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English 101 Revision Essay Assignment & Rubric

Assignment Of your previously written and evaluated essays--the Narrative Essay, the Illustration Essay, and the Cause/Effect Essay—select the one you wish to revise. NOTE: You may NOT select an essay on which you earned a zero for not completing it.

Your revised work must reflect the following changes:

• Audience. Target a very specific audience, which must be different from the class instructor. You will need to adjust the essay content to address the needs of that audience.

• Length. Expand the essay by at least 700 words. In other words, your revised piece should be 700 words longer than the required length of the original essay. To develop the essay content, first revise or refine your thesis. Then, add supporting ideas and/or strengthen the existing supporting ideas with additional details or research.

• Research. Add at least one more source to the number of sources required for the original assignment.

• Feedback. Carefully review your instructor’s feedback on your original submission and make the recommended changes.

Your grade on the Revision Essay does not replace your grade on the original essay: it is a Major Writing Assignment of its own, worth 150 points.

Format Your paper must in correct MLA format (9th edition) with the standard MLA heading. Use the Word Count tool to determine the number of words. At the end of your paper, skip a line and then type the following: Word count: xxx words

Submission You MUST submit your essay electronically through the Assignment in Canvas as a Microsoft Word file. In the comment area of your submission, specify your target audience.

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Rubric for Revision Essay with Sources (150 pts.)

Criteria Score

Introduction Content (15 points) Excellent 14-15; Good 12-13; Satisfactory 11; Poor 9-10; Failing 0-8 1. The introduction effectively hooks the reader, establishes the purpose and importance of the topic, and

provides any necessary background to effectively set up the thesis. 2. The thesis is at the end of the introduction, clearly expresses the main idea of the essay, makes a

significant point about the topic, and presents a plan of development for sub-topics.

/15

Body Content (25 points) Excellent 23-25; Good 20-22; Satisfactory 18-19; Poor 15-17; Failing 0-14 1. The paper meets the length requirement, and the word count is at the bottom of the paper. 2. Each body paragraph is supported with concrete, specific, relevant and ample support related to the

topic sentence.

/25

Conclusion Content (10 points) Excellent 9-10; Good 8; Satisfactory 7; Poor 6; Failing 0-5 1. The essay contains an appropriate and adequately developed conclusion that brings closure to the

essay. 2. The conclusion restates the thesis, briefly summarizes the main points of the essay, and presents an

implication (or so-what).

/10

Organization (15 points) Excellent 14-15; Good 12-13; Satisfactory 11; Poor 9-10; Failing 0-8 1. Each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that indicates the sub-topic being addressed in that

paragraph. 2. Paragraphs are arranged in a logical order. 3. Appropriate transitions are used both within paragraphs and between paragraphs to show logical

connections between ideas. 4. Paragraphs are unified: every sentence clearly supports the topic sentence. 5. Paragraphs are coherent: the sentences flow clearly and logically from one to another.

/15

Style/Grammar/Punctuation/Mechanics (25 points) Excellent 23-25; Good 20-22; Satisfactory 18-19; Poor 15-17; Failing 0-14 1. Essay is written in first or third-person point of view, and second-person (you) is avoided. 2. Sentences are clear, coherent, and unambiguous. There are no missing words and/or awkward

constructions. 3. The paper is relatively free of distracting errors in grammar, punctuation and spelling. 4. Word choice is effective and appropriate for a college essay. Language is precise. 5. There is clarity of thought and expression in the essay.

/25

MLA Format (10 points) Excellent 9-10; Good 8; Satisfactory 7; Poor 6; Failing 0-5 1. Essay is in readable 11 or 12-pt. font. 2. Essay is left-aligned. 3. Essay has 1-inch margins. 4. Essay has correct MLA heading on 1st page. 5. Essay has a centered, meaningful title in title-style capitalization below the heading. 6. Essay has correct MLA header, created using “insert header,” on pages after the first. 7. Essay has correct word count one line below the last line.

/10

MLA Use of Sources (50 points) Excellent 45-50; Good 40-44; Satisfactory 35-39; Poor 30-34; Failing 0-29 1. All material from sources is cited both in text and on the Works Cited page. 2. Quotations and other source materials are well integrated, introduced, and explained. 3. Quotations and other source materials clearly support the subject matter being addressed they are

relevant and significant. 4. Quotations and other source materials are accurately and correctly cited within the body of the paper. 5. The Works Cited page is correctly formatted and complete.

NOTE: Plagiarism will cause you to receive a zero on the paper.

/50

Total: /150