RPA63

Think of the thesis as a statement of your point. Can the reader read this and know what YOUR point is about the subject? Imagine that the reader is only going to read that one sentence... what point do you want them to get?

Typically, the thesis statement is the final sentence of the first paragraph.

According to CDC (Centre for Disease Control and Prevention), more than 59 million people of the USA was suffering from this disease, and approximately 265000 were hospitalized, and more than 12000 people have died.

This is a factual statement rather than a thesis statement because it expresses an inarguable state. Facts are not arguable: they are either correct or incorrect. If we say the capital of the US is Washington, DC, we have stated a correct fact. Nobody will try to persuade us that the capital of the US is actually some other city, and even if they tried, they would be stating an incorrect fact.

Paragraphs have the idea (or assertion) AND evidence/support: examples, facts, and/or analysis. It often helps to see if you can find some well-written published papers in your field to serve as models. You'll notice that usually each paragraph has one central idea stated in the first (topic) sentence, and the rest of the paragraph supports that with evidence and analysis. For another idea, there is another paragraph—that is, the topic sentence tells the reader what this paragraph is about, and that's all the paragraph should be about.

If your paper is about H1N1, then every paragraph should be about H1N1.

In the battle of 2009 H1 / N1, the planet lost a quarter of a million people. The "achievements" of the coronavirus so far look much more modest: as of February 1, more than 11,790 cases of the disease and 259 deaths were recorded in China (Courtney, 2009). WHO on January 30 declared an international emergency. The Chinese government also expects that the peak of the coronavirus will come within a week, after which the outbreak will decline.

That paragraph is about the covid-19 coronavirus, which is a different topic. Why is this relevant to a paper about H1N1? Each paragraph must support the thesis by developing the idea in the thesis.

Each paragraph you write should be about five to eight or so sentences including:

· a topic sentence,

· three to five supporting sentences,

· a concluding sentence.

Your topic sentence should introduce the main idea of your paragraph. The supporting sentences should further explain the main topic of the idea. You can use examples, summaries, direct quotes, or paraphrases to help develop and support your main idea. Lastly, you should write a concluding sentence that “wraps up” or recaps the main thought of the paragraph. The last sentence can also help you lead into the next paragraph of your essay. For further assistance with writing solid paragraphs, please read the handout, “ Paragraph Development ,” from UNC.

APA References page:

You have good sources there! Here are a few things that might be helpful, but the best approach is to find a good online manual and follow the examples. This isn't something to guess at, because it's not particularly logical. Just find the examples and follow them.

So I'm going to note a couple common issues on References pages:

· First, center "References" at the top of the page. This should be a separate page at the end of the paper.

· Use the standard format you have used in the paper—12 pt font, 1 inch margins, double-spacing. Don't change anything about the format in the references section. Remember—double space. I know it looks kind of bad, but that's the rule!

· The list of entries should be in alphabetical order by the first word in the entry (usually the author's last name).

· Notice the "hanging indent" with the second and subsequent lines indented. This is done in Word—just highlight the entry and click Format and Paragraph, and then in the drop-down menu under "Special," choose "Hanging" and then click Okay. Voila!

· Put a period at the end of each part of the entry, like after the title entry. You don't need a period after a URL, but otherwise, the entry should end with a period.

· Italicize only book and journal titles, not article titles.

· Here are a couple examples—you can find more on the websites below:

APA IN-TEXT CITATIONS

Please keep in mind that anything you copy, paraphrase, or rely on for ideas, facts or data must be clearly attributed to its source and documented. With this in mind, please be sure a parenthetical citation appears after every quote in this essay.

Many of the sentences in your paper need citation. Some of them have no citation information at all, and some have incomplete citation information.

According to representatives of the administration, the declaration signed by the president is similar to a warning about the storm leaving the sea on the land.

In 2016, there were reports that 18 people died during the epidemiological season due to swine flu.

"This pandemic was much more successful than what we were afraid a little over a year ago," the WHO Director-General said in a statement.

Remember, APA wants two things in an in-text citation: author’s name and publication year. APA prefers a signal phrase (underlined below) and a tag (bolded):

As John Smith (2005) notes, “the sky is blue” (p.12).

If you don’t use a signal phrase and tag, put the name and date in an end parenthetical reference.

“The sky is blue” (Smith, 2005, p.11).

Based on the APA's recommendation in section 6.19 of the 6th ed. Publication Manual about including visible page numbers, paragraph numbers, or section information when citing specific parts of a source (APA, 2009, p.179), the UMUC Library and the EWC recommend always including page numbers (or paragraph numbers or section information) in your APA in-text citations. This includes citations of quotations (words or phrases from a source) as well as paraphrases and summaries (the author’s ideas rewritten in your own words).  We also suggest consulting your course materials or your professor if you have questions or concerns, because professors often have specific citation requirements.

If you don’t have an author’s last name, go with the title of the article. If you don’t have an article title, go with the name of the organization. If you don’t have that, you’re probably working with a web source, so go with the name of the website; barring that, the URL.

How to Punctuate Quotations

Use quotation marks to enclose a source’s exact language. If the words are not an exact quote, do not use quotation marks.

“This is what the source says,” according to the source.

Periods and commas always belong inside the quotation marks.

CORRECT: “Interesting fact,” he asserted.

INCORRECT: “Interesting fact”, he asserted.

as "swine flu".

Also, you will need to cite that quote.

PROOFREAD

There are a few minor grammatical and mechanical errors in your writing. You will want to proofread carefully. Please use LEO's handout on editing and proofreading strategies handout in conjunction with your paper because it will help you to catch other errors that we did not talk about above.

It might also be helpful to read your paper aloud or use your computer’s text-to-speech function to hear it read to you. This will help you catch mistakes. Reading aloud helps you to “hear” mistakes that your eyes can sometimes skip over, such as missing words, extra words, or misused words.

Six among these patients were reported to be lived near pigs

That should be live.

To see how to use your computer’s built-in text-to-speech software, check these links.

For Macs:

http://cst.edu/wp-content/uploads/2016/07/Speech-to-Text-Instructions-Mac-10.9.pdf

For Windows:

http://cst.edu/wp-content/uploads/2016/07/Speech_to_Text_Instructions_-_Windows.pdf