Revised Paragraph for TO-BE Verbs

Be SURE you make corrections from my comments on your revised diagnostic essay. 

You will have a significant point deduction if you do not make revisions that extend beyond replacing the "TO-BE" verbs. 

Obviously, if you don't have my feedback yet, you will have to wait until that is uploaded, but you could still select the paragraph you intend to revise and work on that before my feedback arrives.

** If you did not submit the original revised diagnostic essay, you must work from the essay as you wrote it without having my input for improvement. 

This assignment, though brief, counts as a full paper grade, and I expect to see significant revisions BEYOND the comments I have made.  Make sure you review your paper carefully, and make certain to review the samples that will be posted.

 

YOU MUST USE A BODY PARAGRAPH THAT HAS BEEN GRADED, AND I WILL BE COMPARING THIS PAPER TO THE COMMENTS I MADE ON THE REVISED DIAGNOSTIC ESSAY. YOU MUST MAKE THE CHANGES AND SUBMIT A FULLY-REVISED PARAGRAPH.

 

Also, I expect you to avoid those words in future submissions; they weaken your writing.