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Bass Lin

Ashley Wells

WR121-25

February 7, 2018

Personalities Influences of the Parents of Adolescent Children and their Style of Parenting

Introduction

The study investigated the relationship between the personalities of the parents of adolescent children and their style of parenting. The issue of parenting style and the behaviour of teenage children brings multiple perspectives from various individuals. Some perceive that being authoritarian to them may bring positive behaviour while others neglect the idea. Personality is identified as the stable complex features in which individual life pattern would be seen (Ferguson Eva Dreikurs et al 43). It is the way of relatively enduring things in which one behaves, thinks and feels. The behaviour of parents and adolescent children is related to personality. The research assessed parental personality traits that are agreeableness, extraversion, and neuroticism and derived parenting styles that are authoritarian, democratic and neglectful. The family is the bedrock of the community and it can either shape or destroy the life of a child. Though environmental factors affect personality development, parents have significant impacts on children behaviour. When a child matures to adolescent remains a child to their parents. The researcher will investigate how democratic, authoritarian neglectful parenting styles influence the personality of parents of adolescent children. Comment by Fei Li: Which study? It is a little bit weird to use an unclear study to begin your essay. It makes your readers to confuse about it. Comment by Fei Li: I think it is better to give this identification at the very beginning of the paragraph. Because it helps you to establish the context for your audiences, also adds your credibility. Comment by Fei Li: Which research again? I think it is better to mention these study and research in your body paragraphs and give more details about them for your readers. Or we will always curious about what is it and what arguments they stand for.

Background of Information Comment by Fei Li: I thin your introduction and your background information have something in common. They could be combine into one paragraph--background information. For your introduction paragraph, I think establish the most basic context for readers and clearly state your proposition statement are the most important thing. It is unnecessary to write one page long for intro.

The society has expectations of every adolescent child based on norms and values each community holds. Individuals are needed to pass through some processes and experience that conform them to societal standards. Also, the media that is television, radio, newspapers, social media and movies portray that parents have great influence on the behaviour of children from being teenagers to adulthood (Huver Rose et al 399). Therefore, parents should nurture their children well by providing necessities like clothes, shelter, food and education as while as helping them to accomplish their future goals. Despite the different steps being passed, there are various patterns of behaviours both the unacceptable and acceptable ones among mature children. It has influenced the duties of persons in academic, home as while as the community. The parents, therefore, have a significant role on personality particularly on adolescent children when they are susceptible to various live styles both negative and positive.

Objectives of the Study

· To ascertain the relationship among neglectful, authoritarian and democratic parenting style and the personality trait of agreeableness of parents among adolescent children Comment by Fei Li: I prefer you to write your research objectives in paragraph, instead of point by point. It is true writing in point is clear, however, only three objectives under one subtitle is "empty". I think besides research objectives, you could also add some contents about the process of researching to enrich your contents in this section. After all, your next section is talking about the "Findings".

· To find out the relationship among neglectful, authoritarian and democratic parenting style and personality traits of extraversion of parents among teenage children

· To identify the influences of authoritarian, democratic and neglectful parenting style and the personality trait of emotional stability or neuroticism among parents of adolescent children

Findings

The study found out that agreeableness parenting traits have significant impacts on the behaviour of teenage children. Agreeableness is the dominant personality traits where a person who possesses this trait is warm, courteous and friendly. They are an optimistic and great desire to help. The agreeableness has a sub-trait for example trust, sympathy, modesty, cooperation, altruism, and morality. The study observes that democratic parenting style is significantly linked with agreeableness trait since parents who have this trait always appreciate the children and involves them in decision making, they prioritize their interests, they work to please them as while as being helpful, considerate and kind (Wolfradt, Uwe, Susanne Hempel & Jeremy NV Miles 528). Also, they are not suspicious or prejudiced thus they don’t discriminate their children, they are good nurtures, humble, compassionate, cooperative, honest and emotionally supportive. Therefore, the study observed that democratic leadership is vital since it supports adolescent children by encouraging them to be innovative as while as impacting problem-solving skills towards daily activities. Comment by Fei Li: It is better to give readers more details about the study, instead of stating directly about the research results. Comment by Fei Li: It is important for us (audiences) to know what kinds of the study it is, in order to persuade us to believe what you are talking about. Comment by Fei Li: Good summary!

From the research, the extraversion parenting trait goes hand in hand with authoritarian leadership styles and may influence the behaviour of the adolescent. Extraversion implies energetic, sociability, assertiveness and talkativeness (Huver Rose et al 397). They thrive on enthusiastic, excitement and they are action-oriented. Extraversion comprises of sub-traits that is friendliness, gregariousness, assuredness, activity level, cheerfulness and enthusiasm seeking. The study observes that there is a link between authoritarian leadership styles and extraversion traits. Adolescent children of extravert parents likely tend to portray negative behaviour because they lack influences. They guide their children with authority because they are poor listeners, likes conflict, dominates interactions and does not involve them in decision making (Aunola, Kaisa, Håkan Stattin & Jari-Erik Nurmi 215). Due to this, adolescent children become aggressive, naughty, lack creativity in problem-solving thus failing to accomplish the goals in future. Comment by Fei Li: Great thesis statement! Comment by Fei Li: It is reasonable, persuasive, and credible enough for me.

Additionally, the research observes that the neglectful leadership style is associated with emotion stability or neuroticism parenting traits and have impacts on adolescent children. Neuroticism is a personality trait that is associated with worry, fear, anger, anxiety, frustration, envy, jealousy, loneliness and depressed mood. Such people are sometimes shy and self-conscious as they have problems in controlling urges as while as delaying gratification. The parents who have neuroticism traits portrays neglectful parenting styles to their adolescent children which means lack of parental care to children. Such parents may avoid children so that they cannot cater for them. Neglectful or uninvolved parenting is influencing by emotional detachment, too many problems, the influence of abusive substances and drugs, lack of supervision and low expectations (Ferguson Eva Dreikurs et al 43). Therefore, neglectful parents tend to affect the behaviour of adolescent children. For instance, they tend to become emotionally weak, they fail to differentiate wrong or right, and others always feel bitter. Comment by Fei Li: Clear thesis statement for this paragraph! Comment by Fei Li: It is a great place to give examples. But if you can specify these instances will be great.

Conclusion

In conclusion, the research observes that there is a relationship between the personalities to the parents of adolescent children and their style of parenting. The paper showed agreeableness traits is closely associated with democratic parenting style while extraversion personality trait linked with authoritarian leadership style while emotional stability trait was related to neglectful parenting style. The issue of parenting styles has been a global problem varying across ethnic groups, socioeconomic status and cultures (Metsäpelto, Riitta‐Leena & Lea Pulkkinen 65). It has risen an argument regarding the relationship between child development and parenting. It is assumed that families may use multiple disciplinary techniques, emotional strategies and parenting practices that are influenced by contexts of cultural beliefs, situational demands, features of a child and parenting to shape their adolescent children. Comment by Fei Li: In text citation should be here. Comment by Fei Li: I think it is better to use your own sentences or pahraprase other scholars thoughts here at conclusion. I don't think it is a suitable place to cite others arguments.

Recommendation Comment by Fei Li: It is great to combine this section with conclusion part.

· The adolescent children are very vital since they are parents and leaders of tomorrow. From the research, the following recommendations were obtained;

· Information concerning parenting styles influence on personality traits to children should be given to all parents. It will help them understand the role of parenting and parenting style they should embrace.

· The adolescent children should be taught on how to handle their children when they become parents

· Parents should support their children to attain their future goals for example in education, workplace and community as a while as monitoring them to meet their expectations.

Works cited

Aunola, Kaisa, Håkan Stattin, and Jari-Erik Nurmi. "Parenting styles and adolescents' achievement strategies." Journal of adolescence 23.2 (2000): 205-222.

Ferguson, Eva Dreikurs, et al. "From leadership to parenthood: The applicability of leadership styles to parenting styles." Group Dynamics: Theory, Research, and Practice 10.1 (2006): 43.

Huver, Rose ME, et al. "Personality and parenting style in parents of adolescents." Journal of Adolescence 33.3 (2010): 395-402.

Metsäpelto, Riitta‐Leena, and Lea Pulkkinen. "Personality traits and parenting: Neuroticism, extraversion, and openness to experience as discriminative factors." European Journal of Personality 17.1 (2003): 59-78.

Wolfradt, Uwe, Susanne Hempel, and Jeremy NV Miles. "Perceived parenting styles, depersonalisation, anxiety and coping behaviour in adolescents." Personality and individual differences 34.3 (2003): 521-532.

Descriptive Response：

Yisheng is trying to figure out what kinds of education pattern is the best one both for parents and children, whether or not be strict to child is good, and what influences will have under this kind of education pattern. In his essay, studies from other scholars are his primary research methods. Also, quoting other authors’ materials and research results is his way to make his essay more credible and persuasive for his audiences.

Evaluative Response：

What kinds of style of parenting is also a social topic which be talked about all the time in China. I believe the author also has his own opinions about this issue, and his essay successfully proved that his arguments through combining other scholars researches with his own thoughts. Abundant quotations and studies’ results the author used in his essay add the credibility. Also, the subtitle like introduction, background of information, objectives of study, findings, conclusions clearly divided his passage into several different parts, which provides a clear structure both for himself and the readers. However, I still have several suggestions which hope is helpful to him. First of all, it is about the sources you used in passage. You always give straight to your audiences about the results of the studies, instead of telling us the process of it. I will advise you to specify and give more details to your readers about what kinds of study it is , what is the process of the study, and what is the purpose of doing this study. I believe tell more about this study is more important than tell the result to your audiences, which also could add your credibility. Secondly, I think you always cite a really long sentence from other scholars. I can understand that citing other scholars’ research results and sentences will make your passage more persuasive or you have great resonate with them. However, sometimes you can express your hugh agreement through paraphrasing and stating the opinion through your words. That’s would be great and also can add the credibility for your essay. Last but not least, it is better to use some statistics or personal experiences to further support your arguments. The style of parenting is varied from person to person. If you want, I believe your readers also want to know about your family’s education pattern and your influence under this style of patenting. No matter it is “positive” or “negative”, your personal examples will help your passage more credible and persuasive. Hope my suggestions could help you a little bit. Good luck!