Requirement

Basic - Uses less than the required number of sources to support ideas. Some sources may not be scholarly. Most sources on the reference page are used within the body of the assignment. Citations may not be formatted correctly.

( 0.00 / 0.00) APA Formatting

Basic - Draft uses some APA formatting, but does not meet all APA requirements. Draft contains a title page and reference page.

Overall Score: 5.25 / 8.00

Overall Grade: 5.25

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