final research paper 9-2

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Paper Title:

No. of Pages: 7

Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Research

Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No

Feedback Areas: Grammar & Mechanics, Sentence Structure

Paper Goals: This assignment is worth 350 points. I am not a good writer. I need help with

grammatical errors and use appropriate phrase. I need my paper to flow.

Proofing Summary:

Hello Deanna,

Thank you for submitting your research paper.

Strengths:

You've begun to gather a lot of potentially useful information here, including material from outside sources.

This helps to ensure there are plenty of detail to flesh out each topic included in the discussion.

Suggestions:

-Thesis Statement

-Essay Structure

The thesis should be framed to match the type of essay you are constructing, whether it be persuasion or

analysis functioning as the focus. Currently, the thesis states what you will discuss but is not framed in a

manner that shows what type of essay you're constructing.

Several issues with organization, grammar and mechanics have been noted throughout the essay. The

placement of quotes are important to the essay. Generally, quotes should be avoid being placed at the start or

end of the paragraphs. Specific example are covered in the essay.

If you would like to submit a revision of your paper, you are welcome to do so. We look forward to helping you

succeed!

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Consider avoiding quotes in the

introduction. The intro should be a basic

overview of the subject, to provide

general context that will help the reader

understand the subject you'll discuss.

Specific details on the subject should be

saved for the body paragraphs. The

thesis at the end of the introduction

should reflect the type of essay you're

constructing through its wording. For

example, if a persuasive essay is being

constructed, the thesis should present

the main idea of the paper as a claim on

the issue being discussed. This helps

clarify how the topics of discussion

should develop throughout the body

paragraphs.

Paragraphs should avoid ending with a

quote. There should be a statement after

each quote that gives your reason for

providing the comment, throughout the essay.

To ensure that sentence flow logically

throughout the paper, it would be

wise to end a sentence with a period

after it has expressed a full idea. This

helps to avoid issues with run-on

sentence throughout the paper.

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The main ideas that function as the

topic sentences of each body

paragraph should allude to the

supporting ideas stated in the thesis

statement. This shows that the

concepts stated in the thesis are being

used to develop the essay.

The first-person perspective

should be avoided, unless stated

otherwise by your instructor.

First level heading should be centered

above the paragraph they pertain to

throughout the paper. level one through

four headings should all use bold

lettering throughout the paper in APA.

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Quotes in the topic sentence

should be avoided. The topic

sentence should state the main

idea of the paragraph using your

own words. Quotes should come

after the focus of the paragraph

has been establish.

Et al. should be used for sources with

more than two authors after the first time

the source is cited. The first citations

using that source should state each

name.

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It should always be clear what the subject of

a sentences is, especially when transitioning

to new topics. This makes it immediately

clear what the focus of the discussion is.

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There is an issue with subject-verb

agreement in this statement. The

subject and verb in a sentence should

match in terms of number. If one is

plural the other should be plural as

well.

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Typically, the conclusion is short in

length, a concise reiteration of the

key-points of your essay, without

including new information to develop. The

conclusion should restate the thesis,

briefly summarize the paper, and then

conclude with a lasting final statement

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The conclusion should be a concise

reiteration of the key-points of your

essay, without including new information

to develop. The conclusion should

restate the thesis, briefly summarize the

paper, and then conclude with a lasting

final statement

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The title of the reference page should be

without punctuation.

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